公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetitions and incorrect verb tenses (use past tense for childhood).

範例: Yes, I did. I loved going to parks as a child because I enjoyed playing on the swings and looking at the colourful flowers. Also, spending time outdoors always lifted my spirits and made me feel happy.

建議: Use present tense correctly and avoid idioms used incorrectly. Give one clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' but keep sentences shorter and natural.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I find that walking there improves my mood because the fresh air and greenery are relaxing. For example, I often go with friends to chat and exercise, which helps me spend my free time productively.

建議: Answer directly and give specific reasons. Avoid vague phrasing like 'gaining many knowledges.' Explain what benefits more parks would bring (health, community, environment) and use correct plural/singular forms.

範例: Yes, I would. Currently my hometown has only two parks, so more green spaces would be beneficial. For instance, additional parks would encourage people to exercise, provide places for families to meet, and improve air quality.

建議: Be concise and correct word order. Start with a short direct reply, then give a specific reason and one detail. Avoid repeating 'I want' and unnecessary phrases like 'candidly speaking.'

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Rose Garden in Chandigarh. I am fond of roses, and that garden has many varieties and colours, so I would enjoy seeing the different plants and taking photographs.

× Yes, definitely, I like to go to the park as a child because I enjoyed swings and flowers in the park in my old days and it also helps to uplift my mood and I felt over the mood whenever I visited park as a child.

✓ Yes, definitely. I liked going to the park as a child because I enjoyed the swings and the flowers there; it also lifted my mood and I felt happy whenever I visited the park.

The response mixes present and past tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. The question asks about childhood, so past tense is required (liked, enjoyed, lifted, felt, visited). Add definite article before 'swings' and 'flowers' to refer to specific items in the park. Use 'happy' instead of the unclear phrase 'over the mood.' Also include 'the' before 'park' where referring to a specific park. Suggestions: maintain consistent past tense for past experiences, use appropriate articles, and choose clear adjectives for emotions.

× In my opinion, I mostly like to go to the park in present days because it helps me to uplift my mood and I feel on the cloud 9 whenever I visit park with my own companions and with my kit and kins because it also utilized my time in a proper and efficient way.

✓ In my opinion, I mostly like to go to the park these days because it helps lift my mood and I feel on cloud nine whenever I visit the park with my friends and relatives because it also uses my time in a proper and efficient way.

Use present tense for current habits (like, helps, feel, visit). Replace 'in present days' with 'these days.' 'On cloud 9' idiom is 'on cloud nine.' Use 'the park' when speaking about a specific park. 'My own companions and my kit and kins' is incorrect—use 'friends and relatives.' 'Utilized' is past and formal; use 'uses' or 'makes use of' to match present tense. Suggestions: keep verbs in present for current preferences, use standard idioms, and choose common nouns for people (friends/relatives).

× Yes, of course, I would like to see more parks in my city in upcoming days because in present days there are only two parks which are available in my hometown and I would like to see to increase the number of parks in the future days because it is helpful for gaining many knowledges.

✓ Yes, of course. I would like to see more parks built in my city in the coming days because at present there are only two parks in my hometown, and I would like the number of parks to increase in the future because they are helpful for gaining knowledge.

The sentence uses awkward time expressions and incorrect noun forms. Use 'in the coming days' or 'in the future' for future reference. 'In present days' should be 'at present' or 'currently.' 'Which are available' is unnecessary; simply 'there are only two parks.' 'I would like to see to increase' is ungrammatical; use 'I would like the number of parks to increase.' 'Knowledges' is uncountable—use 'knowledge.' Also change 'is helpful' to 'are helpful' to agree with plural 'parks.' Suggestions: use standard time phrases, correct verb patterns for expressing desire for change, and use uncountable nouns properly.

× Candidly speaking, I want I would like to go to the Rose garden which is located in the Chandigarh and I want to go there in upcoming days because I am fond of rose flowers and in the Rose garden there are so many roses present of different varieties and colours and I like to see them all in future.

✓ Candidly speaking, I would like to go to the Rose Garden in Chandigarh in the near future because I am fond of roses; the Rose Garden has many varieties and colours, and I would like to see them all.

The sentence repeats 'I want I would like'—choose one phrase ('I would like'). Use 'the Rose Garden' as a proper noun and drop the article before 'Chandigarh.' Use 'in the near future' or 'soon' instead of 'in upcoming days.' 'Rose flowers' is redundant—'roses' suffices. 'There are so many roses present of different varieties and colours' is wordy; rephrase to 'has many varieties and colours.' 'In future' should be 'in the future' or removed when already expressed. Suggestions: avoid repetition, use standard time expressions, simplify redundant phrases, and capitalize proper names.