History— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar and coherence: use correct verb tenses and sentence structures, and keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., “whereas”, “however”, “also”).

Example: Yes. I studied history at both school and university: in high school I learned world and local history, whereas at university I specialized in art history. This background has given me useful knowledge that I often apply to my design projects.

Suggestion: Make sentences grammatical and clearer: state method first (e.g., lectures, textbooks), then give one specific example and use linking words like “for example” or “in addition”. Avoid fragments and incorrect word forms.

Example: I usually learn history through lectures and textbooks provided by my school. For example, lecturers explain key events and dates in class and assign readings that summarize important developments.

Suggestion: Improve clarity and vocabulary: use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement), clearer links (e.g., “so that”, “which helps”), and provide a concrete example of a benefit. Limit to 2–3 sentences to be concise.

Example: I believe learning history helps us understand the past so that we can avoid repeating the same mistakes. It also provides inspiration from famous historical figures, for example by showing how leaders overcame challenges.

Suggestion: Correct grammar and make the response more natural and slightly more specific: use a clear topic sentence, then support it with one specific reason and a linking phrase like “for example” or “because”.

Example: Yes, I think learning history is very important because it helps us understand how society developed. For example, studying past social movements can explain how laws changed and guide current decision-making.

× Yes, I have both at school and at university, but different field of history.

✓ Yes, I have studied history both at school and at university, but in different fields of history.

The original mixes present perfect 'have' with an incomplete phrase and uses singular 'field' incorrectly. Use 'have studied' to match the question about past experience and plural 'fields' because two contexts (school and university) imply different areas. Also reordering makes the sentence clearer.

× In high school I study about world history and local history, but in university I mostly study about art history.

✓ In high school I studied world history and local history, but at university I mostly studied art history.

The question asks about past study; use past tense 'studied' rather than present 'study'. Also use 'at university' instead of 'in university' and remove unnecessary 'about' after 'study'.

× That helped me gain a lot of knowledge that I can use to design my work.

✓ That helped me gain a lot of knowledge that I can use in designing my work.

The clause 'that I can use to design my work' is awkward. Use 'in designing my work' to express purpose; 'helped' correctly is past tense. Alternatively 'that I can use in my work' is acceptable.

× From school teaching by lecturers, they usually provide information from books that come with the basic fundamental schools curriculum.

✓ From school lectures: teachers usually provide information from textbooks that accompany the basic school curriculum.

Original has awkward structure and incorrect word choices: 'school teaching by lecturers' and 'fundamental schools curriculum'. Change to 'school lectures' and 'textbooks' and 'school curriculum' for correct collocation and clearer sentence structure.

× Teach us with information date event.

✓ They teach us about important dates and events.

Original is fragmentary and ungrammatical. Use a full clause with subject 'They' and verb 'teach' and the correct preposition 'about' and plural nouns 'dates and events'. This corrects sentence structure and noun forms.

× In my opinion, I think that learning history help we learn about past and we can avoid making the same mistake we made in the past and also inspire ration from famous people in the past.

✓ In my opinion, I think that learning history helps us learn about the past; we can avoid making the same mistakes we made before and also be inspired by famous people from the past.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('learning history helps' not 'help'), incorrect pronoun 'we' as object should be 'us', missing articles 'the past', plural 'mistakes', awkward phrase 'inspire ration' should be 'be inspired by'. The corrected sentence fixes verb agreement, pronoun case, articles, pluralization, and word choice.

× Learning history are very crucial for a lot of people.

✓ Learning history is very crucial for a lot of people.

Subject 'Learning history' is a singular noun phrase and requires singular verb 'is', not plural 'are'.

× As I mentioned, learning history help us understand how society developed and we can avoid repeating past mistakes.

✓ As I mentioned, learning history helps us understand how society developed, and we can avoid repeating past mistakes.

Subject-verb agreement: 'learning history' takes singular verb 'helps', not 'help'. Add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. Past tense 'developed' is acceptable when referring to historical development.