Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more specific and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the hobby, briefly explain why you enjoy it with one or two specific details or example, and avoid vague phrases and repetition. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make the response coherent. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Example: I enjoy packaging products, especially Tresor packaging, because the process is creative and satisfying. For example, I helped with Nutriso packaging for family friends and received positive feedback, which motivated me to improve my design and speed.

Suggestion: Avoid fillers and unclear phrases. Give a direct topic sentence and one clear supporting detail or brief anecdote. Remove hesitations like 'you know' and unfinished thoughts. Use a linking word to connect idea (for example, when, because). Keep to 1–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoyed cooking as a child. For instance, I set up a pretend kitchen and practised making rotis and small dishes, which made me proud and curious about real cooking.

Suggestion: Be confident and concise: state the hobby clearly, give one or two specific supporting details (what you experiment with, with whom, or a result), and finish the sentence. Use linking words (for example, since, so) to show continuity. Avoid vague adjectives like 'pretty fascinating'—use precise descriptors.

Example: Yes, cooking has been my hobby since childhood. I often experimented with new recipes while helping my mother, so I learned to prepare dishes from different cuisines that my family enjoys.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid vague or awkward phrases. Start with a clear yes/no, then give one brief reason and a specific example (shared hobby). Remove unrelated comments about 'physical and personal identity' and unclear fragments like 'we compliment 21 in that.'

Example: No, most of my family members have different hobbies because everyone prefers different activities. However, I share cooking with my mother; we often cook together and exchange recipes.

× I like doing Tresor packaging.

✓ I like doing the Tresor packaging.

The noun 'Tresor packaging' refers to a specific activity or product and needs the definite article 'the' to indicate a particular type of packaging. Use 'the' when both speaker and listener know the specific thing being referred to. Suggestion: use 'the' before specific activities or items (e.g., 'the packaging work').

× For instance, I also had done Nutriso packaging from my family friends and they loved it.

✓ For instance, I also did Nutriso packaging for my family friends and they loved it.

The past perfect 'had done' is unnecessary because no earlier past action is being contrasted; simple past 'did' is correct to report a completed past action. Also 'from my family friends' is incorrect preposition use; use 'for' to indicate who benefited from the work. Suggestion: use simple past for isolated past events and 'for' when indicating recipients.

× I get a sense of fulfillment when I am doing this thing because it really uplifts my mood.

✓ I get a sense of fulfillment when I do this because it really uplifts my mood.

Using the continuous 'am doing' is not needed when speaking about a habitual or typical reaction; the simple present 'do' expresses habitual action. Also 'this thing' is wordy; 'this' suffices. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions: 'when I do this'.

× I'm deeply interested in what I'm doing and it motivates me to do much better in the coming times.

✓ I'm deeply interested in what I do and it motivates me to do much better in the future.

Mixing present continuous 'I'm doing' with a general statement is awkward; simple present 'I do' is better for habitual interests. 'In the coming times' is non-idiomatic; use 'in the future'. Suggestion: prefer simple present for general states and use common time expressions like 'in the future'.

× I also had done Nutriso packaging from my family friends and they loved it.

✓ I also did Nutriso packaging for my family friends and they loved it.

As above, 'had done' (past perfect) is incorrect without a reference point in the past; use simple past 'did'. Also 'from' should be 'for'. Suggestion: use simple past for standalone past events.

× I don't remember specifically, but when I was a child, I used to enjoy cooking.

✓ I don't remember specifically, but when I was a child I used to enjoy cooking.

Remove the unnecessary comma after 'child' because it interrupts a single clause and the sentence flows better without it. Suggestion: avoid extra commas that break simple time clauses.

× I had an artificial cooking test set up where I used to make, you know, rotis and small chicken pieces and, you know, take a pride in what I was doing.

✓ I had an artificial cooking test set up where I used to make rotis and small pieces of chicken and take pride in what I was doing.

Do not use commas and filler 'you know' in formal corrected sentence. 'Small chicken pieces' is better as 'small pieces of chicken'. 'Take a pride' is incorrect; use 'take pride' without article. Suggestion: remove filler phrases, use 'take pride' and prefer 'pieces of chicken'.

× It really made me realize that, uh.

✓ It really made me realize that I enjoyed cooking and wanted to learn more.

The original is an incomplete sentence (trailing 'that'). Provide a complete clause after 'that' to convey the idea. Suggestion: finish subordinate clauses with a clear statement.

× Well, you can say that cooking has been a hobby that I had since childhood.

✓ Well, you can say that cooking has been a hobby of mine since childhood.

Mixing present perfect 'has been' with 'that I had since childhood' creates tense redundancy. Use 'has been a hobby of mine since childhood' or simple past 'was a hobby'. Also 'that I had' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'has been a hobby of mine since childhood' for continuity to present.

× I tried to experiment new dishes and cook with my mom.

✓ I tried experimenting with new dishes and cooking with my mom.

When 'try' means 'attempt', it is followed by a gerund for experimenting: 'tried experimenting' or simply 'experimented with'. Also 'experiment new dishes' needs the preposition 'with'. Suggestion: use 'tried experimenting with' or 'experimented with' + 'cooking with my mom'.

× It really gives me a sense of joy and I think I'm able to explore and make different cuisines in a pretty fascinating way where my family members totally love what I make and.

✓ It really gives me a sense of joy and I think I'm able to explore and create different cuisines in a fascinating way, and my family members really love what I make.

The original sentence is long and ends abruptly. 'Make different cuisines' is odd; use 'create different cuisines' or 'make different dishes'. 'Pretty fascinating' is informal; 'fascinating' is preferred. 'Totally love' is informal; 'really love' is better. Finish the sentence properly. Suggestion: simplify and finish clauses, use appropriate verbs and adverbs.

× Well, no actually, because in our family all members are different.

✓ Well, no, actually, because in our family all the members are different.

The phrase benefits from the article 'the' before 'members' to indicate the specific group (our family). Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'all the members' or simply 'everyone in my family is different'.

× Everybody has their own preferences, each of them has their own different physical and personal identity.

✓ Everybody has their own preferences; each person has a different physical and personal identity.

Using 'their' with 'everybody' is acceptable in modern usage, but the sentence is repetitive and 'each of them' with 'their own different' is redundant. Replace with 'each person' and 'a different' for clarity and grammatical parallelism. Suggestion: avoid repetition and ensure singular/plural consistency.

× So the hobbies differ from person to person.

✓ So, hobbies differ from person to person.

Minor style: remove 'the' before 'hobbies' for natural general statement. Suggestion: use general noun without 'the' when speaking about hobbies in general.

× But yes, I can say that cooking is something which I got it from my mother and we compliment 21 in that.

✓ But yes, I can say that cooking is something I got from my mother and we complement each other in that.

The original contains an unnecessary pronoun 'it' after 'got' ('which I got it' is ungrammatical). 'Compliment 21' appears to be an error—likely intended 'complement each other' meaning they suit each other or support each other. Use 'complement each other' to express mutual reinforcement. Suggestion: remove redundant pronouns and use correct collocation 'complement each other'.