Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and filler words, and add one specific supporting detail (e.g., what you enjoy about playing). Use linking words if adding detail.

Example: Yes. My main hobby is playing the piano; I have been practising it for almost twelve years. I enjoy learning new pieces because it helps me relax and improve my concentration.

Suggestion: Give a complete, grammatically correct sentence as a topic sentence and finish your thought. Avoid hesitation and incomplete endings. Add one clear reason or memory, using a linking word (e.g., because, so) to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I loved playing in the yard with my brother when I was a child. It was great exercise and because he was very active, he encouraged me to run and play more, which made our afternoons really lively.

Suggestion: Respond with a clear topic sentence naming the hobbies, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases like “emerging the other world.” Use precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘immersing myself in stories’).

Example: Yes, I have played the piano and read books since childhood. For example, reading fiction lets me immerse myself in different worlds, and piano practice helps me develop discipline and creativity.

Suggestion: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer and complete the sentence. Remove hesitations and supply a clear reason or brief detail about family practice. If you mention others, finish the thought about parents or family influence.

Example: Yes, my brother and I both play the piano — we have attended piano school since we were children. Our father encouraged us to learn because he believes music is important for concentration and creativity.

× Yes, I have a few things to do in my free time and the most the best hobby for me is playing the piano.

✓ Yes, I have a few things to do in my free time, and the best hobby for me is playing the piano.

The phrase 'the most the best' is redundant and incorrect. Use a single article phrase 'the best' to indicate the top hobby. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate independent clauses. Suggestion: Choose one correct superlative phrase and punctuate two clauses with a comma.

× I've been practicing the piano for almost 12 years.

✓ I've been practicing the piano for almost 12 years.

This sentence is grammatically correct for describing an action that started in the past and continues to the present. No change needed. Keep present perfect continuous for ongoing duration.

× Yes, when I was a child I liked playing uh, in the yard with my brother.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked playing in the yard with my brother.

Remove filler 'uh' in spoken transcripts for clarity. The past tense 'liked' correctly matches 'when I was a child.' Ensure no extra commas interrupt the phrase.

× It was so fun and nice for me to uh exercise and also my brother is more active than me so it made me.

✓ It was so fun and nice for me to exercise, and my brother was more active than me, so I became more active too.

Original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'It made me' is incomplete; specify what it made you do (become more active). Use past tense 'was' to match 'It was' and 'became' to indicate change. Remove filler 'uh' and add commas to separate clauses.

× Yes, I have umm, the playing the piano and reading books are hobbies that I've had since childhood and for me uh, listening to music or emerging the other world or so fun things for me.

✓ Yes, playing the piano and reading books are hobbies that I've had since childhood, and listening to music or escaping into other worlds is also very enjoyable for me.

Remove the extra article 'the' before 'playing the piano.' 'Emerging the other world' is incorrect; use 'escaping into other worlds' or 'immersing myself in other worlds.' Also remove fillers and fix subject-verb agreement: 'listening... is also very enjoyable' uses singular 'is' because the activity is treated as a single idea. Add commas for clarity.

× Yes, I and my brother share the hobby that playing the piano.

✓ Yes, my brother and I share the hobby of playing the piano.

English convention places the speaker last: 'my brother and I.' Use 'share the hobby of playing the piano' or 'share the hobby of playing piano.' Also change 'that playing' to 'of playing' for correct noun phrase.

× We are attending to uh, piano school since we since we, we are child.

✓ We have been attending piano school since we were children.

Use present perfect continuous or present perfect 'have been attending' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant words. Use 'since we were children' (past tense) rather than 'since we are child.' Also omit the preposition 'to' after 'attending'—we 'attend piano school' not 'attend to piano school.' Suggestion: Use 'have been attending' + 'since' + past time reference.

× Umm, I think this is umm, the dessert that my father and.

✓ I think this is a tradition that my father started.

Original sentence is incomplete and uses 'dessert' likely in error for 'tradition' — context suggests a family habit or tradition. Provide a complete clause with subject and verb. Remove fillers 'umm' and finish the idea. If the intended word was 'dessert,' clarify context; otherwise use 'tradition' or 'habit.'