Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid hesitations and repetitions. Use linking words if you add reasons.

Example: Yes. My main hobby is playing video games with my friends. I usually play multiplayer strategy games online because they help me relax and improve teamwork. For example, I play with the same group every weekend.

Suggestion: Give a clear, grammatically correct statement and include one specific detail or example. Reduce repetition and filler words. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood.

Example: Yes, I did. My family ran a small game center, so I had access to arcade machines from a young age. As a result, playing video games was one of my main hobbies when I was a child.

Suggestion: Answer directly and smoothly: state that you still have the hobby, give a reason and a specific routine. Avoid awkward phrases and filler. Use linking words like "so" or "because" to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I still play video games. After a long day at university or work, I usually play online with friends to relax because it helps me unwind. Typically we play for about an hour each evening.

Suggestion: Make a clear comparison using linking words (for example, "however" or "but"). Correct pronoun and tense errors and give a concise contrast in one or two sentences.

Example: Yes, my younger brother also enjoys gaming, but we prefer different platforms. I prefer PC games because of better controls and graphics, whereas he mostly plays mobile games for convenience.

× I have, I love to do things in my free time in the, in the most things that I I like to do is like playing video games with my friends because, uh.

✓ I love to do many things in my free time. The main thing I like to do is play video games with my friends.

The original sentence is run-on, repetitive and ungrammatical (Grammar Problem Type 26). Combine ideas into clear sentences and use the base form of verbs after 'like' ('play' not 'playing' here for the phrase 'like to do is play'). Remove filler words and pauses to make the response coherent. Suggested improvement: mentally outline the main point, then express it in one or two simple sentences using correct verb forms.

× When I was a child, my, my families were, was like established, uh, a game center.

✓ When I was a child, my family established a game center.

The student used 'families' (plural) and mixed verb forms 'were, was'. The correct subject is 'family' (singular) and the past tense 'established' fits the narrative (Grammar Problem Type 27). Use a single clear subject and the past tense verb. Suggested improvement: choose correct singular/plural noun and match the past tense verb accordingly.

× So I have the opportunity to, uh, play a game where very early when I was young.

✓ So I had the opportunity to play games there from a very early age.

This sentence is awkward and ungrammatical (Grammar Problem Type 26). Use past tense 'had' to match 'when I was young' and a clear phrase 'from a very early age' to express timing. Replace 'where' with 'there' and correct noun number 'games'. Suggested improvement: ensure tense consistency and use standard time expressions like 'from a very early age'.

× Uh, so playing videos game is also my hobbies when I was a child.

✓ So playing video games was also my hobby when I was a child.

The sentence mixes singular/plural forms: 'videos game' is incorrect and 'hobbies' conflicts with singular 'playing' (Grammar Problem Type 1). Use 'video games' (plural) and 'hobby' (singular) with past tense 'was' to match 'when I was a child'. Suggested improvement: ensure noun forms agree and match verb number.

× This on Internet currently I still play video games but umm, with my friend every day after a long day that I am suffering, uh, doing my work at university and the workplace.

✓ Currently I still play video games online with my friends every day after a long day of studying at university or working.

Multiple tense and word choice issues: 'This on Internet' is awkward; 'I am suffering, uh, doing my work' is ungrammatical. Use present simple 'I still play' for habitual action and a concise phrase 'after a long day of studying at university or working' (Grammar Problem Type 6). Also pluralize 'friends' if more than one. Suggested improvement: use concise habitual-expression structures (present simple) and standard collocations like 'play online' and 'a long day of work/study'.

× So uh, I need to play like video games to make my mind more, uh, relaxed.

✓ So I need to play video games to relax my mind.

The phrase 'to make my mind more relaxed' is wordy and 'play like video games' is informal and unnecessary 'like' (Grammar Problem Type 8). Use the infinitive 'to relax' for purpose and concise phrasing. Suggested improvement: use simple purpose clauses with 'to' + verb, and avoid filler 'like'.

× Yeah, umm, my younger brother, his Tina, I'm very good, very on video games too, but umm there's a difference.

✓ Yes. My younger brother is also very good at video games, but there is a difference.

The original has incorrect pronoun use and fragmented structure ('his Tina, I'm very good') (Grammar Problem Type 12). Use a clear subject-verb structure 'My younger brother is also very good at video games' and 'there is a difference' to introduce contrast. Suggested improvement: avoid inserting unnecessary pronouns and keep subject and verb together.

× Umm I keen on playing like video games on the PCs.

✓ I am keen on playing video games on the PC.

Missing auxiliary 'am' and incorrect preposition/article usage: 'on the PCs' is awkward when referring to PC gaming generally; use 'on the PC' or 'on PCs' (Grammar Problem Type 11). Also remove 'like'. Suggested improvement: include the correct auxiliary for 'keen' ('am keen on') and choose the proper article and preposition: 'on the PC' or 'on PCs'.

× Umm but uh, my, my brother that he's like to play games on the the mobile phone.

✓ But my brother likes to play games on his mobile phone.

The original uses awkward relative clause and incorrect verb form 'he's like to' instead of 'likes to' and repeats 'the the' (Grammar Problem Type 12). Use simple subject-verb-object order: 'my brother likes to play games on his mobile phone.' Ensure possessive pronoun 'his' for the phone. Suggested improvement: use 'likes to' for third-person singular and 'his' for possession; avoid redundant words.