公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 在回答中要减少填充词（如 uh, um），句子结构要完整并直接回应问题。开头用一句主题句回答问题，然后用一到两句具体细节展开（时间、频率、活动或感受），并使用连接词使语句连贯。注意时态一致性和单复数形式。

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my friends and we usually played sports such as basketball or badminton. If the weather was nice, we would stay there for hours and sometimes have a picnic.

建議: 回答要用清晰的主句说明现在的情况，然后用具体细节解释原因和频率。避免语法错误（例如时态和主谓一致），用连接词（because, so, usually）来衔接原因和结果，尽量把句子控制在五句以内。

範例: Yes, I still like going to parks, but I go less often now because I am busy with my studies. I usually visit the park at weekends, and sometimes after finishing an exam I go there with friends to relax and play sports.

建議: 回答要直接表明观点并给出具体理由和例子，避免词序和语法错误。使用连接词（for example, because, so）来增强逻辑性，并用更自然的表达描述感受（relaxed, peaceful）。

範例: Yes, I would. Parks are convenient places for people to relax and exercise, and they help reduce stress. For example, when I visit a park I feel relaxed and peaceful, so having more parks would improve the quality of life in my city.

建議: 回答应先简明回答问题，然后给出具体计划或理由。注意语法（时态、冠词、词形）和词汇搭配（例如 'waste' 用错，应为 'a walk' 或 'a visit'）。尽量把信息组织成两到三句并使用连接词（but, so, because）。

範例: Yes, there is a new flower park near my home that I want to visit. My friends have invited me several times but we were always busy, so we have decided to go next week and spend an afternoon walking and taking photos.

× They liked, we always play the, some sports like basketball or badminton in the parks and also, uh, if the weather was good, we.

✓ They liked it; we always played some sports like basketball or badminton in the parks, and if the weather was good, we stayed longer.

句子描述过去的习惯，应使用一般过去时。原句中混用了过去时（liked）和现在时（play），且句子不完整。建议将动词统一为过去时，并补全省略内容，使句子结构完整。

× Uh, yes, but uh, uh, the frequency was smaller than before because uh, my study tasks is happy now.

✓ Uh, yes, but the frequency is lower than before because my study tasks are heavy now.

原句想表达现在的情况，应使用一般现在时。‘frequency was smaller’使用了过去时且表达不自然，应改为“is lower”。'study tasks is happy'中主语与谓语不一致且用词错误，应为复数主语“study tasks”+复数谓语“are”，并用形容词“heavy”表示“繁重”。

× Umm, I only go to the parks at weekends.

✓ Umm, I only go to the park on weekends.

此句描述现在的常态应使用一般现在时，原句已为现在时但存在数和介词问题。英文习惯说“go to the park”或“go to parks”，若指一般去公园用单数“the park”；时间短语应为“on weekends”。

× Sometimes when I finished my study test, I will go to the park with my friends to play some.

✓ Sometimes when I finish my study tests, I go to the park with my friends to play.

句子描述习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时而不是过去时或将来时。原句混用了过去时(finished)和将来时(will go)。建议将时间状语从句用一般现在时“when I finish...”，主句用一般现在时“I go...”。另外“study test”应为复数“study tests”或更自然的“my studies”，结尾的“to play some”不完整，应直接用“to play”。

× Yes, because park is a good and convenient place for people to unwind themselves.

✓ Yes, because parks are good and convenient places for people to unwind.

原句中“park”缺少冠词且单复数使用不当。表达泛指时可用复数“parks are... places”。此外“不必要的反身代词”可省略，且“good and convenient place”要与复数保持一致。

× Every time I go to the parks I can feel a sense of relaxation and pace and so having more parks in my cities can I?

✓ Every time I go to the park I can feel a sense of relaxation and peace, so having more parks in my city would be great.

句子时态和语序混乱；应使用一般现在时“go... I can feel”。“pace”拼写错误，应为“peace（宁静）”。“my cities”与上下文不符，应为“my city”。末尾原句为疑问且不完整，改为陈述句更自然并表达愿望。

× Yes, I heard about that there.

✓ Yes, I heard about it.

原句中“heard about that there”结构错误。应使用“heard about it”或“heard that there is...”。若后接从句，可说“I heard that there is a new flower park.”

× There was a new flower park in my city just near my home and my friend invited me to go there many times, but every time we have some other things.

✓ There is a new flower park in my city near my home, and my friend has invited me many times, but every time we have had other things to do.

描述一个仍然存在的公园应使用现在时“There is”。“invited me to go there many times”用现在完成时更合适“has invited me many times”。“every time we have some other things”时态不对且表达不完整，应改为完成时态“have had”并补全“to do”。

× So next week we decided to go there and have a waste.

✓ So next week we have decided to go there and have a picnic.

谈论将来计划应使用将来或现在完成表示安排，“decided”过去式与“next week”冲突，应改为“have decided”或“are going to decide”。另外“have a waste”用词错误，应为“have a rest”或更自然的“have a picnic”视语境而定。