公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your response more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples of activities you enjoyed, using linking words to connect ideas. Keep it under five sentences and avoid vague phrasing like “a lot”.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I especially enjoyed playing on the swings and having picnics with my family, because we could run around and play games together. Those visits were a highlight of my weekends.

建議: Reduce hesitations and repetition. Give a direct answer, then briefly explain how often and what you do there now using a linking word. Be specific about frequency and activities to make your answer richer.

範例: Yes, I do still like going to parks. I go there occasionally, usually once or twice a month, to jog or read under a tree because it helps me relax and get fresh air.

建議: Be concise and avoid repetition. Give a clear reason and a concrete benefit of having more parks, using linking words to organise the sentence. Mention who benefits and how.

範例: Yes, I would. Since our city has many children, more parks would provide safe places for them to play and help improve the community’s health and social life.

建議: Expand your brief answer with a reason and one detail about which park or city in France and why you want to visit it. Use one or two sentences and a linking word to connect your idea.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Parc des Buttes-Chaumont in Paris because I’ve seen photos of its beautiful cliffs and lake, and I’d enjoy exploring its walking paths and views.

× Yes, because there's a lot of activities that we can do.

✓ Yes, because there are a lot of activities that we can do.

The subject 'a lot of activities' is plural, so the verb should be plural 'are' instead of the contraction 'there's' (there is). Use 'there are' for plural nouns. Suggestion: use 'there are' whenever the noun following 'a lot of' is plural.

× For me, I think yes, because I still enjoy, uh, going to parks now now and then.

✓ For me, I think so, because I still enjoy going to parks now and then.

Replace 'yes' with 'so' after 'I think' to sound natural; remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'now'. The present simple 'enjoy' is correct. Suggestion: avoid fillers and repeated words, and use 'now and then' for occasional actions.

× Yes, because there is a lot of of child or or children here in our city, so they need to go in the parks in order for them for them to enjoy.

✓ Yes, because there are a lot of children here in our city, so they need to go to the parks in order to enjoy themselves.

Use 'are' for plural 'a lot of children' (singular 'is' is incorrect). Choose the plural noun 'children' rather than 'child'. Use 'to the parks' (not 'in the parks') when indicating destination, and 'in order to enjoy themselves' is the correct reflexive pronoun and more natural phrasing; remove repeated words. Suggestion: match verb number to noun number, pick the correct noun form, use 'to' for movement to a place, and use appropriate reflexive pronoun 'themselves'.

× Yes, specifically in France.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit parks in France.

The original fragment lacks clarity and a full verb phrase; it’s a short elliptical reply but for clarity a full sentence is better. 'I would like to visit parks in France' fits the question about future desire. Suggestion: include subject and verb to make the sentence complete and match the question's context.