公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify the main idea with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary errors (e.g. 'outside', 'park', not 'Peru'), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences).

範例: When I was a child I didn't enjoy playing outside much, so I wasn't a big fan of going to parks. However, I did visit parks in spring to see the cherry blossoms because I loved the flowers and fresh air.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer (Yes/No) and expand with a specific reason. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and complete the sentence about traveling. Use linking words such as 'but' or 'however' correctly.

範例: I don't go to parks very often, so I wouldn't say I particularly like them now. However, when I travel to different cities I sometimes visit local parks to relax and see the scenery.

建議: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and correct word choice ('funds' or 'budget' instead of 'prices', 'parks' singular/plural). Use linking words ('because', 'however', 'on the other hand') to structure the answer.

範例: I don't think we need many more parks in my city because the local government has limited funds for new projects. However, on the other hand, more small playgrounds would be useful for children to exercise and play safely.

建議: Correct place names and grammar, and give one clear, specific reason why you want to visit. Mention the park and the city correctly ('Prague' not 'Plague') and link your plans to a condition (e.g. going to university) succinctly.

範例: I would like to visit the parks in Prague because it is a beautiful city with historic gardens. I hope to go there when I start university to see the famous parks and relax between my studies.

× I don't like to play in outside, so I'm not a big fan of going to Peru when I was a child, but only in spring.

✓ I didn't like to play outside, so I wasn't a big fan of going to parks when I was a child, but only in spring.

Multiple preposition and word choice errors: 'in outside' is incorrect; use 'outside' without preposition. 'Going to Peru' is likely a wrong word choice for 'parks' given context; changed to 'parks'. Tense consistency: question asked about childhood, so use past tense 'didn't like' and 'wasn't'. Suggestions: use 'outside' alone, use past tense for childhood experiences, and check word choice (parks vs Peru).

× I usually go to sports to see cherry blossoms.

✓ I usually went to parks to see cherry blossoms.

Tense mismatch and word choice: 'Usually' with childhood context requires past tense 'went'. 'Go to sports' is unnatural; likely meant 'go to parks'. Suggestion: use past tense for habits in the past and choose the correct noun 'parks'.

× I'm not going to parks often so I don't like it.

✓ I don't go to parks often, so I don't like them.

Use present simple for habitual actions: 'I don't go' rather than 'I'm not going'. Pronoun agreement: 'parks' is plural so use 'them' not 'it'. Suggestion: use simple present for routines and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× However, uh, when I travel to different city or different places.

✓ However, when I travel to different cities or places, I sometimes visit parks.

Fragment: the original is incomplete and lacks a main clause. Also 'different city' should be plural 'different cities'. Suggestion: complete the sentence with a main clause and pluralize 'city' when referring to various locations.

× I don't think we need to see more parks in my city because we don't have sufficient prices to make a new parks.

✓ I don't think we need more parks in my city because we don't have sufficient funds to build new parks.

Wrong words: 'see more parks' should be 'more parks'. 'Prices' is incorrect for funding; use 'funds' or 'budget'. Article and plural: 'a new parks' is wrong; use 'new parks' or 'a new park'. Suggestion: use correct quantifiers and nouns for money ('funds/budget') and ensure articles and plurals agree.

× However, if we think about it for children, I think it's a good place to exercise.

✓ However, if we think about children, I think parks are good places to exercise.

Pronoun and referent clarity: 'it' is vague; better to explicitly mention 'parks'. Also number agreement: 'a good place' vs general 'parks are good places'. Suggestion: make the subject explicit and match singular/plural consistently.

× I want to go to the park in Plague because the plague is the beautiful city in Czech Republic and I'm a big fan of the city, so I want to go to the park in the future if I enter the university.

✓ I want to go to the park in Prague because Prague is a beautiful city in the Czech Republic and I'm a big fan of it, so I want to visit the park in the future if I enter university.

Multiple errors: 'Plague' is incorrect place name; correct is 'Prague'. Use articles: 'the Czech Republic' requires 'the'. 'the beautiful city' should be 'a beautiful city'. 'enter the university' in general English is usually 'enter university' or 'get into university'; also 'visit the park' fits better than 'go to the park' repeated. Suggestion: check proper nouns spelling, use 'the' with country names like 'the Czech Republic', use 'a' for indefinite descriptions, and prefer 'enter university' or 'get into university' for general statements.