公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và chính xác về thì. Tránh ngập ngừng (uh) và lỗi ngữ pháp như “when I was children” hay “It's so fast for this park”. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes/No + brief reason), sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ khoảng cách, phương tiện di chuyển) sử dụng từ nối để mạch lạc.

範例: No, I didn’t often go to parks when I was a child because my home was quite far away. For example, it took about 40 minutes by bus to reach the nearest park, so my family preferred to spend time at home.

建議: Cần trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích rõ ràng với lý do cụ thể. Tránh sử dụng thì sai (“I'm not going” nên là “I don’t often go” hoặc “I rarely go”) và câu bị dở dang. Thêm từ nối (because, so) và chi tiết về lịch trình để làm rõ lí do.

範例: Not really, I rarely go to parks now because I spend most of my time studying. For instance, after school I go straight home to help my parents with chores, so I usually don’t have time for the park.

建議: Ý tốt nhưng câu cần rõ ràng và ngắn gọn. Tránh dịch sát từ tiếng Việt dẫn tới cấu trúc lạ (“the play where every two”). Nên nêu lợi ích cụ thể (space for children, exercise, community meeting) và dùng từ nối để liền mạch.

範例: Yes, definitely. More parks would give children safe places to play and adults spaces to exercise. Also, parks encourage community interaction because parents can meet and chat while their kids play.

建議: Câu trả lời hiện không rõ ràng và nhiều ngập ngừng. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (Yes/No + brief reason), giải thích kế hoạch tương lai rõ ràng (ví dụ du lịch đến nơi có công viên nổi tiếng) và tránh lặp từ. Sử dụng thì tương lai hợp lý (would like to/want to) và cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể.

範例: I don’t have a specific park in mind, but I would like to visit famous parks when I travel. For example, if I go to Japan, I would like to visit Ueno Park to see the cherry blossoms.

× Well, actually when I was, uh, children, I don't usually.

✓ Well, actually when I was a child, I didn't usually go to the park.

The speaker used 'children' (plural) with 'when I was', which refers to their singular childhood. Use 'a child' for singular. Also tense consistency: use past tense 'didn't usually go' rather than present 'don't usually'. Suggestion: say 'when I was a child' and keep verbs in past tense for past habits.

× I didn't usually go to the park because my house is far away.

✓ I didn't usually go to the park because my house was far away.

The sentence describes a past situation, so the verb 'is' should be in past form 'was' to maintain tense consistency. Suggestion: keep all time references in the past when talking about childhood.

× It's so fast for this park.

✓ The park was too far away.

'It's so fast for this park' is ungrammatical and mixes inappropriate adjective 'fast' with location. The intended meaning is distance: use 'far' and proper structure 'The park was too far away.' Suggestion: use 'far' or 'far away' to describe distance.

× No, I'm not going to the park because every day I have to study at the school and after school I go home to have my parents and and in every evening I usually.

✓ No, I don't go to the park now because I have to study at school every day, and after school I go home to help my parents; in the evenings I usually study.

Multiple issues: tense and habitual action should use simple present 'I don't go' and 'I have to study.' 'At the school' is incorrect article use; use 'at school'. 'Go home to have my parents' is unclear; likely 'help my parents'. 'In every evening I usually' has wrong word order; 'in the evenings I usually' is correct. Suggestion: use simple present for regular routines and correct word order.

× Yes, of course, it's the play where every two can come to play with friends and many parents, they have time for tools to talk to conversation with each other.

✓ Yes, of course. It's a place where people can come to play with friends, and many parents have time to talk and socialize with each other.

'Every two' is incorrect quantifier; use 'people' or 'children.' 'The play' wrong article and noun; use 'a place'. 'Have time for tools to talk to conversation' is incorrect phrasing; use 'have time to talk and socialize.' Suggestion: use correct quantifiers (people/children) and clearer verbs for socializing.

× I don't have, uh, go to the park in the future because I have planned for these different, uh, Asian and now, uh, if I have chance, I could like to, I would like to go the parks.

✓ I don't have plans to go to a park in the near future because I have planned trips to different Asian countries; however, if I have the chance, I would like to visit parks there.

Mixed tenses and awkward phrasing. 'I don't have go to the park' is incorrect; use 'I don't have plans to go' or 'I am not planning to go.' 'These different, Asian' is unclear; specify 'different Asian countries.' Use conditional 'if I have the chance, I would like to visit parks.' Suggestion: use 'have plans' for future arrangements and 'would like' for conditional wishes.