公园— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a direct, grammatically correct topic sentence and then one or two clear supporting details. Avoid repetition and long, unconnected clauses. Use simple linking words (for example, because, so, and) and correct verb forms (e.g., “I liked” not “I would like to”). Keep to a maximum of 4–5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because they were fun and relaxing. For example, I used to play on the swings and climb trees with my friends. Because we had no homework or worries then, we spent hours running and playing, which made childhood very enjoyable.

建議: Start with a clear present-tense statement about your current habit, then add specific details about where and what you do. Use correct verb tenses and smoother phrasing (e.g., “I still enjoy going to the park” and “I often go to Mahatma Gandhi Park”). Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words like because and so.

範例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often visit the nearby Mahatma Gandhi Park in my free time because it has swings and open lawns. I usually play on the swings or walk around the park to relax after work.

建議: Answer the question clearly (yes/no) and then explain your reason briefly and specifically. Avoid listing unrelated shop names or unclear phrases. Use linking words (because, so, but) and correct prepositions (near, next to). Be concise and focus on whether you want more parks and why.

範例: No, I don’t think my city needs more parks because there is only one public park, MG Park, which is near Mahechat Bandar. However, the area around it is crowded with shops, so the park is often busy. I would prefer another quiet green space in a different neighborhood so residents have easier access.

建議: Give a focused answer about a specific park you want to visit and why. Avoid talking about cars unless it is relevant. Use correct future forms (I would like to visit / I want to go to) and provide one or two concrete reasons (scenery, facilities, location). Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit a large botanical park near my city in the future because it has beautiful gardens and walking paths. I want to go there to relax and take photos of the plants and lakes.

× Yes, Sir, I would like to going to park as a child, because childhood period is the without the worries and without any tension, because in childhood period there is a thing no tension about how to earn money.

✓ Yes Sir, I liked going to the park as a child, because childhood is without worries and tension; there is no concern about how to earn money.

The phrase 'would like to going' incorrectly combines 'would like to' with a gerund; after 'would like to' use the base verb (would like to go) or use the past simple 'liked' to refer to a past habit. 'Going to park' needs the definite article 'the park'. Also 'childhood period is the without the worries' has extra articles and incorrect word order; use 'childhood is without worries'. Remove redundant phrasing and use correct past tense for a childhood preference.

× Let me think, yes, I would like to go park now because in my free time I went to my nearby park.

✓ Let me think. Yes, I would like to go to the park now because in my free time I go to my nearby park.

'Would like to go park now' needs the preposition 'to' and the article 'the' -> 'go to the park'. The clause 'in my free time I went to my nearby park' mixes past tense 'went' with the present habitual meaning; use present simple 'I go' for routines. Ensure tense consistency with 'now' and habitual actions.

× That park name is a Mahatma Shahid Gandhi Park and still I play there and swings the swing.

✓ The park's name is Mahatma Shahid Gandhi Park and I still play there and use the swings.

'That park name is a...' is unnatural; use 'The park's name is...' or 'The park is called...'. Do not use the indefinite article 'a' before a proper park name. 'Swings the swing' is incorrect word order and form; use 'use the swings' or 'play on the swings'. Maintain subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.

× No there is only one park in my city.

✓ No, there is only one park in my city.

Sentence needs a comma after 'No' for clarity but grammatically the issue is fine; kept as corrected punctuation. Also ensure 'there is' correctly matches singular 'one park'.

× That park name was MG park and it is near to the Mahechat Bandar and it's a surrounding very clothes shops are there.

✓ The park's name is MG Park and it is near Mahechat Bandar; there are many clothing shops around it.

Use 'The park's name is...' or 'The park is called...'. 'Was' suggests past; use present 'is' for current facts. 'Near to' usually becomes 'near' followed by a place. 'It's a surrounding very clothes shops are there' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'there are many clothing shops around it'.

× One shop is youngsters and 1 is great look and 1:17 one shoe club 17.

✓ One shop sells youth clothing, another has a stylish appearance, and there is a shoe shop called 'One Shoe Club'.

Original sentence fragments and numeric punctuation '1:17' are unclear and ungrammatical. Clarify meaning by using parallel structure: 'One shop... another... and there is...'. Replace vague phrases with specific descriptions and proper nouns in a readable form.

× I would like to go park there and would car park.

✓ I would like to go to the park there and use the car park.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' ('go to the park'). 'Would car park' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'use the car park' or 'park my car'. Use full verbs to convey meaning.

× Yes, my future car is a that Mercedes-Benz and I park in the park that near me ground, which are very nice.

✓ Yes, my future car will be a Mercedes-Benz and I will park it in the park near my home, which is very nice.

Mixes noun phrases and tenses: 'is a that Mercedes-Benz' is incorrect; use 'will be a Mercedes-Benz' for future intention. 'I park in the park that near me ground' has wrong word order and missing prepositions; use 'park it in the park near my home'. 'Which are very nice' should agree in number with 'park' (singular) -> 'which is very nice'. Maintain consistent future tense for stated plans.

× My future cars, Mercedes and I park there.

✓ My future car will be a Mercedes, and I will park it there.

'My future cars, Mercedes and I park there' mixes plural and singular and lacks verbs. If referring to a single car, use singular 'car' and future 'will be'. For actions in the future use 'I will park it there'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and clear sentence structure.