Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct subject-verb agreement (e.g., “my main hobbies are watching and playing football”). Use specific examples (how often you play, who with) to make the answer richer.

Example: My main hobbies are playing and watching football. I play football twice a week with friends at a local pitch, which keeps me fit and helps me bond with people. I also enjoy watching matches on weekends because it’s exciting to follow my favourite team and discuss tactics with others.

Suggestion: Organize the reply: give a clear topic sentence about childhood hobby, then add specific details (where, who, any memorable incidents) using linking words (e.g., “because”, “so”, “for example”). Correct tense and pronouns, and avoid fragmented sentences. Replace unclear phrases (e.g., “less a document football”) with clear descriptions like “homemade balls”.

Example: Yes. I started playing football when I was a child. For example, my friends and I used to meet at the village field or the school playground to play. We often made our own balls from old cloth and plastic, which was fun and taught us to be resourceful.

Suggestion: Answer directly: state that you’ve enjoyed movies since childhood, then give specific supporting details (how films were shown, who you went with, how often). Use linking words for coherence and correct phrases (e.g., “travelled from nearby villages with portable TVs and DVDs”). Keep sentences clear and avoid filler words.

Example: Yes, I have liked watching movies since I was a child. In my village, people from nearby towns would bring a TV and DVDs to screen films, so we would gather and watch together. I remember asking my father for money to go with my friends because it was a special community event.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence stating whether your family shares your hobbies, then give concise specific details (who enjoys which hobby and why). Avoid repetition and unclear references. Use correct grammar (e.g., “my mother is a fan of one team, Simba”) and linking words to explain causes or effects.

Example: Yes, my family shares my interest in football. My father used to play locally but stopped after a knee injury, and my mother is a devoted fan of the Simba team. So football is a passion that runs in our family and we often watch matches together.

× The most important hobby that I like are watching football, playing football and the second one is just watching movies.

✓ The most important hobby that I like is watching and playing football, and the second one is watching movies.

Subject 'The most important hobby' is singular so verb should be 'is' (singular). Also list items should be parallel and concise: combine 'watching football, playing football' into 'watching and playing football'. Use commas and conjunctions to separate items. Suggestion: Identify the main subject and ensure verb number matches; make list items parallel.

× I really like the first one really because with the first one playing football of course make you being active and meet the friends a lot of people, which is very good for how you engage with.

✓ I really like the first one because playing football keeps you active and helps you meet many people, which is very good for how you interact with others.

Use gerund phrase 'playing football' as subject; verb forms must agree: 'keeps' (third-person singular) not 'make'. 'Being active' is wordy; use 'keeps you active'. 'Meet the friends a lot of people' is ungrammatical: use 'meet many people'. 'Engage with' needs an object 'others'. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb agreement and simpler verb phrases; ensure objects follow prepositions.

× Others and maybe look for opportunities of life and but with that also I guess you can share with what you have with others and that is very important I think.

✓ Others, and maybe look for life opportunities. But with that, I guess you can also share what you have with others, and that is very important, I think.

The sentence had improper conjunctions and run-on structure: 'and but' is redundant. Break into two sentences or use proper connectors. 'Opportunities of life' should be 'life opportunities'. Place 'also' in correct position: 'can also share'. Suggestion: Avoid stacking conjunctions; split long thoughts into clearer sentences and place adverbs correctly.

× Yes, my hobby that I have now which is playing football started doing.

✓ Yes, my hobby now, which is playing football, started when I was young.

'Started doing' is awkward and missing time reference. Use 'started when I was young' or 'started in childhood'. Maintain past tense 'started' with a clear time expression. Suggestion: Use 'started' plus a time clause to indicate when the activity began.

× I was very young when I was a kid.

✓ I was very young.

'When I was a kid' is redundant after 'I was very young'. Keep one clear expression. Alternatively: 'I started when I was a kid' if linking to previous sentence. Suggestion: Avoid redundancy; choose one phrase to express the idea.

× So during that time I Remember Me and my friends were just meet in a local stadiums in our village and or sometimes in a school where you were playing soccer and saw something which is was very funny was we were using less a document football.

✓ During that time I remember my friends and me meeting in local stadiums in our village, or sometimes at a school where we played soccer. Something very funny was that we used homemade footballs.

Problems: 'Remember Me' incorrect pronoun order; 'were just meet' wrong verb form; 'in a local stadiums' wrong preposition and number; 'where you were playing' wrong subject; 'using less a document football' unclear phrase — intended 'homemade footballs' or 'balls made from documents'. Suggestion: Use correct pronoun order 'my friends and me', use gerund/participial forms for activities, match prepositions ('at a school'), and replace unclear phrases with precise nouns.

× So we are not using. This football which are made from industries, so which was very funny, something that I like the most because sometimes I was able to make those balls myself really.

