公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Speak in correct tense and use complete, natural sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child.”) then add one or two specific supporting details, using correct past tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g. use “went” or “used to go” instead of “to going”).

範例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, my mother often took me there on weekends, and I used to play on the swings and do simple exercises. Those visits were a happy part of my childhood.

建議: Answer directly with present tense and give a specific reason with a linking word. Correct grammar and word order (“I like going to parks now because I play with my friends and often spend time there”). Keep it concise and natural, one topic sentence plus one detail is enough.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now because I often meet my friends there and we play football together. As a result, I spend a lot of my free time in the park.

建議: Make your opinion clear and use correct modal verbs and word order. Start with a direct answer (Yes/No) then explain with specific reasons and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “Four other people” and grammar mistakes (use “the government is building” or “should build more parks”).

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play and for adults to exercise. For example, if the government built more parks, people would have more space for walking and community activities.

建議: Give a clear, specific answer and use correct future reference. Use a topic sentence plus one or two concrete examples of parks you want to visit and why. Use phrases like “In the future” or “I would like to visit” and avoid plural mistakes (“futures”).

範例: Yes, in the future I would like to visit different parks around the country. For example, I want to go to a large botanical garden to see exotic plants and a coastal park to enjoy walking by the sea.

× Yes, of course I like to going park as I am a child.

✓ Yes, of course I liked going to parks when I was a child.

The student used present tense and incorrect verb forms for a past habit. Change 'like to going' to 'liked going' (simple past for past habit) and 'park' to plural 'parks' or 'the park'; change 'as I am a child' to 'when I was a child' to match past time reference. Use correct verb form 'liked' and infinitive/gerund form 'going' without 'to' after 'like'.

× When I am a kid, my mother going with me in park and I do exercise in park.

✓ When I was a kid, my mother went with me to the park and I exercised there.

Pronouns and verbs must match past tense: 'When I am a kid' should be 'When I was a kid'. 'My mother going' is missing auxiliary/past tense: use 'my mother went'. Preposition 'in park' is incorrect; use 'to the park' or 'in the park'. 'I do exercise in park' should be past simple 'I exercised there.' Also add 'the' before 'park' for a specific place. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct prepositions.

× Yes, I like to going park now because I am playing with my friends and most of the time I spend in park.

✓ Yes, I like going to the park now because I play with my friends and spend most of my time there.

Mixing continuous and simple present is incorrect here. Use 'like going' (no 'to' before gerund) and 'to the park' for correct preposition and article. Replace 'I am playing' with simple present 'I play' to express habitual action. 'Most of the time I spend in park' should be 'I spend most of my time there.'

× Yes, I see many parks in my city and government make more parks for children playing and other people.

✓ Yes, I see many parks in my city, and the government has made more parks for children to play in and for other people.

Missing article 'the' before 'government' and wrong verb tense: use present perfect 'has made' or present 'makes' depending on meaning; here 'has made' fits recent actions. 'Children playing' should be 'children to play in' (use infinitive or 'for children to play in'). Also add comma and 'for other people' to clarify purpose.

× Four other people usually government make these park for walking and exercising.

✓ Usually, the government makes these parks for walking and exercising for other people.

Sentence order is incorrect and unclear. 'Four other people' seems wrong; if meaning 'for other people' place that phrase at end. Add article 'the' before 'government' and plural 'parks'. Use present simple 'makes' for habitual action. Maintain logical word order: adverb first, subject, verb, object, purpose.

× Yes, I like to go many parks in my futures.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit many parks in the future.

Incorrect tense and word forms: 'I like to go many parks' should be 'I would like to visit many parks' to express future desire. 'My futures' is incorrect; use 'in the future'. Use verb 'visit' or 'go to' plus correct article/number agreement 'many parks'.