Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and phrasing, avoid filler words. Add one or two specific details (what kinds of books, how long you read each day) and use a linking phrase to make it coherent.

Example: Yes. I enjoy reading books and I still read almost every day. I mainly read contemporary fiction and history, spending about an hour each evening. Because reading helps me relax and learn new ideas, it has been my favorite hobby since primary school.

Suggestion: Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Use past simple to describe childhood habits and give concrete examples of how the hobby helped you (e.g., learned empathy, improved vocabulary). Use a linking word to connect points and finish the thought.

Example: Yes. As a child I read a lot of stories and picture books. This habit improved my vocabulary and helped me understand other people's feelings, which made me more empathetic. Because of that, reading shaped my values and confidence.

Suggestion: Correct small grammar issues and be more specific about the hobby. Use present simple for general habits, correct prepositions and verbs, and add an example of a favorite artist or how often you listen. Use a linking word to connect to the previous idea.

Example: Yes. Besides reading, I've listened to hip hop since childhood. I usually listen to it when I study or exercise because it helps me feel relaxed and motivated. For example, I often listen to Kendrick Lamar or local hip hop playlists for about 30 minutes each day.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid vague phrases such as “literally” or filler comments. Give a clear topic sentence, then a specific example of a movie you like to watch with your family and how often. Use a linking phrase to explain why you share hobbies.

Example: Yes. I enjoy watching movies in my free time, which is something my parents like too. For instance, we often watch comedies together on weekends, so sharing this hobby helps us relax and bond.

× I think I really like reading books and until now I still reading books almost every day.

✓ I think I really like reading books and until now I still read books almost every day.

The phrase 'still reading' is incorrect because after 'still' we need the base form for habitual present actions with 'do' or present simple. Use present simple 'read' to express a habitual action. Suggestion: Use 'I still read' for routines; use 'I am still reading' only if describing an action in progress now.

× It is the hobby that I had since I was really younger, like in the primary school.

✓ It is a hobby I have had since I was very young, like in primary school.

The original mixes past and present incorrectly and uses awkward word order. 'Had since' is wrong when the hobby continues to present; use present perfect 'have had'. 'Really younger' is ungrammatical; use 'very young'. Also 'the primary school' should be 'primary school' (no article). Suggestion: Use present perfect for actions starting in the past and continuing now and simpler adjective phrases.

× I remember that when I was still a younger child, umm, I have had the hobby of reading books and I think that this hobby literally helped me a lot like it helped me to build my moral values and also made my personality stronger.

✓ I remember that when I was a young child, I had the hobby of reading books and I think that this hobby really helped me a lot: it helped me build my moral values and made my personality stronger.

Mixed tenses and pronoun/reference issues: 'still a younger child' is awkward; 'have had' conflicts with 'remember' (use simple past 'had' to describe a past state). 'Literally' is unnecessary and often misused; 'really' is better. 'Helped me to build' can be simplified to 'helped me build'. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistent when describing past memories and avoid filler words.

× So I think I.

✓ So I think so.

The fragment 'So I think I.' is incomplete and lacks an object or continuation. 'So I think so.' completes the idea, agreeing with previous statement. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; ensure sentences express a full idea.

× Well, expect reading books.

✓ Well, except reading books,

'Expect' is incorrect; the intended word is 'except' (a preposition). This is a word choice error rather than a grammatical tense issue. Suggestion: Use 'except' to indicate exclusion; ensure correct spelling.

× It is listening to hip hop music.

✓ It is listening to hip-hop music.

Hyphenation: 'hip hop' is commonly written 'hip-hop' as a compound adjective or noun. The grammar is acceptable but spelling needs correction. Suggestion: Use 'hip-hop' consistently.

× When I listening to hip hop music I can always feel that my brain become relaxed and motivated.

✓ When I listen to hip-hop music, I can always feel that my brain becomes relaxed and motivated.

'When I listening' is ungrammatical; after 'when' use present simple 'I listen' for habitual actions. 'Become' should be 'becomes' to agree with third-person singular subject 'my brain'. Also add comma after the subordinate clause. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual 'when' clauses and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Now I also like to watch some movies when I enjoy my spare time.

✓ Now I also like to watch movies when I have spare time.

'When I enjoy my spare time' is awkward and ungrammatical; use 'when I have spare time' or 'in my spare time'. 'Some movies' is acceptable but 'movies' is more natural. Suggestion: Use common collocations: 'have spare time' or 'in my spare time'.

× And this is also the hobby of my parents.

✓ This is also my parents' hobby.

The original is grammatical but slightly awkward. Possessive form 'my parents' hobby' is more natural in English. Suggestion: Use possessive noun forms for ownership.

× So I think I literally have the same hobbies as my family members.

✓ So I think I have the same hobbies as my family members.

'Literally' is misused as an intensifier and is unnecessary here. Remove it for clarity. Suggestion: Avoid overusing 'literally' unless stating a literal fact.

× Like, you know, family members always have the common points in some aspects.

✓ You know, family members often have common interests in some aspects.

'Have the common points' is unnatural; use 'have common interests' or 'share things in common'. 'Always' is too strong; 'often' is more appropriate. Suggestion: Prefer natural collocations such as 'common interests' and adjust adverb strength to match certainty.