Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your response more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (use 'in 2019', avoid repeating 'love').

Example: I enjoy sketching. I started learning from YouTube tutorials in 2019, and since then I often draw natural landscapes because I like capturing light and texture.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and tidy the timeline and reason for stopping. Avoid fillers ('umm', 'like') and correct grammar (one of my cousins, due to an injury I had to stop). Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I used to love skating when I was a child. One of my cousins gave me a skateboard, so I practiced every day for almost two years, but I had to stop because I injured my ankle.

Suggestion: Give a single clear statement and concise supporting details. Avoid sentence fragments and repetition. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct tense usage (I still do it).

Example: Yes, I've enjoyed listening to creepy stories since I was a child. I often search for them on YouTube and used to tell these stories to my classmates, and I still enjoy doing that today.

Suggestion: Answer directly and politely, avoid exaggeration and repetition. Fix grammar and unclear phrases ('A500 page', 'first phase'). Give one brief reason and a contrast using linking words.

Example: No, my family members are big readers, while I prefer creative hobbies. For example, my sister reads very quickly, but I find it hard to concentrate on long books, so I choose sketching instead.

× In year 2019 I started watching YouTube tutorials which made me fond of sketching and I love to sketch the nature landscapes a lot.

✓ In 2019 I started watching YouTube tutorials, which made me fond of sketching, and I love sketching natural landscapes a lot.

Use 'In 2019' (add article 'In') and improve noun phrase order: 'natural landscapes' is correct adjective + noun order. Use 'love sketching' (verb + -ing) to match common collocation and avoid repetitive 'to sketch'. Add commas for clarity.

× When I was a child I used to love skating umm one of my cousin gifted me a skateboard and because of that I used to skate every day.

✓ When I was a child I used to love skating. One of my cousins gifted me a skateboard, and because of that I used to skate every day.

Use plural 'cousins' when speaking of one among several; 'one of my cousin' is incorrect. Also split into two sentences and add comma before 'and' for clarity.

× For almost 2 years I practiced skating and after due to a like injury I had to stop scared.

✓ For almost two years I practiced skating, but later I had to stop because of an injury and I was scared.

'After due to a like injury' is ungrammatical. Use 'but later' or 'however' and 'because of an injury' to show reason. Spell out numbers in text (two). Add 'was' for 'I was scared' to form correct past simple.

× Yes, I like to listen to creepy stories. Even when I'm 80 years old.

✓ Yes, I like listening to creepy stories, even when I'm 80 years old.

Combine fragments: 'Even when I'm 80 years old' alone is a sentence fragment. Use 'listening' for natural collocation 'like listening to' and attach the time clause to the main sentence.

× I used to open YouTube and search for all the creepy stories and I used to narrate all the stories to my classmates.

✓ I used to open YouTube and search for creepy stories, and I used to narrate them to my classmates.

Reduce repetition: 'all the' is unnecessary and awkward. 'Them' replaces repeated noun. Tense 'used to' is correct for past habitual actions.

× And that's, that's a weird hobby, but I do it even now.

✓ That's a weird hobby, but I still do it now.

Avoid stuttering 'that's, that's'; use 'still' or 'even now' placed naturally: 'I still do it now.' This is clearer and grammatically correct.

× No, all of my family members are bookworms and I hate reading books.

✓ No. All of my family members are bookworms, but I hate reading books.

Use 'but' to contrast ideas rather than 'and'. Also split into sentences or use comma before conjunction.

× My my sister completes A500 page books within an hour and I cannot even concentrate on first phase of the book.

✓ My sister finishes 500-page books within an hour, and I cannot even concentrate on the first part of a book.

Remove duplicated 'My'. Use '500-page' (hyphenated compound adjective) and 'finishes' or 'completes' is okay; 'A500' is wrong formatting. Use 'the first part' instead of 'first phase' which is unnatural here. Add article 'a' before 'book' or 'the' depending on context.

× I do not have any similar hobbies to my family with my family.

✓ I do not have any hobbies similar to those of my family.

Redundant phrase 'with my family' removed. Use 'similar to those of my family' for correct comparison and preposition use.