Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, grammatically correct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and word choice (e.g., “I enjoy cooking,” “ingredients,” “weekend ingredients,” “Taiwanese traditional food”). Avoid filler words and repetition.

Example: I enjoy cooking, especially Taiwanese traditional dishes. For example, when I go to the grocery store I buy fresh ingredients on weekends and then spend a few hours preparing dumplings or braised pork. I find cooking relaxing and a great way to share my culture with friends.

Suggestion: Use past tense consistently and organize the answer: one clear topic sentence about childhood hobbies, then specific examples linked with connectors (e.g., “for example,” “we often”). Replace vague phrases with precise items and correct grammar (e.g., “I enjoyed playing with toys, especially puzzles and Lego”).

Example: When I was a child, I enjoyed playing with toys, especially puzzles and Lego. For example, my sisters and I would spend afternoons at the playground building Lego models and racing toy cars, which helped my creativity and problem-solving skills.

Suggestion: Clarify the hobby (it seems to be eating or baking sweets) and use correct vocabulary. State the hobby clearly, then give specific examples and linkers. Use present perfect or present to show continuation since childhood (e.g., “I've loved baking since I was a child”).

Example: I've loved baking since I was a child, especially cakes with cream and strawberries. For example, I often baked simple sponge cakes on weekends and later learned recipes for cream-filled pastries, which is still my favorite way to relax.

Suggestion: Answer directly: say whether you share hobbies, then give specific activities you do together. Use clearer vocabulary (“sweets,” “department store,” “make tea,” “watch TV”) and linking words to describe frequency (e.g., “sometimes,” “often”). Avoid vague phrases like “quite high level.”

Example: Yes. My younger sister and I both enjoy sweets, so sometimes we buy desserts at the department store and then make tea at home to enjoy them together while watching TV. We do this on weekends, which is a nice way to relax and bond.

× Yes I did I have hobbies I like to cook so I quite enjoying cooking in court.

✓ Yes, I do. I have a hobby: I like to cook, so I quite enjoy cooking at home.

The student mixed past and present ('did' with present meaning) and used incorrect verb forms. Use simple present 'do' for current habits; 'quite enjoying' is incorrect — use 'quite enjoy'. 'in court' is likely a mis-saying for 'at home' or 'in the kitchen', so replace with appropriate location. Suggestion: maintain present tense for habits and use base verb or simple present (I enjoy).

× For example, when I go to the grocery store, I like to grab some weekend links Vegas and come back to cook like Taiwan traditional food and also I.

✓ For example, when I go to the grocery store, I like to buy some ingredients for the weekend and come back to cook traditional Taiwanese food.

Errors include wrong words ('links Vegas') and awkward structure. 'Like to grab' is acceptable but 'grab some weekend links Vegas' is meaningless. Use 'buy some ingredients for the weekend'. Also 'Taiwan traditional food' should be 'traditional Taiwanese food'. Remove the trailing 'and also I'. Keep verbs in simple present for habits.

× Yes, I have some hobby when I was child, it's like I enjoy playing my toy specially in the playground and also some people play with my sisters and we like puzzle, Lego or even the car or play those.

✓ Yes, I had some hobbies when I was a child. I enjoyed playing with my toys, especially in the playground. My sisters and I played together; we liked puzzles, Lego, cars, and similar toys.

Talking about childhood requires past tense ('had', 'was', 'enjoyed', 'played', 'liked'). Also plural/singular and word order fixes: 'hobby' -> 'hobbies', 'when I was child' -> 'when I was a child', 'playing my toy' -> 'playing with my toys'. Use past simple consistently for past habits.

× So when I was child I quite enjoying play.

✓ So when I was a child I quite enjoyed playing.

This sentence mixes past time reference with present continuous form 'quite enjoying play'. Use past simple 'enjoyed' and gerund 'playing'. Also insert 'a' in 'a child'. Maintain correct verb form for past.

× I see uh, another hobby when I was childhood.

✓ I have another hobby from my childhood.

The phrase 'when I was childhood' is incorrect. Use 'from my childhood' or 'when I was a child'. If referring to a hobby that still exists, use present perfect or present ('I have'); if strictly past, use past tense. Rephrase for clarity.

× I specially like to enjoy heart break, especially inside have some cream or some of cake inside have strawberry cream or some sweet.

✓ I especially like desserts, especially those with cream inside, like cakes with strawberry cream or other sweets.

'Specially' should be 'especially' to emphasize preference. 'Heart break' is likely misused for 'dessert' or 'sweet'. Sentence structure is awkward; use 'desserts' and clarify 'cakes with strawberry cream'. Use noun forms appropriately and avoid literal translations.

× I really like to enjoy the sweet and also like a baking sometime I did make.

✓ I really like sweets and I also enjoy baking; sometimes I bake them myself.

Maintain consistent tense and correct verb forms. 'Like to enjoy the sweet' is redundant — 'like sweets'. 'Like a baking sometime I did make' is ungrammatical; use 'I enjoy baking' and 'sometimes I bake'. Use simple present for general preferences, past for specific past actions.

× Yes, I did one of my family member quite enjoy the suite is my younger sister and sometime we went to the department store like uh, we can grab some sweet and we will come back to make some tea and enjoy together and watch TV.

✓ Yes, one of my family members who really enjoys sweets is my younger sister. Sometimes we go to the department store to buy sweets, then we come back, make tea, enjoy them together, and watch TV.

Several tense and agreement issues: use present tense for habitual actions ('go', 'come back', 'make'). 'I did' is unnecessary. 'One of my family member' should be 'one of my family members'. 'Suite' -> 'sweets'. 'Sometime we went' mixes past; use 'sometimes we go'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent tense.

× So it's quite high level.

✓ So it's really nice.

'Quite high level' is inappropriate to describe enjoying sweets and tea; choose a more natural adjective like 'nice' or 'pleasant'. This is a meaning/style issue rather than strict grammar, but improving word choice makes the sentence natural.