Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời tự nhiên nhưng hơi dài và có vài lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ (ví dụ: 'they' không trùng với 'it'). Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, dùng 2–3 câu rõ ràng, tránh lặp ý và sửa lỗi đại từ. Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động để làm câu trả lời cụ thể hơn.

Example: I enjoy several hobbies that help me relax. For example, I practice the piano three times a week and go for a 5km run on weekends because these activities keep me fit and relieve stress.

Suggestion: Ý hay và cụ thể nhưng cấu trúc câu lộn xộn và thì không nhất quán; có lỗi ngữ pháp và trình bày (ví dụ: 'I have fun' nên ở quá khứ: 'I had fun'). Nên dùng 2 câu: câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp, câu hỗ trợ nêu ví dụ và cảm xúc, dùng linking word nếu cần.

Example: Yes, I had adventurous hobbies as a child. For example, I used to climb trees and chase dogs, which worried my parents, but I always had a lot of fun.

Suggestion: Trả lời rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt nhưng một vài chỗ lặp ý và dùng từ chưa tự nhiên ('it is joyful'). Nên kết hợp thành một câu chủ đề ngắn và một câu chi tiết với ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: mức độ luyện tập hoặc một kỷ niệm).

Example: Yes, I have. I have been dancing, singing and playing the piano since primary school. For instance, I practiced piano for an hour every day, which helped me enjoy performing in school concerts.

Suggestion: Nội dung rõ nhưng có lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp và diễn đạt lặp (lặp 'hobby'). Câu có thể ngắn gọn hơn: nêu rõ khác biệt và đưa ví dụ ngắn về từng người. Tránh những cụm từ cảm tính quá mạnh như 'doesn't suit me at all'—thay bằng 'is different from mine'.

Example: No, our hobbies are different. My father doesn't stick to one hobby, while my brother prefers computer games, which is quite different from my interests in music and sports.

× Not only they keep me fit but also it can help me relieve stress.

✓ Not only do they keep me fit, but they also help me relieve stress.

This sentence has incorrect verb forms and auxiliary placement. Use do-support for the negative inversion 'Not only' when the clause begins with it: 'Not only do they keep me fit'. Also maintain plural subject agreement: 'they help', not 'it can help'. Suggestion: use 'Not only do they keep me fit, but they also help me relieve stress.'

× Absolutely yes, but it was quite dangerous for me to have those hobbies such as climbing trees, running or even chasing dogs when I was young.

✓ Absolutely yes, but it was quite dangerous for me to have those hobbies, such as climbing trees, running, or even chasing dogs, when I was young.

Main issue is punctuation and parallel gerund forms rather than tense, but ensure past reference 'was' is correct. Use commas to set off the example list and add Oxford comma for clarity. Keep gerund forms parallel. Suggestion: add commas for clarity: '... those hobbies, such as climbing trees, running, or even chasing dogs, ...'.

× My parents were worried about me all the time, which was memorable, but I have fun.

✓ My parents were worried about me all the time, which was memorable, but I had fun.

Tense inconsistency: the speaker refers to childhood (past), so 'have fun' should be past 'had fun'. Maintain past tense across the sentence. Suggestion: use consistent past tense 'had fun.'

× I've been dancing, singing, and playing the piano since I was a kid, specifically when I was in primary school.

✓ I've been dancing, singing, and playing the piano since I was a kid, specifically since I was in primary school.

Preposition choice: use 'since' to indicate the start point of an action continuing to the present. 'When' is not correct after 'since'. Suggestion: replace 'when' with 'since' to match 'I've been ... since ...' structure.

× Actually I don't think we have the same hobbies because my dad he doesn't really have a specific hobby or a hobby that he sticks with in the long run.

✓ Actually I don't think we have the same hobbies because my dad doesn't really have a specific hobby that he sticks with in the long run.

Redundant pronoun 'he' after 'my dad' is incorrect and unnecessary in English. Remove the repeated subject. Suggestion: say 'my dad doesn't really have a specific hobby that he sticks with in the long run.'

× And for my brother he tends to like gaming on his computer which doesn't suit me at all.

✓ As for my brother, he tends to like gaming on his computer, which doesn't suit me at all.

Missing introductory phrase and punctuation: use 'As for' (or 'For my brother,') and add commas to set off the relative clause. Also maintain subject 'he' after the introductory phrase. Suggestion: 'As for my brother, he tends to like gaming on his computer, which doesn't suit me at all.'