✓ We did not use factory-made footballs, which was very funny. I liked that the most because sometimes I was able to make those balls myself.

Sentence fragments and article/use issues: 'This football which are made from industries' should be 'factory-made footballs' or 'football made in factories'. Use past tense 'did not use' consistent with narrative. Combine fragments into coherent sentences. Suggestion: Use correct noun phrases (factory-made footballs), maintain past tense, and avoid sentence fragments.

× Yeah, really. So apart from football, again, I think about movie, you know, I was in the village.

✓ Yes. Apart from football, I also think about movies because I was in a village.

Inconsistent number: 'movie' should be plural 'movies' when speaking generally. 'I was in the village' is acceptable but 'in a village' is more natural. Maintain consistent tense and plurality. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general activities and choose indefinite article for nonspecific places.

× So at that time we had some people who came from less far away in other village coming our village with TV's and some DVDs to like show some movies.

✓ At that time some people came from nearby villages to our village with TVs and DVDs to show movies.

Problems: 'came from less far away in other village' is ungrammatical — use 'nearby villages'. 'coming our village' should be 'to our village'. 'TV's' incorrect apostrophe; use 'TVs'. 'to like show' unnecessary filler 'like'. Suggestion: Use concise prepositional phrases ('from nearby villages to our village'), correct plural forms, and remove filler words.

× And yeah, so I was remember like going to my father born for ask for money so that we can go.

✓ And yes, I remember going to my father to ask for money so that we could go.

'I was remember' is incorrect; use 'I remember' or 'I remembered'. 'father born for ask for money' is garbled — should be 'father to ask for money'. Use past modal 'could' for ability in past. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms ('remember'/'remembered') and infinitive 'to ask', and past modal 'could'.

× So of course to watch movies.

✓ We went to watch movies.

Fragment lacking clear subject and verb. Combine with previous sentence or convert to full sentence: 'We went to watch movies.' Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; ensure each sentence has a subject and verb.

× So you can, uh, say like it was just movie, but it's all like modern cinema nowadays, so yeah.

✓ You could say it was just movies, but they were like modern cinema at the time.

'It was just movie' needs plural 'movies' or 'a movie'. 'It's all like modern cinema nowadays' mixes past and present incorrectly; clarify that the movies were similar to modern cinema. Use 'could' for past context. Suggestion: Match number and tense, and avoid filler words like 'like'.

× So for example, my, my, of course my father was playing football.

✓ For example, my father used to play football.

'Was playing football' suggests a continuous action at a specific time; for a habitual past activity, use 'used to play'. Remove duplicate 'my'. Suggestion: Use 'used to' for repeated past actions and avoid repetition.

× And of course he, he played in a local area, like in the same village.

✓ He played in a local area, in the same village.

Duplicate pronoun 'he, he' should be single 'he'. Otherwise sentence is acceptable. Suggestion: Remove repeated words and keep concise.

× But of course he, he got injured in his knees.

✓ But of course he injured his knee(s).

'Got injured in his knees' is awkward; say 'he injured his knee' or 'he injured his knees'. Use simple past 'injured'. Suggestion: Use direct verb 'injured' with correct singular/plural for body parts.

× So because of that, he's not playing anymore.

✓ Because of that, he does not play anymore.

Contraction 'he's' can be ambiguous (he is/has); use 'he does not play anymore' for clarity in present habitual context. Both present perfect and simple present could work depending on nuance. Suggestion: Use full forms to avoid ambiguity and choose appropriate present tense for habits.

× Of course now he's old.

✓ Of course, he is now older.

'He's old' is acceptable conversationally, but 'he is now older' is clearer and grammatically smoother here. Suggestion: Use 'older' to indicate change over time and avoid contractions in formal responses.

× Of course, my, my mother too like to. So like he's, she's a fan of 1 football team.

✓ My mother also likes football. She is a fan of one football team.

Multiple issues: repeated 'my', 'like to' missing object, confusing pronouns 'he's, she's' wrong gender. Use 'likes' for third-person singular and 'she is' to refer to mother. Suggestion: Keep pronouns consistent and use correct verb forms for third-person singular.

× It doesn't. So it's like I think this passion of football is rooted into from the family, family perspective, because my mother is Simba, my father is is younger.

✓ I think this passion for football is rooted in the family because my mother supports Simba and my father supports another team.

'It doesn't' is unclear and unrelated. 'Rooted into from' is wrong preposition usage; use 'rooted in the family'. 'My mother is Simba' is incorrect — likely means 'supports Simba'. 'my father is is younger' is garbled; clarify father's team or preference. Remove repeated 'family'. Suggestion: State family influence clearly, use 'rooted in', and clearly identify team support for each parent.