公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (use correct tense and subject-verb agreement), make the response more natural and concise, and add a brief specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then one supporting detail using a linking word.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played football with neighborhood friends there, and I enjoyed the swings and picnics. Because the park was close to my home, I went almost every weekend.

建議: Give a direct, grammatical topic sentence explaining current habit, then provide a clear reason with a linking word. Avoid fillers and unclear time references.

範例: Not much at the moment. I don't visit parks regularly because I am busy preparing for college entrance exams; however, I still go for short runs nearby when I have time.

建議: Answer directly, correct grammar and word choice, and give specific reasons using linking words. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and avoid vague phrases like 'mean my need.'

範例: No, I wouldn't want more parks because there is already a good park near my home that meets my needs. Also, it is quiet and familiar, and I feel comfortable there because I know many of the regular visitors.

建議: Provide a clear, grammatical statement about future intentions and give a specific reason or example. Use linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'so') and remove hesitation words.

範例: In the future, I would like to visit parks in Bangkok because my current city in the northeast has few large green spaces. For example, I want to see Lumpini Park to experience its lakes and walking paths.

× When I were young I would like to go because I have a lot of fun and many people paying off exercise in the past.

✓ When I was young, I liked to go because I had a lot of fun and many people were exercising there in the past.

Multiple subject-verb agreement and tense issues: 'were' should be 'was' to agree with singular subject 'I' (ID 27). 'Would like to go' is incorrect for past habitual action; use simple past 'liked' (ID 6). 'Have a lot of fun' should be past 'had' to match past context (ID 5). 'Many people paying off exercise' is ungrammatical; use 'many people were exercising' (progressive past) and include 'there' for place (ID 10 and 11). Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past habits and match verbs to their subjects and proper auxiliary forms.

× I don't go to parks, but now because I'm busy preparing for college admission and, uh, I was actually running every day then, uh.

✓ I don't go to parks now because I'm busy preparing for college admission, and I used to run every day before.

Tense and time-reference mismatch: 'I don't go to parks, but now because I'm busy' is awkward; place 'now' next to present tense and remove 'but' (ID 6). 'I was actually running every day then' mixes past progressive with 'now'; use 'used to run every day' to indicate a past routine that no longer happens (ID 5). Also improve conjunction usage for clarity (ID 16). Suggestion: Keep present facts in present tense and past habits in 'used to' or simple past.

× No, I wouldn't want more park because there is already a good one near my home and it's mean my need.

✓ No, I wouldn't want another park because there is already a good one near my home and it meets my needs.

Countable noun and article: 'more park' is incorrect; use 'another park' or 'more parks' (ID 1 and 22). 'It's mean my need' is incorrect verb choice and form; use 'it meets my needs' (verb agreement and plural 'needs') (ID 13 and 27). Suggestion: Use 'another' for an additional single park and 'meet' with proper subject-verb agreement; pluralize 'needs' when referring to multiple requirements.

× I also like that quiet and familiar.

✓ I also like that it is quiet and familiar.

Missing subject and verb: 'that quiet and familiar' lacks a subject and verb; add 'it is' to form a complete clause (ID 12 and 23). Also 'familiar' needs to modify a noun or be used as predicate adjective with 'it is' (ID 13). Suggestion: Include pronoun 'it' and verb 'is' to describe the park.

× I know some of the people who go there so I feel comfortable just.

✓ I know some of the people who go there, so I just feel comfortable.

Word order and extraneous adverb placement: 'comfortable just' places the adverb 'just' incorrectly; move it before 'feel' or after 'I' depending on emphasis (ID 20 and 26). Also add comma before 'so' for clarity (ID 16). Suggestion: Place adverbs in their normal positions: 'I just feel comfortable' or 'I feel comfortable there.'

× In the future, I want to go, uh, any parks around Bangkok because I'm inside city this northeast, northeast city of my don't have, uh, at many past then.

✓ In the future, I want to visit parks around Bangkok because my city in the northeast doesn't have many.

Multiple issues: 'I want to go, uh, any parks' should be 'I want to visit parks' or 'go to any parks' (ID 8). 'I'm inside city this northeast' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'my city in the northeast' (preposition and noun order errors, ID 11 and 18). 'my don't have, uh, at many past then' is unclear; intended meaning is that the speaker's city doesn't have many parks, so use 'doesn't have many' (subject-verb agreement and quantifier use, ID 27 and 14). Suggestion: State the future desire with 'want to visit' and clearly describe location: 'my city in the northeast doesn't have many.'