公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and article use, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words if needed (e.g., "and", "so", "because"). Avoid fragments like "I enjoyed a lot of" — say what you enjoyed. Keep to under five sentences.

範例: Yes. I loved going to the park every weekend with my family and friends when I was a child. We would play games on the grass and feed the ducks by the pond, so those visits were relaxing and fun. I also collected photographs of the flowers and playgrounds as souvenirs.

建議: Make your response direct and grammatically correct. Begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) and give specific reasons using correct vocabulary. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "product"; use words like "facilities" or "equipment". Limit to two or three concise sentences and use linking words (e.g., "because", "but").

範例: Not really. I rarely visit parks now because I am very busy with work and study. Besides, the local park’s facilities have been damaged, so it is less enjoyable to go there.

建議: Answer directly and provide a clear reason and specific detail. Use one topic sentence and one or two supporting sentences. Avoid disfluencies and repeated words. If you don’t know exact details, say so clearly and offer a general comment instead.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for relaxation and exercise. Even though I don't know the location of every park, I think having more well-maintained parks would improve the quality of life for residents.

建議: Be specific about which park you mean and why you want to visit. Use correct nouns (e.g., "park", not "product") and avoid repetition. Give one reason and, if possible, mention who recommended it or what you expect to do there. Keep it concise and coherent.

範例: Yes, I hope to visit the Riverside Park next year because friends who have been there say the scenery is beautiful and there are good walking trails. I would like to go for a picnic and to take photos of the views.

× When I was child I went to the park every weekend with my friend and family.

✓ When I was a child, I went to the park every weekend with my friends and my family.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and incorrect singular/plural for companions. Add commas for clarity. Use 'friends' if more than one friend was implied or keep 'my friend' for one; here 'my friends and my family' is more natural.

× I enjoyed a lot of and I collected pictures.

✓ I enjoyed it a lot, and I collected pictures.

'Enjoyed' needs an object ('it'). 'A lot' should follow the verb phrase. Add comma and 'and' to connect two clauses.

× Now I am not going to the park because now I have no time to visit it and also also any any product is not present because of they are destroyed.

✓ Now I do not go to the park because I have no time to visit it, and many facilities are not available because they were destroyed.

Use simple present 'do not go' to describe habitual action. Remove duplicate words. 'Any product is not present' is unclear; 'many facilities are not available' is a natural alternative. Use passive with past tense 'were destroyed' to explain cause.

× Yes, I will. Yes, I, I will visit. I will visit park this. I have no idea about where where it is and where it's belong, but it's very beautiful and amazing park.

✓ Yes, I will visit it. I have no idea where it is or who it belongs to, but it's a very beautiful and amazing park.

Combine fragmented responses into one clear sentence. Use 'visit it' with object pronoun. Remove duplicate words. Correct word order: 'no idea where it is' and use 'who it belongs to' for ownership. Include article 'a' before 'very beautiful and amazing park.'

× Yes, I will go because it's a very beautiful product in our country and I I did not visit anytime but my friend visit it and they also told me this product is very beautiful and amazing in our city. I will visit in in my future.

✓ Yes, I will go because it's a very beautiful place in our country, and I have not visited it yet. My friend visited it and told me it is very beautiful and amazing in our city. I will visit it in the future.

Replace 'product' with 'place' for parks. Use present perfect 'have not visited' to indicate experience up to now. Correct past tense 'visited' for friend's action. Use 'visit it in the future' instead of duplicated words. Remove duplicate words and fix pronouns and articles.