公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but has many grammar and coherence problems. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences), start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and natural collocations (e.g., "I was really into going to parks," "play outdoor games," "hang out with my friends"). Avoid redundant phrases like "around and around" and unclear words like "recycling" if you don’t mean them.

範例: I was really into going to parks as a child. I enjoyed playing outdoor games and climbing trees with my friends, which we often did after school. Those visits were fun because we could run freely and invent games together.

建議: Good contrast between past and present, but grammar and phrasing need correction. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I still like going to parks"), then explain the change using linking words (e.g., "however" or "now"). Use natural expressions such as "I prefer peaceful activities" and avoid incomplete phrases like "rather than run around the."

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks; however, my activities have changed. These days I prefer peaceful activities — for example, sitting with friends to chat and having a picnic — rather than running around like I did as a child.

建議: The idea is clear but the sentence structure and word choice are weak. Use a direct topic sentence ("Yes, I would like more parks in my city") and support it with specific reasons linked by connectors ("because" and "so"). Use correct noun-verb agreement ("parks have large areas of trees"), concise vocabulary ("green spaces" or "greenery"), and complete your thought — finish the second reason.

範例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because parks provide green spaces and fresh air. They make the urban environment more comfortable and give people places to relax and exercise.

建議: Your answer conveys preference but needs clearer, grammatically correct phrasing and more specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence ("Yes, I'd like to visit a park with lots of flowers"). Then add one or two specific details (location, season, activities) using linking words like "for example" or "because". Replace vague phrases like "kind of having the amount" with "that has many" and use plural forms correctly.

範例: Yes, I'd like to visit a park that has many beautiful flowerbeds. For example, a botanical garden in spring would be ideal because I enjoy seeing different flower species and taking photos among the blooms.

× Yes, I really into going to park to play outside activities since I was a kid because I often can with my friends to recycling around and around in park and we totally have fun of that.

✓ Yes, I really enjoyed going to parks to play outside when I was a kid because I could often go with my friends to run around in the park and we totally had fun.

Errors include incorrect or missing prepositions ('into' -> 'enjoyed' or 'interested in'; 'to park' -> 'to parks' with plural and article), incorrect verb forms and modal usage ('can with my friends to recycling' is ungrammatical). Also tense consistency: question asks about childhood so past tense is appropriate. Suggestions: use 'enjoyed' for past habit, use 'go with my friends' or 'could often go with my friends', use 'run around in the park' and 'have fun' -> 'had fun'. Replace 'recycling around and around' with 'run around'. Use articles and plurals correctly.

× Yes, I still really fond of going to parks now, but it's different for doing something from when I was a kid. Right now I tend to prefer things like just peaceful, sit down with my friends to chat and have a picnic rather than run around the.

✓ Yes, I am still really fond of going to parks now, but I do different things compared with when I was a kid. Right now I tend to prefer peaceful activities, such as sitting down with my friends to chat and have a picnic rather than running around.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' for present state ('I still really fond' -> 'I am still really fond'). Awkward phrase 'different for doing something from' should be 'do different things compared with'. Verb forms: parallel structure requires gerunds for activities ('sitting' and 'running around'). The final 'the' is unnecessary. Suggestions: include the correct form of 'to be' for present descriptions, use comparative phrase 'compared with', and use gerunds to list preferred activities.

× Yes, I I will really like that if I see more parks in my city because parks is always have a large areas of green tree like this kind of sceneries and this sceneries can definitely make our environment more comfortable and also.

✓ Yes, I would really like that if I saw more parks in my city because parks always have large areas of green trees and such scenery can definitely make our environment more comfortable.

Pronoun and modal errors: double 'I I' and 'I will really like that if I see' is mixed conditional; use 'would...if I saw' for hypothetical present. Subject-verb agreement and articles: 'parks is always have' should be 'parks always have'; 'a large areas' incorrect article/number -> 'large areas'; 'green tree' -> 'green trees'; 'this kind of sceneries' -> 'such scenery' or 'these kinds of scenes'. Suggestions: use conditional 'would' with past form for hypothetical, ensure singular/plural agreement, remove redundant words, and use 'scenery' as uncountable.

× Yes, I, I would really like to go into a park that's kind of having the amount of beautiful flowers. You know, the normal parks are just having some walking paths and a big amount of trees, but the flower is more beautiful than that.

✓ Yes, I would really like to go to a park that has many beautiful flowers. You know, normal parks just have some walking paths and a large number of trees, but the flowers are more beautiful in that kind of park.

Incorrect use of progressive form 'having' for possession: use simple present 'has' for characteristic. 'Go into a park' is less natural than 'go to a park'. 'The amount of beautiful flowers' should be 'many beautiful flowers' or 'a large number of flowers'. 'Are just having' -> 'just have'. Agreement: 'the flower is' -> 'the flowers are'. Suggestions: use simple present 'has' for describing features, use 'many' or 'a large number of' for countable nouns, and ensure plural agreement.