公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, coherent and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add 1–2 specific supporting details linked with simple connectors (for example, 'and' or 'also'). Avoid unclear phrases like 'feel like going to the park at the restaurant' and words that don't fit ('supreme'). Use correct verb forms and plural/singular forms.

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my family and friends, and we used to ride bicycles together around our neighborhood in Ethiopia. Those outings are great memories for me.

建議: Give a concise direct answer followed by specific activities you do and a brief reason. Correct grammar (e.g., 'free time', 'go for walks', 'sometimes', 'makes me feel good'). Avoid repetition and irrelevant phrases like 'adult rides' unless you mean something specific (e.g., cycling). Use linking words such as 'and' or 'because' to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks when I have free time. I often go for walks or runs and sometimes exercise there because being outdoors helps me relax and keeps me fit.

建議: Answer directly and clearly, giving a specific reason. Use correct sentence structure (e.g., 'I wish there were more parks close to my home' or 'I would like more parks, but they should be near my house'). Avoid unclear words like 'course' and awkward phrasing. Use linking words like 'but' or 'so' to explain your preference.

範例: I would like to have more parks in my city, but I prefer them to be near my home so I don't have to travel far. If parks were closer, I would visit them more often.

建議: Be specific and concise: name the park and give a clear reason. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I want to visit Shanghai Park to run or walk in the mornings') and explain the problem clearly if needed ('I tend to wake up late in colder countries'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Shanghai Park because I would enjoy running and walking there in the mornings. However, I sometimes have trouble waking up early when I travel to colder countries, so that could be a challenge.

× Feel like going to the park at the restaurant? Yes, when I was young I liked.

✓ Did you feel like going to the park or the playground? Yes, when I was young I liked going to parks.

The original contains incomplete and confusing fragments and wrong structure. 'Feel like going...' is not a full question; it needs auxiliary 'Did' for past simple. 'At the restaurant' seems wrong for parks; choose a coherent noun. 'I liked' requires a complement (liked going to parks). Improve by using a full question form and by completing the verb phrase: use 'Did you feel...' and 'liked going to parks'.

× I enjoy to go into the parks with my family, my friends and sometime I go with my supreme.

✓ I enjoyed going to the parks with my family and my friends, and sometimes I went with my cousin.

'Enjoy' with a following verb requires the -ing form ('enjoy going'), not 'to go' (Grammar problem type 8, but primary issue here is pronoun/noun misuse and word choice). 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb). 'Supreme' is incorrect; likely intended 'cousin' or another noun. Also maintain past tense because context is 'when I was young'.

× We bought a bicycle and ride around Ethiopia.

✓ We bought bicycles and rode around Ethiopia.

Mixing past verbs: 'bought' is past, so 'ride' should be past 'rode' to keep tense consistency. Also 'a bicycle' could be plural if shared; if singular, 'rode the bicycle' would be clearer. Use past tense throughout the narrative.

× Great memory.

✓ Those are great memories.

Fragment 'Great memory' is not a complete sentence in this context. Use plural 'memories' to refer to multiple events and include a subject: 'Those are great memories.' or 'I have great memories.'

× Yes, I really enjoy going to the park when I have a free time.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy going to the park when I have free time.

'A free time' is ungrammatical; 'free time' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a'. Keep present simple for habitual action.

× I go for a walks, go for a run and work out sometime.

✓ I go for walks, go for runs and work out sometimes.

'A walks' mixes singular article with plural noun; use plural 'walks' without 'a'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Keep parallel noun forms.

× I think the park is really good for adult rides.

✓ I think the park is really good for adult exercise.

'Adult rides' is awkward and unclear. Likely intended 'adult exercise' or 'adults' (adjective) with a noun like 'activities'. Use appropriate noun to convey meaning.

× I really like to enjoy it.

✓ I really like enjoying it.

'Like to enjoy' is awkward; use 'like enjoying' or simply 'I really enjoy it.' Use verb patterns correctly.

× It's make me feel good.

✓ It makes me feel good.

When subject is singular 'it', verb must be third person singular 'makes'. Fix subject-verb agreement.

× I wish there no because I don't want to go too far for my house.

✓ I wish there were not (many) because I don't want to go too far from my house.

'There no' is ungrammatical; use 'there were not' or 'there weren't' for a wish about absence (subjunctive/past form after 'wish'). Also use 'from my house' rather than 'for my house'. Optionally add 'many' to clarify parks.

× I prefer to go to the course as part as possible.

✓ I prefer to go to the closest park possible.

'Go to the course' is unclear; likely 'closest' intended. 'As part as possible' is incorrect; use 'as close as possible' or 'the closest ... possible'. Use correct comparative structure and preposition.

× Of course I want to go to, uh, Shanghai Park because I want to go for a run on walking in the morning in another country.

✓ Of course I want to go to Shanghai Park because I want to go for a run or walk in the morning in another country.

Sentence contains redundant words and wrong preposition 'on walking'. Use 'run or walk' and remove filler comma. 'In the morning in another country' is fine; keep simple parallel structure.

× But when I go in a northern country, I not wake up in the morning.

✓ But when I go to a northern country, I don't wake up early in the morning.

Use proper auxiliary 'do not' (don't) for negative in present simple. Use 'go to' not 'go in'. Add 'early' to clarify meaning. Also maintain correct word order: 'I don't wake up'.

× That is the problem.

✓ That is the problem.

This sentence is grammatical but brief; keep as is to conclude the thought.