公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and coherent: give a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid contradictions (saying you liked parks but never went) and incomplete sentences. Use linking words (however, because) to connect ideas and provide a brief example or reason.

範例: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they were my main place to play and meet friends. However, I didn’t visit parks often after we moved to a small town where there were no proper green spaces, so I mostly played in the streets or small courtyards near my home.

建議: Be concise and natural: start with a direct answer, then support it with a specific reason and one example. Reduce filler words (umm) and avoid vague phrases like “anything with my friends.” Use a linking word (because, so) to make the reason clear.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are a relaxed place to chat and exercise with friends. For example, on weekends we often meet in a nearby park to walk, have a picnic and play frisbee, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

建議: Answer directly and be specific: avoid short abrupt replies and incomplete sentences. If you disagree with the idea of more parks, explain why clearly and provide examples or a suggestion (e.g., improve existing parks). Use linking words (because, therefore, however) and avoid repeating the same phrase.

範例: I wouldn’t prioritize building more parks until the existing ones are improved, because many current parks are poorly maintained and lack facilities like benches and lighting. Therefore, I think the city should renovate the parks first—adding play areas and proper paths—before creating new ones.

建議: Be precise and complete: give a clear answer naming the park, explain why you want to go with a specific reason, and finish the sentence. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use a linking phrase (because, since) to connect reason and personal background.

範例: Yes — I would love to visit Disneyland in Belgium because I have admired its attractions and parades since childhood. I think it would be a magical experience with elaborate shows and themed rides that I’ve only seen on TV.

× When I was a child, I really liked to go to the parks, but I had never gone to the park because of my hometown.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked going to parks, but I had never been to a park because of my hometown.

Use the -ing form (gerund) after 'liked' when referring to general activities: 'liked going' not 'liked to go' (both are possible but 'liked going' is more natural). Also use 'been to' (present perfect) to indicate experience up to that time: 'had never been to a park.' Remove inconsistent articles: use 'parks' generally and 'a park' for unspecified single park.

× I lived in OS. It is one of the.

✓ I lived in OS. It is one of the cities in my country.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a noun after 'one of the.' Provide a complete noun phrase to finish the comparative structure: 'one of the cities' or another appropriate group. Ensure the sentence is complete and meaningful.

× Yes, absolutely. I like to go to the parks now, umm, I believe go to the park is one of the best thing to do with my friends.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I like going to parks now. I believe going to the park is one of the best things to do with my friends.

Again, use the gerund 'going' after 'like' and when presenting activities as nouns: 'going to the park.' Use plural 'things' because 'one of the best things' selects from a plural set. Also split into clearer sentences for natural speech.

× So in my free time, umm, I want to do anything with my friends.

✓ So in my free time, I want to do activities with my friends.

'Want to do anything' is vague and ungrammatical in context. Use a noun phrase 'do activities' or 'do things' with friends. If meaning willingness for any activity, say 'I want to do anything with my friends' is informal; 'I like to do activities with my friends' is clearer.

× No, because in my city there are poor quality constructions and. Our parks quality is so poor because of our development.

✓ No, because in my city there are poor-quality constructions. The quality of our parks is very poor because of our level of development.

Use the hyphenated adjective 'poor-quality' before a noun. The original has an incomplete clause 'and.' Rephrase second sentence to 'The quality of our parks' instead of 'Our parks quality.' Use 'very' instead of 'so' for formal clarity and 'level of development' to express cause.

× I would like to say it's Disneyland. I want to go to Disneyland park in in Belgium, umm, since I was a child.

✓ I would like to say it's Disneyland. I have wanted to go to Disneyland Park in Belgium since I was a child.

Use present perfect 'have wanted' to express a desire that began in the past and continues to the present (since I was a child). Remove duplicated 'in.' Capitalize proper noun 'Park' as part of the name.

× It's very popular and I think it has.

✓ It's very popular and I think it has many attractions.

Original sentence is incomplete: 'I think it has' requires an object. Provide a noun like 'many attractions' to complete the thought and make the sentence meaningful.