Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clear and coherent: give a concise topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid contradictions (e.g., "staying inactive" vs running), and limit to 3–4 short sentences. Use linking words to add reasons and keep vocabulary accurate and relevant.

Example: I enjoy several hobbies, especially running and playing badminton. Running keeps me fit and is a great way to relax, while badminton is fun and social. I also sometimes play football and computer games in my free time.

Suggestion: Answer directly with past tense and a clear structure: topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., "cartoons" not "cartoon").

Example: When I was a child I didn’t have many hobbies because I spent most of my time studying. However, I often watched cartoons and children’s films on TV in the evenings, which helped me relax.

Suggestion: Be specific and use correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples and reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like "I help it help me."

Example: I didn’t have a single long-term hobby as a child, but I regularly watched movies and cartoons. I also often played football with my friends after school because it helped me relax and made it easier to make friends.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence then support with specific details and linking words. Correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and concise phrasing will improve coherence. Mention briefly what hobbies they prefer to contrast.

Example: My hobbies are different from most of my family’s. I enjoy running and playing badminton, but my family members usually work from 8:00 AM to 5:00 PM, so they prefer low-effort activities at home like watching TV or reading.

× I like staying inactive because running keep me fit and better is a great way to relax and miss fame.

✓ I like staying active because running keeps me fit and is a great way to relax and relieve stress.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'staying inactive' contradicts intended meaning; 'keep' should agree with singular subject 'running' (third person singular -> keeps) which is a subject-verb agreement/third person error; 'better is a great way to relax and miss fame' is ungrammatical and likely intended as 'is a great way to relax and relieve stress'. Suggest using 'staying active' and 'running keeps' and replace unclear phrase with 'relieve stress'.

× When I was shy, I didn't really have any hobbies because I spent most of my time studying and going to school.

✓ When I was younger, I didn't really have any hobbies because I spent most of my time studying and going to school.

The phrase 'When I was shy' is odd for indicating childhood time; 'younger' or 'a child' is appropriate. The verb tenses are otherwise correct (past simple). Suggest using 'younger' to match the time reference clearly.

× Mostly I watch cartoon and student film on TV in the evening, which was my main way to relax.

✓ Mostly I watched cartoons and children's films on TV in the evening, which was my main way to relax.

The sentence mixes present tense 'watch' with past reference 'was'. For past habitual actions, use past simple 'watched'. Also pluralize 'cartoon' to 'cartoons' and change 'student film' (unclear) to 'children's films' or 'animated films' to be natural. Keep tense consistent.

× I didn't really have a long term hobby when I was a child. I mainly watch movies and cartoon and I often play football with my friend after school which I enjoy because I help it help me relax and make friends.

✓ I didn't really have a long-term hobby when I was a child. I mainly watched movies and cartoons and I often played football with my friends after school, which I enjoyed because it helped me relax and make friends.

This sentence mixes past and present. Since describing childhood, use past simple: 'watched', 'played', 'enjoyed', 'helped'. 'Cartoon' should be plural 'cartoons'; 'friends' plural is more natural; 'I help it help me' is ungrammatical—replace with 'it helped me'. Also add hyphen in 'long-term'. Tense consistency is required.

× One of my favorite hobbies is different from my families.

✓ One of my favorite hobbies is different from my family's.

'Families' is incorrect because the comparison is with the member group; use the possessive singular 'family's' to mean 'my family's hobbies'. Also 'One of my favorite hobbies is different from my family's hobbies' is acceptable if expanded.

× I love running and playing badminton, but my family work long hours from 8:00 AM to 5:00 PM, so they don't have much free time to take part in those activities.

✓ I love running and playing badminton, but my family work works long hours from 8:00 AM to 5:00 PM, so they don't have much free time to take part in those activities.

Subject-verb agreement: 'family' as a collective noun can be treated as singular, so use 'works' for present simple third person singular, or rephrase 'my family members work' to keep plural verb. Suggest using 'my family members work long hours' if you want plural agreement.