公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more natural by using correct tense and compacting information into 2–3 clear sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce repetition (e.g., 'park' and 'parks').

範例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child, especially on weekends. After church we would often have picnics at a nearby park, which became an important family bonding time when we sat together and talked.

建議: Avoid fillers and slightly awkward phrases. Use smoother vocabulary and linking words to show cause and effect. Keep it concise: one clear topic sentence plus one specific supporting reason.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks in my free time because they help me unwind after a busy workday. Being outdoors calms me and serves as a simple form of therapy.

建議: Clarify and use more appropriate expressions. Avoid saying 'I'm not into more modern person' — instead contrast preferences clearly. Provide a specific reason and an example of the kind of park you want.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because I prefer natural landscapes to urban development. For example, I would welcome more green spaces with trees and walking trails rather than concrete plazas.

建議: Remove hesitations and make the answer tighter. Start with a confident statement about your plan, then give one or two specific reasons why you want to visit. Use varied vocabulary for 'beautiful' and 'a lot'.

範例: Yes, I'm planning to visit Gardens by the Bay in Singapore because I've heard it's spectacular. I want to see the flower displays and the impressive Supertree structures, which look great in photos and are supposed to be stunning in person.

× Yes, as a child I like to go to the park, especially during weekends.

✓ Yes, as a child I liked to go to the park, especially on weekends.

The sentence describes past habitual action 'as a child', so past tense 'liked' is required (Present tense issue). Also use the preposition 'on' with 'weekends' when referring to days/periods. Suggestion: change 'like' to 'liked' and 'during weekends' to 'on weekends'.

× It's our special bonding time with my family.

✓ It was our special bonding time with my family.

This refers to past habitual events, so past tense 'was' is needed (Present tense issue/tense alignment). The phrase 'our special bonding time with my family' is acceptable otherwise. Suggestion: use past tense 'was' to match 'as a child'. Note: Classified under present tense issue but also reflects tense consistency.

× After church, we will go to the parks because it's near to the church and there we do some picnic and then spend time together talking to each other.

✓ After church, we would go to the park because it was near the church, and there we would have a picnic and then spend time together talking to each other.

Describing habitual past actions, so use past habitual modal 'would' or simple past 'went' rather than future 'will' (Future tense issue). 'Parks' should be singular 'park' if referring to the specific nearby park. 'Near to' is incorrect; use 'near' without 'to'. 'Do some picnic' is incorrect — use 'have a picnic'. Suggestion: change 'will go' to 'would go' or 'went', 'parks' to 'park', 'near to the church' to 'near the church', and 'do some picnic' to 'have a picnic'.

× Yes, I still like going to parks, especially during my free time.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks, especially during my free time.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; tense and prepositions are correct for a present preference. No correction needed. Included to show evaluation: maintain present simple 'still like' for current habit.

× It's also a way of mind to unwind after a day of a busy work.

✓ It's also a way for my mind to unwind after a busy day at work.

The phrase 'way of mind' is incorrect; use 'way for my mind' or 'a way to clear my mind'. 'A day of a busy work' is ungrammatical — use 'a busy day at work'. This matches preposition and article issues (Incorrect use of prepositions/articles). Suggestion: say 'a way for my mind to unwind after a busy day at work.'

× And also it's my good therapy for myself because uh, going outside, it makes me relax.

✓ Also, it's good therapy for me because going outside helps me relax.

'My good therapy for myself' is redundant and unidiomatic; use 'good therapy for me'. 'It makes me relax' is not the best collocation; use 'helps me relax' (verb choice). This involves incorrect use of pronouns/reflexive and verb usage. Suggestion: streamline to 'it's good therapy for me' and use 'helps me relax'.

× Yes, I would really love to see more parks in our city because I love nature and I'm not into more modern person so I prefer more mountain views and trees.

✓ Yes, I would really love to see more parks in our city because I love nature and I'm not a very modern person, so I prefer mountain views and trees.

'I'm not into more modern person' is ungrammatical: incorrect use of preposition and noun form. Use 'I'm not a very modern person' (article and adjective use). Also 'prefer more mountain views and trees' -> 'prefer mountain views and trees' (unnecessary 'more'). This involves modal/word usage and article/adjective issues. Suggestion: use 'I'm not a very modern person' and remove extra 'more'.

× It's more on environment.

✓ It's more about the environment.

'More on environment' is unidiomatic. Use the preposition 'about' and include the definite article if needed: 'about the environment'. This is an incorrect use of preposition/article. Suggestion: say 'It's more about the environment.'

× Yes uh, I'm planning to visit the Gardens by the Bay here in Singapore and I've been, umm, hearing some good comments about it, like it's a beautiful place to visit, especially right now that it has a lot of flowers there to look and see.

✓ Yes, I'm planning to visit Gardens by the Bay here in Singapore, and I've heard good things about it; it's a beautiful place to visit, especially now that it has many flowers to see.

Combine and smooth tense usage: 'I'm planning' is fine for future intention. 'I've been hearing some good comments' is wordy and slightly awkward; use 'I've heard good things' (present perfect). 'Right now that it has a lot of flowers there to look and see' is awkward — use 'especially now that it has many flowers to see' or 'many flowers in bloom'. This involves present/past tense choice and awkward phrasing. Suggestion: 'I've heard good things about it' and 'now that it has many flowers to see'.