Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and natural. The word “unfortunately” is odd here and creates confusion. Give a clear topic sentence stating whether you have hobbies, then briefly list one or two main hobbies or say you have many and name examples. Keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences) and avoid fillers.

Example: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy cooking and swimming the most, and I also like reading when I have free time.

Suggestion: Use past tense and avoid hesitations and unclear words. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then provide specific examples with brief reasons. Replace unclear word “wedding” (probably meant ‘drawing’ or similar) and reduce fillers like “uh”/“umm.” Use linking words like “for example” or “also.”

Example: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. For example, I used to swim regularly and I loved cooking simple dishes. I also enjoyed reading storybooks, which helped my imagination develop.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid repetition. Use a clear topic sentence in present perfect or present simple (I have enjoyed reading since childhood). Give 1–2 specific benefits of reading with coherent linking (e.g., “because” → reason). Remove repeated phrases and filler sounds.

Example: Yes, I have loved reading since childhood. Reading has improved my vocabulary and critical thinking, and it also helps me express myself more clearly.

Suggestion: This answer is mostly clear but contains fillers and a slight grammar error (subject–verb agreement). Start with a direct statement, then give a brief reason and one specific example of a different hobby in the family. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

Example: No, we don't share the same hobbies because everyone has different interests. For example, my sister loves painting while I prefer cooking and reading.

× Honestly, I have extremely uh, hobbies when I was a child, among them umm, wedding or uh, swimming or just uh cooking because I'm really into cooking, especially trying a new dishes around the world from time to time when I have enough.

✓ Honestly, I had many hobbies when I was a child; among them were swimming and cooking, because I'm really into cooking, especially trying new dishes from around the world from time to time when I have the time.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I have' with past time reference 'when I was a child', causing tense inconsistency (Present tense issue, ID 6). Use past tense 'had' for childhood. Also 'extremely hobbies' is ungrammatical; use 'many' (quantifier). 'Wedding' is unclear and likely incorrect; removed. 'Among them were' correctly introduces plural items (subject-verb agreement). 'A new dishes' is wrong article+plural; use 'new dishes'. Suggestion: keep past tense for past situations and match quantifiers and articles to noun number.

× Yeah, I have hobby which is still with me right now, uh, which is the love of reading books because I love reading books and umm, they improve my speaking, my thinking, they develop my thinking on my critical thinking.

✓ Yeah, I have a hobby that is still with me right now, which is a love of reading books, because I love reading and it improves my speaking and critical thinking.

'I have hobby' lacks the article 'a' (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'They improve' refers to 'reading books' as plural but the activity should be treated as singular concept 'reading', so use 'it improves' (subject-pronoun agreement). 'They develop my thinking on my critical thinking' is redundant and ungrammatical; simplify to 'improves my critical thinking'. Suggestion: use articles with singular nouns and ensure pronouns agree with the noun's number; avoid redundancy.

× Honestly, we do not have umm the same hobbies because each one of us have his own personality, has his own perspective.

✓ Honestly, we do not have the same hobbies because each one of us has his own personality and his own perspective.

'Each one of us have' is incorrect: 'each' is singular so it requires 'has' (Subject-verb agreement error, ID 27). Also coordinate verbs need 'and' rather than a comma before 'has' to join the two noun phrases. Suggestion: use singular verb with 'each' and connect parallel ideas with 'and'.

× Honestly, we do not have umm the same hobbies because each one of us have his own personality, has his own perspective. So we do not share the same hobbies actually.

✓ Honestly, we do not have the same hobbies because each of us has our own personality and perspective, so we do not share the same hobbies.

Using 'his' assumes gender and is awkward when referring to mixed group; use 'our' or 'their' for gender-neutral reference (Incorrect use of pronouns, ID 12). Also 'each one of us' can be shortened to 'each of us'. 'Actually' is unnecessary at end; place 'so' to combine sentences. Suggestion: use gender-neutral pronouns and smoother sentence flow.