公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh, so). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details in complete sentences. Use simple linking words (for example, and, because) to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. After school I often asked my parents to take me there because I enjoyed playing on the swings and slides, and I liked meeting other children to play games.

建議: Correct tense and reduce repetition. Begin with a direct statement, then add two specific activities you do and a reason or observation. Use linking words such as "for example" or "sometimes" to organize details and avoid repeating phrases like "I'll go" multiple times.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. When I have free time I often walk or sit and relax there; for example, I like watching people walk their dogs or parents playing with their children.

建議: Be clearer about why you want more parks and avoid vague phrases like "new trials." Start with a direct reason, then give one or two specific benefits (e.g., more green space, variety of wildlife). Use correct prepositions and concise language.

範例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide green space and places to relax. For instance, I and my husband often visit new parks on weekends to see different landscapes, ponds and local birds.

建議: Give a clear answer instead of repeating uncertainty. If you have no specific park in mind, say so and then explain how you would choose one (methods and reasons). Use correct verb forms and avoid filler words.

範例: I don't have a particular park in mind right now, but in the future I will look online on Instagram or Google to find interesting parks. I usually choose parks with good walking trails, lakes or birdwatching opportunities.

× Yes, I do like, uh, going to parks as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child.

The question asks about past habit ('as a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Do like' is present; change to 'liked' to match time frame. Suggestion: Use past simple for past habits ('I liked going to parks').

× So after coming from the school, uh, I used to ask my parents to take, uh, me to the parks so that I, I'll play with, uh, so that I used to play, uh, with slides and, uh, swings, etcetera.

✓ After coming home from school, I used to ask my parents to take me to the park so that I could play on the slides and swings.

Multiple issues: word choice and tense. 'After coming from the school' is awkward; use 'after coming home from school' or 'when I came home from school'. 'I'll play' is future/inconsistent; for past habitual actions use 'used to' or 'could'. 'Parks' plural unnecessary if referring generally; 'the park' or 'parks' consistently. Use 'play on the slides and swings' (preposition 'on'). Suggestion: Keep past habitual structure: 'I used to ask my parents to take me to the park so I could play on the slides and swings.'

× Yes, I do like going to parks now.

✓ Yes, I do like going to parks now.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable for present preference. No correction needed; it correctly uses present tense to describe a current habit. Suggestion: Optional minor style: 'Yes, I like going to parks now.'

× In fact, whenever I had a free time, I'll go to the park, I'll have a walk or sometimes I would just sit at the in the park and see the people around me and observe.

✓ In fact, whenever I have free time, I go to the park; I take a walk or sometimes I just sit in the park and watch the people around me.

Tense inconsistency: 'whenever I had a free time' mixes past with present 'I'll go'. For habitual actions use present simple: 'whenever I have free time, I go'. Also 'a free time' is incorrect; use 'free time' without article. 'Have a walk' is acceptable but 'take a walk' is more natural. Remove duplicate 'the' before 'in the park'. Suggestion: Use present simple for current habits: 'whenever I have free time, I go to the park.'

× Like some people take their dogs to to walk and some people bring their kids.

✓ For example, some people take their dogs for a walk and some people bring their kids.

Preposition error and duplication: 'take their dogs to to walk' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'take their dogs for a walk'. Also 'Like' at sentence start is informal; 'For example' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'take dogs for a walk' and avoid duplicated words.

× Yes, uh, I would like to see more parks in our city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in our city.

This sentence is grammatically correct as a polite expression of preference about the future. No correction needed. Suggestion: None.

× In fact, I would ask my husband, uh, in my, in weekends, just let's try the new park so that I'll get exposure to a new place and new trials or, uh, new lakes or some new birds, etcetera.

✓ In fact, I would ask my husband on weekends, 'Let's try a new park' so that I can see a new place, new trails, new lakes, or some new birds.

Multiple issues: preposition for time should be 'on weekends' not 'in weekends' (preposition error). 'Let's try the new park' sounds like a specific park; 'a new park' is better. 'I'll get exposure' is awkward; use 'I can see' or 'experience' for clarity and correct modal use: 'can' for ability rather than future 'will'. 'Trials' likely intended 'trails'. Quotation marks in actual speech are fine but here restructure. Suggestion: Use 'on weekends' and 'I can see/experience' and correct 'trails'.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

This question is fine as written and matches future intent using 'want to' for planned desire. No correction needed. Suggestion: None.

× Currently, uh, there is no uh idea, but uh, in future maybe I would check uh, online like Instagram or Google and I would definitely wanted to go something.

✓ Currently, I don't have any idea, but in the future maybe I will check online, like Instagram or Google, and I would definitely want to go to some place.

Tense and modal errors: 'there is no idea' should be 'I don't have any idea' or 'there is no idea' is unnatural. 'In future' needs article 'in the future'. 'Maybe I would check' is less natural than 'maybe I will check' for a future intention. 'I would definitely wanted' mixes conditional/modal 'would' with past 'wanted'; use 'I would definitely want' or 'I will definitely want' depending on meaning. Also 'go something' is incorrect; use 'go to some place' or 'go somewhere'. Suggestion: Use 'I don't have any idea', 'in the future', 'I will check online', and 'I would definitely want to go somewhere.'