公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., Yes, I liked going to parks.), use correct verb tenses (past simple), and avoid awkward phrasing. Add one specific supporting detail and a linking word. Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child. My parents often took me there so I could get physical exercise instead of sitting at home, because I was slightly overweight at that time.

建議: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct. Begin with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I still enjoy going to parks.), use correct verbs and coherent list linking words (for example, 'for exercise, to enjoy fresh air, and to relax'), and avoid unclear words like 'catch' and 'brave'. Provide one brief specific example.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks for regular walks. For example, I go there to get some exercise, enjoy the fresh air, and relax after a busy day.

建議: Answer directly and use correct tense and articles. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then explain why and give a specific example with accurate grammar (use 'a'/'the' and present/future tenses correctly). Use linking words (because, however).

範例: Definitely — I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve residents' health and well‑being. For example, I have been wanting to visit the Roma Street Park when I have free time; however, I am currently very busy with work.

建議: Be concise and correct tenses and phrasing. Start with a direct answer (Yes, I would like to visit Roma Street Park.), then add one specific reason or detail and a time reference. Avoid repetition of prior statements; instead extend with new information (what you want to do there).

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Roma Street Park in the future, which is in the heart of Brisbane. I plan to go there when I have free time to walk the trails and take photos of the gardens.

× I remember my parents, they will always talk me to the park because they want me to have a physic exercise rather than sitting at home as I am overweight when I was a kid.

✓ I remember my parents; they would always take me to the park because they wanted me to get physical exercise rather than sit at home, as I was overweight when I was a kid.

Errors: incorrect modal verb 'will' for habitual past action (should use would), wrong verb 'talk me to' instead of 'take me to', incorrect adjective 'physic' should be 'physical', gerund/infinitive choice 'to have a physical exercise' -> 'to get physical exercise', tense inconsistency 'as I am overweight when I was a kid' -> 'as I was overweight when I was a kid'. Suggestion: Use 'would' for habitual past, use correct verbs and adjectives, and keep past tense consistent for earlier time references.

× I do because of walking at the park, catch, brave the fresh air and also it is good to unwind.

✓ I do because I enjoy walking in the park, getting fresh air, playing catch, and it is also good to unwind.

Errors: incorrect structure 'because of walking at the park' should be 'because I enjoy walking in the park' (use subject + verb). 'catch' lacks form and object; use 'playing catch'. 'brave the fresh air' is incorrect collocation; use 'getting fresh air'. Maintain parallel gerund forms. Suggestion: Use parallel gerund phrases (walking, getting, playing) and correct preposition 'in the park'.

× Definitely, yes. I wanted to go Roma Street Park one day when I have a free time. Right now I'm quite busy at work so I hardly have a free time to visit there yet.

✓ Definitely, yes. I want to go to Roma Street Park one day when I have free time. Right now I'm quite busy at work, so I hardly have any free time to visit yet.

Errors: 'I wanted to go' implies past desire but context is present desire -> use present 'I want'. Missing preposition 'to' after 'go'. 'a free time' is incorrect; use 'free time' or 'any free time'. 'visit there' is redundant; use 'visit' or 'go there'. Suggestion: Use present tense for current wishes, include required prepositions, and use uncountable 'free time' with 'any' when negative.

× At what I say before, I wanted to visit Roma Street Park, which is located in the heart of Brisbane. I would definitely go when I have my free time.

✓ As I said before, I want to visit Roma Street Park, which is located in the heart of Brisbane. I will definitely go when I have free time.

Errors: 'At what I say before' is incorrect phrasing; use 'As I said before'. 'I wanted to visit' uses past tense for a present intention; use 'I want to visit'. 'I would definitely go when I have my free time' is conditional/informal; use 'I will definitely go when I have free time' to express future intention. Suggestion: Use correct referencing phrase, maintain present/future tense consistency for intentions, and avoid unnecessary possessive 'my' with 'free time'.