Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and grammar mistakes, and add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Also correct tense and article use (e.g., “since I was a child”).

Example: Yes, I enjoy cooking. I have loved it since I was a child, and I especially like baking simple desserts because it relaxes me and lets me be creative.

Suggestion: Answer directly using past tense, avoid unnecessary hesitations and confusing names, and give a clear specific example with linking words. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “sweets that didn’t need cooking”).

Example: Yes, I did. I started cooking when I was about ten years old. For example, I often made no-bake sweets such as chocolate truffles because they were easy and fun to prepare.

Suggestion: Avoid repeating the same information; give a polished, concise answer using correct tense and smoother linking words (e.g., “as I mentioned earlier” or “in fact”). Specify the activity and one detail about it to enrich the reply.

Example: Yes, as I mentioned, cooking has been my hobby since childhood. In fact, when I was ten I used to make no-bake desserts by mixing ingredients like condensed milk and cocoa, which helped me learn basic techniques.

Suggestion: Be clear and grammatical: state whether you share the hobby, then give a specific supporting detail using linking words. Fix word choice errors (e.g., “talent for cooking,” “we all enjoy cooking”).

Example: Yes, we do. My whole family enjoys cooking, and we often cook together at weekends, which has helped me improve my skills and created happy memories.

× I have a hobby which I most mostly like which is cooking and this hobby is it was since I was child.

✓ I have a hobby that I mostly like, which is cooking, and I have had this hobby since I was a child.

Errors: redundant words ('most mostly'), incorrect relative clause order, incorrect tense and missing articles. Suggestion: Use 'mostly' once, place relative clauses clearly, use present perfect 'have had' to indicate a hobby continuing from the past to present, and include the article 'a' before 'child'.

× I have the same hobby when I was a child which is cooking.

✓ I had the same hobby when I was a child: cooking.

Errors: incorrect tense mix ('have' + 'when I was a child'). Suggestion: Use past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child' and simplify the clause with a colon or '—' to introduce 'cooking'.

× I just remember when I was maybe maybe Stephanie, not Stephanie older than Stephan, maybe we can say 10 years old.

✓ I just remember when I was maybe ten years old.

Errors: confusing and irrelevant words ('Stephanie... Stephan'), repetition ('maybe maybe') and unclear structure. Suggestion: Remove unrelated names and repetitions, use 'ten years old' for clarity and write a single concise clause.

× I remember I start to make sweet which not need fire just.

✓ I remember I started to make sweets that did not need heat.

Errors: incorrect verb tense ('start' should be past 'started'), missing plural or article for 'sweet' ('sweets' or 'a sweet'), awkward phrasing 'not need fire'. Suggestion: Use past simple 'started', plural 'sweets' if general, and 'did not need heat' or 'without using heat/fire'.

× Yes, similar to the what I say previously, uh, cooking is my hobby, uh, whenever I was child and I just remember when I was maybe 10 years old, uh, I, I make a sweet without using fire just by mixing integrant together and.

✓ Yes, as I said previously, cooking is my hobby; when I was a child, I remember that when I was about ten years old I made sweets without using heat, just by mixing the ingredients together.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('I make' should be past 'I made'), missing articles ('a child' and 'the ingredients'), word choice ('integrant' incorrect), and clumsy structure. Suggestion: Use past tense for childhood actions, include necessary articles, use 'ingredients', and rephrase for fluency.

× Yes, we are a family who have a test on cooking and our cook is delicious.

✓ Yes, we are a family who enjoy cooking and our food is delicious.

Errors: incorrect noun usage ('test on cooking' and 'our cook is delicious' are incorrect collocations), pronoun/word choice issues. Suggestion: Use 'enjoy cooking' to express shared interest and 'our food is delicious' to describe cooked dishes.

× We are knowing of this hobby.

✓ We are familiar with this hobby.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'knowing' used in a stative sense and wrong preposition 'of'. Suggestion: Use 'be familiar with' to express awareness or experience with a hobby.