公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and long clumsy phrases. Focus on correct verb forms and simpler, accurate expressions.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my parents and played on the swings and slides with friends from my neighborhood. Because the parks had lots of grass and trees, I also enjoyed running around and having picnics there.

建議: Make sentences complete and coherent: use linking words (for example, 'so' or 'and') and correct verb forms. Be specific about activities and avoid vague or fragmented phrases. Keep answer within 3–4 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but now I usually go with friends rather than my parents. For example, last week we visited Lumpini Park where we walked around the lake and practiced a group dance. I find parks relaxing and a great place to exercise.

建議: Clarify meaning and avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific reason and an example of where more parks are needed. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'green spaces', 'business district').

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in Bangkok. Although the city has many green areas, there are few parks in the central business district, so more green spaces there would improve air quality and provide places for office workers to relax.

建議: Use clear tense and correct names; avoid unclear or invented phrases. State the plan clearly (time, place, activity) and give a reason. Keep it concise and grammatical.

範例: Yes. Next week I plan to visit Benjakitti Park, which is near the central business district. I want to join a morning exercise session that starts at 7:00 AM because I am a morning person and enjoy exercising outdoors.

× When I was young, I remember that going out to the park in one of my favorite activities with my parents, where I love to go out and touch some grass and able to play nearby playground with the friends from my neighborhood.

✓ When I was young, I remember that going out to the park was one of my favorite activities with my parents; I loved to go out, touch the grass, and play at the nearby playground with friends from my neighborhood.

Original sentence misuses verb forms and connectors. 'Going out to the park in one of my favorite activities' is missing the verb 'was' (therefore also subject-verb link). 'Love' should be past 'loved' to match 'When I was young'. 'Able to play' is incorrect; use the base verb 'play'. Use 'touch the grass' (no article needed) and 'play at the nearby playground'. Suggestions: add the linking verb 'was', keep consistent past tense, and use base verbs after conjunctions (touch, play).

× Yes, but not with my parents anymore because they would prefer to do indoor activities instead.

✓ Yes, but not with my parents anymore because they prefer to do indoor activities instead.

Using 'would prefer' implies conditional or hypothetical; here the student states a current habitual preference so simple present 'prefer' is appropriate. Keep tense consistent for present habitual situations. Use 'prefer' to indicate current preference.

× Just last week we went to Lumpini park. Enjoy doing some a small walking and doing a Arabic dance so that would very able to serve the.

✓ Just last week we went to Lumpini Park. We enjoyed taking a short walk and doing an Arabic dance.

Fragmented and incorrect verb forms: 'Enjoy doing some a small walking' should be past 'enjoyed' and idiomatically 'taking a short walk'. 'Doing a Arabic dance' should be 'doing an Arabic dance' and past tense 'did' or 'did an Arabic dance' but 'doing' after 'enjoyed' is acceptable as 'enjoyed doing an Arabic dance'. The final clause 'so that would very able to serve the.' is meaningless and omitted. Suggestions: use correct article 'an' before vowel sound, use past tense 'enjoyed', and prefer 'taking a short walk'.

× Currently I live in a capital city of Thailand which is Bangkok and they already filled with a green city.

✓ Currently I live in the capital city of Thailand, Bangkok, and it is already quite green.

Use definite article 'the' with 'capital city'. 'They' is incorrect pronoun for a city; use 'it'. 'Filled with a green city' is ungrammatical; better to say 'it is already quite green' or 'there are many green spaces'. Suggestions: use 'the capital city', correct pronoun 'it', and rephrase 'filled with a green city' to a natural expression.

× However, to have a greater app, I have a greater app. I would love to have more green space, especially in a central business district.

✓ However, I would love to have more green space, especially in the central business district.

Phrase 'to have a greater app, I have a greater app' is nonsensical and likely an error; remove repetition and irrelevant words. Use clear structure: 'I would love to have more green space' and 'the central business district' for a specific area. Suggestions: remove accidental repetition and use 'the' with specific places.

× Yes, probably next week I was planned to go to a Ben ticket park located nearby in Courtier with also in central business district.

✓ Yes, probably next week I am planning to go to a Benjakitti Park located nearby in the Courtyard area in the central business district.

Mixing past 'was planned' with future time 'next week' is incorrect; use present continuous 'am planning' or 'plan to' for near-future arrangements. Proper noun likely 'Benjakitti Park'; use 'the central business district' and correct place names. Also 'located nearby in Courtier' is unclear—use 'located nearby in the Courtyard area' or similar. Suggestions: use 'am planning to' for near-future plans and correct place names and articles.

× And I would love to do a pillar test, morning morning pillar test which will start at 7:00 AM, but that's would be OK because I'm a morning person.

✓ And I would love to do a morning 'plank' test, which will start at 7:00 AM, and that would be OK because I'm a morning person.

Phrase 'morning morning pillar test' is repetitive and unclear; likely meant 'morning plank test' or similar activity. 'That's would be OK' mixes contractions and modal; use 'that would be OK' or 'that is OK'. Keep modal 'would' consistent: 'that would be OK'. Also ensure gerund/infinitive forms are correct: 'love to do' is fine. Suggestions: clarify the activity name, remove repetition, and correct modal structure to 'that would be OK'.