Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 응답은 명확하지만 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 더 자연스럽게 만들려면 시제 일치(used to → use/used differently), 전치사·부정확한 동사 형태(going → go) 수정, 그리고 상세한 이유나 빈도(얼마나 자주, 누구와)는 추가하세요. 또한 응답 길이는 2~3문장으로 유지하고 연결어(for example, so, because)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어지게 하세요.

Example: I enjoy riding my bike. I often cycle to the park and also use my bike for short trips around my neighborhood because it's convenient and good exercise.

Suggestion: 시제 사용이 혼란스럽고 문장이 길며 불명확한 표현이 있습니다(‘there was some mobile game I love to do’). 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고 게임의 특징을 더 간결하고 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어(and, which, so)를 써서 문장을 매끄럽게 이어주세요.

Example: Yes. When I was a child I liked playing mobile games, especially one called Kukiran. It was a game where you baked cookies and ran through levels, which I found really fun and addictive.

Suggestion: 문법(동사 시제, 소유격, 복수형)과 어순이 어색합니다(‘same hobbies with her’). 주제문을 제시한 뒤 이유와 지속성을 구체적으로 밝히세요. 예를 들어 언제부터 얼마나 자주 걷는지, 누구와 걷는지 등을 추가하고 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 사용하세요.

Example: Yes, I have enjoyed walking since childhood. My friends and I used to go for walks after school, so I developed the habit and I still go walking regularly now for relaxation and exercise.

Suggestion: 문법(관계사, 어순) 오류와 문장 미완성이 문제입니다('It's really nice and.'). 가족과 취미를 공유하게 된 배경을 더 구체적으로 말하고, 결과나 감정도 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 연결어(because, so, therefore)를 사용하고 문장을 완결형으로 만드세요.

Example: Yes, I share a love of cooking with my mother. She enjoys baking cookies and cakes, and by watching her I learned many techniques, so now I often bake with her and find it very satisfying.

× Yes, I love riding a bike.

✓ Yes, I love riding my bike.

The original is acceptable but adding 'my' clarifies possession; no major grammar error. Use 'riding my bike' for natural English.

× I used to ride a bike when I go to the park or I also ride a bike to going short distance.

✓ I used to ride my bike when I went to the park, and I also ride my bike for short distances.

Mixed tense and incorrect verb form. 'Used to' requires past tense 'went' for consistency. 'To going' is incorrect; use 'for short distances' or 'for short trips'. Also add 'my' for natural possession.

× Yes I do. I love to play a game.

✓ Yes, I did. I loved playing games.

The examiner asked about childhood hobbies, so past tense should be used. 'Yes I do' and 'I love' are present-tense; change to 'did' and 'loved'. Use 'playing games' for general activities.

× When I was a child there was some mobile game I love to do, which is called Kukiran, that you can make a cookie, keep running.

✓ When I was a child there was a mobile game I loved to play called Kukiran, where you could make cookies and keep running.

Use 'a' not 'some' for countable singular 'mobile game'. Change present 'love to do' to past 'loved to play'. Use 'where you could' to describe game features in past. Use plural 'cookies'.

× I think it's a really fun experience.

✓ I thought it was a really fun experience.

Referring to a childhood experience requires past tense: 'thought' and 'was' instead of present 'think' and 'is'.

× Yes I do, I love to take a walk.

✓ Yes, I do. I love taking walks.

For a current habit, present tense is fine, but 'love to take a walk' is less natural than 'love taking walks' or 'love to go for a walk'. Use plural 'walks' for a habitual activity.

× When I was young my friends loved to take a walk so I started to have same hobbies with her.

✓ When I was young my friend loved taking walks, so I started to have the same hobby as her.

Pronoun and agreement errors: 'friends' (plural) conflicts with 'her' (singular); choose 'friend' and 'her' or 'friends' and 'them'. Use 'the same hobby as her' for natural phrasing.

× So from now I keep love taking a walk.

✓ So from now on I will continue to enjoy taking walks.

Awkward structure: 'keep love' is incorrect. Use 'continue to enjoy' or 'still love' for ongoing habit. Add 'on' after 'from now'. Use plural 'walks'.

× Yes, I love cooking which is same hobby with my mom.

✓ Yes, I love cooking, which is the same hobby as my mom's.

Missing article 'the' before 'same hobby' and wrong preposition 'with'. Use possessive 'my mom's' or 'as my mom' for comparison.

× She especially loves baking for cookies and cakes.

✓ She especially loves baking cookies and cakes.

Do not use 'for' after 'baking' when listing what is baked. 'Baking cookies and cakes' is the correct phrasing.

× So by watching her doing things I start to have same hobbies.

✓ So by watching her do things, I started to develop the same hobby.

Use 'watch someone do' not 'watching her doing'. Match tense: watching in past led to starting in past. Use singular 'hobby' if matching mother; add 'the' before 'same'.

× It's really nice and.

✓ It's really nice.

Sentence fragment with trailing 'and' should be removed. Complete the thought by ending the sentence at 'nice' or add a second clause to finish the 'and'.