Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and include one or two specific details using linking words (for example, why you enjoy the view and when you run). Watch for small errors (extra words, tense, articles).

Example: I enjoy several hobbies, but running is my favourite because it helps me relax and clear my mind. For example, I usually run along the park every morning, and the riverside views help me feel calm and focused afterward.

Suggestion: Good structure and specific detail. Improve fluency by removing fillers and correcting word choice (use ‘fantasy’ not ‘fantasies fantasy’). Use a linking phrase to connect habit and preference. Keep it to about two sentences.

Example: Yes. When I was a child I loved reading, so I would go to the library with my parents every morning for an hour. I especially enjoyed fantasy novels because they sparked my imagination and helped me escape school stress.

Suggestion: Good idea and clear reason. Improve naturalness by avoiding repetition and filler words, adjust tense consistently (present perfect/simple past) and use a linking word to connect reason and routine. Mention a specific game or time to add detail.

Example: Yes — I have been gaming since childhood. It helps me relax after studying, and I still play about an hour each evening with my brother, usually strategy or adventure games.

Suggestion: The answer is relevant but has several grammar and word-choice errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words (for example, ‘so’), correct collocations (go for a run, the sea view is amazing) and avoid garbled phrases. Add one specific detail about routine or how it makes you feel.

Example: Yes. My dad and I both enjoy sports, especially running, so on weekends we go for a run along the seaside. The sea views are beautiful, and running together helps us catch up and relax.

× Yes I have a lot of hobbies and running is one of them because I enjoy running while watching the views beside me and I think while running I it can help me to relax and also allow me to think on think about what what happened.

✓ Yes, I have a lot of hobbies, and running is one of them because I enjoy running while watching the views beside me. I think running can help me relax and also allows me to think about what happened.

Errors: unnecessary extra words and incorrect verb forms. 'while running I it can help me to relax' is ungrammatical; use 'I think running can help me relax'. Use parallel verb forms: 'help me relax' (bare infinitive after 'help') and 'allows me to think' (third-person singular 'allows'). Remove duplicate words 'think on think' and repeated 'what'. Add commas for clarity.

× Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed reading a lot so I used to follow my parents and go to the library to read every single morning for like a few hours.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed reading a lot, so I used to follow my parents and go to the library to read every morning for a few hours.

Minor tense/style: 'every single morning for like a few hours' is informal and wordy. 'Used to' correctly expresses habitual past. Change 'every single morning' to 'every morning' and 'for like a few hours' to 'for a few hours' for grammatical and natural phrasing.

× And the books I enjoy the most are fantasies fantasy type genres.

✓ The books I enjoy the most are fantasy novels or fantasy genres.

Repetition and incorrect noun/adjective form: 'fantasies fantasy type genres' is confused. Use 'fantasy' as an adjective ('fantasy novels') or 'fantasy genre' (singular/plural as appropriate). Keep phrasing concise.

× Uh, definitely gaming. I love gaming a lot because it allows me to relax myself and free myself from the stress of studying every single day.

✓ Definitely gaming. I love gaming because it allows me to relax and frees me from the stress of studying every day.

Redundant reflexive 'myself' is unnecessary. Use present simple 'allows' and 'frees' for habitual present. 'Every single day' can be shortened to 'every day' for natural speech.

× So I usually played video games with my brother every day for one hour.

✓ I usually play video games with my brother for one hour every day. (If referring to the past: I used to play video games with my brother for one hour every day.)

Tense mismatch: earlier sentence uses present 'I love gaming' so keep habitual present 'usually play'. If speaker meant past childhood habit, use 'used to play'. Place time expression 'for one hour every day' in natural order.

× Yes, my dad and I both love doing sports, especially running, so during the weekends we usually go to run together by the seaside and watching the scenery.

✓ Yes, my dad and I both love sports, especially running, so on the weekends we usually run together by the seaside and watch the scenery.

Preposition 'during the weekends' should be 'on the weekends'. 'Go to run' is incorrect; use 'run' or 'go for a run'. Use parallel verbs: 'run together' and 'watch the scenery' (not 'watching'). Also 'love doing sports' is acceptable but 'love sports' is more natural.

× The sea feels together is absolutely amazing and the few are breath.

✓ Being at the sea together is absolutely amazing, and the view is breathtaking.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and uses wrong words: 'feels together' and 'few are breath' make no sense. Use noun phrase 'Being at the sea together' and idiomatic adjective 'breathtaking' for the view. 'The view is breathtaking' conveys intended meaning.