公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with verb tense, word choice and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence using past tense (e.g., “Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.”), avoid repeating words, correct vocabulary (park, swings, slides, weekends), and keep it concise (maximum 3–4 short sentences). Add one specific detail to make it vivid.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I especially enjoyed the swings and the big slides because they were exciting. My parents often took us there on weekends for picnics, and I remember running around with my friends until it got dark.

建議: Use clear, fluent sentences and avoid fillers (uh, and). Use present simple for habitual actions and vary vocabulary. Limit to 2–3 sentences: a direct topic sentence, a reason, and a brief example. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I am a morning person and like to exercise there. I usually go for a jog and do yoga in the park because the fresh air and quiet paths help me relax.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then one specific reason or example. Correct grammar (e.g., “fond of,” “get a chance,” “I have been to many parks”). Avoid long repetitive phrases. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ to be coherent.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide places for exercise and family outings. I have already been to several parks and often explore new ones when I get the chance.

建議: Answer directly and briefly. Use future tense correctly and be specific if possible. Remove filler words and unclear phrases. If you don’t have a specific park, say so and offer a clear plan (e.g., look for new parks online or ask friends).

範例: At the moment I don't have a specific park in mind, but I plan to visit any interesting new parks I hear about. If I find a recommended botanical garden or a lakeside park, I will definitely go next month.

× Yes, in my childhood I love to visit Pak.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I loved to visit parks.

The sentence describes a past habitual action, so the past tense 'loved' is required instead of present 'love'. Also 'Pak' appears to be a typo and should be 'parks'. Use past tense for childhood activities and correct the noun spelling.

× I am fond of various slides such as seesaw and numerous other slides as well.

✓ I was fond of playground equipment such as the seesaw and many other slides.

When speaking about childhood, use past tense 'was' rather than 'am'. 'Seesaw' is a single item so use 'the seesaw'. Repeating 'slides' is redundant; 'many other slides' or 'many other pieces of equipment' is clearer.

× My parents also took me there for weekend for my as a picnic spot.

✓ My parents also took me there on weekends as a picnic spot.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'weekends'. Remove the extra 'for' and the phrase 'for my' which is ungrammatical. 'As a picnic spot' correctly explains the purpose.

× Definitely, I love to visit parks nowadays as well as I am a morning person.

✓ Definitely, I love visiting parks nowadays because I am a morning person.

Use the gerund 'visiting' after 'love' for general preferences. 'Because' connects the ideas more naturally than 'as well as' in this context.

× I wake up early in the morning and uh, and uh, and visit the park for my exercise and other healthy yoga and meditations and I, I loved it.

✓ I wake up early in the morning and visit the park for exercise, yoga, and meditation, and I love it.

Remove filler 'uh' and repeated words. Use consistent present tense 'love' to match 'wake up' (habitual present). Use countable list punctuation and singular 'meditation'. 'My exercise' is unnatural; 'exercise' is preferred.

× As I told you I am fond to visit the park and whenever I get chance I love to explore more number of parks in my city and till today I have went a number of parks and I love these places very much.

✓ As I told you, I am fond of visiting parks, and whenever I get the chance I love to explore more parks in my city; so far I have been to a number of parks and I love these places very much.

Use 'fond of' not 'fond to'. After 'fond of' use the gerund 'visiting'. Insert 'the' in 'get the chance'. 'Explore more number of parks' is awkward; use 'explore more parks'. Use present perfect 'have been to' rather than 'have went'.

× Right now I don't have any certain topic that in my that I mentioned in my last list to visit any kind of recreational park or area.

✓ Right now I don't have any specific park in mind from the list I mentioned earlier to visit.

'Don't have any certain topic' is incorrect; use 'any specific park in mind'. Simplify and reorder the sentence for clarity. 'Mentioned in my last list' becomes 'mentioned earlier'. Keep present tense 'don't have' for current state.

× But uh, yes, as I told you, I am fond of visiting various parks, so if I get to know about certain parts, I will definitely visit the park.

✓ But yes, as I told you, I am fond of visiting various parks, so if I hear about any particular park, I will definitely visit it.

Remove filler 'uh'. 'Get to know about certain parts' is unclear; use 'hear about any particular park'. Use 'visit it' to refer back to 'park'. Maintain future 'will visit' for future action.