Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류와 중복 표현이 많습니다. 먼저 간단한 주제 문장으로 직접 답하고(예: "I don't have any hobbies at the moment"), 그 이유를 명확하고 간결하게 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 중복(예: "at the moment"와 "right now" 동시에 사용)과 어색한 표현("what I'm don't know", "bored time")을 피하고, 연결어(for example, because, so 등)를 사용해 이유를 논리적으로 제시하세요. 문장은 2~3개로 제한하고 핵심을 전달하도록 연습하세요.

Example: I don't have any hobbies at the moment because I'm focusing on my studies. For example, I spend most of my free time preparing for exams, so I haven't had time to develop new interests.

Suggestion: 답변은 핵심을 포함하고 있으나 표현이 불명확하고 어휘 사용이 부정확합니다("assess to assess my gravities","I still enjoying the drinks"). 주제 문장으로 시작한 뒤, 이유와 구체적 예시를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 정확한 단어 선택(relax, express feelings, enjoy creating art 등)과 올바른 시제 사용을 확인하세요. 연결어(because, so, and)를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어주세요.

Example: Yes. When I was a child I liked drawing and painting because it helped me relax and express my feelings. For example, I often painted pictures of my family and pets, which made me feel calm.

Suggestion: 답변이 긍정적이지만 말의 흐름이 어색하고 불필요한 말더미('uh', 반복)와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 먼저 명확한 주제문으로 시작하고, 연결어로 이유와 구체적 예(예: 친구들에게 선물한 경험)를 한두 문장으로 제시하세요. 동사의 형태와 전치사 사용을 점검하고, 말할 때 불필요한 중간 멈춤을 줄이도록 연습하세요.

Example: Yes, I've enjoyed drawing and painting since I was a child. It helps me relax and I often give my artwork as gifts to friends, which they really appreciate.

Suggestion: 의사 전달이 불명확하고 문장 구조와 어휘 선택에 많은 문제가 있습니다. 간단히 'No'로 시작한 뒤 가족과의 차이점을 한두 문장으로 분명히 설명하세요(예: My parents prefer quiet activities, while I like outdoor adventures). 이유와 한 가지 예시를 덧붙이면 좋습니다. 불필요한 중복과 어색한 표현을 제거하고 문장을 간결하게 유지하세요.

Example: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. My parents prefer quiet activities like reading, while I enjoy outdoor adventures such as hiking and camping.

× At the moment I don't have any hobbies right now because I'm too busy with my studies and what I'm don't know.

✓ At the moment I don't have any hobbies because I'm too busy with my studies and I don't know what else to do.

The sentence contains redundant time expressions ('at the moment' and 'right now') and an incorrect clause ('what I'm don't know'). Combine or remove redundancy and reorder the clause to 'I don't know what else to do' to form a grammatically correct object clause. Also ensure consistent subject-verb order: 'I don't know' not 'I'm don't know'.

× I wish I had a bored time to improve my hobbies in the past.

✓ I wish I had had more free time in the past to improve my hobbies.

The phrase 'bored time' is incorrect; use 'free time' or 'spare time'. Expressing a past wish about a past situation requires past perfect ('had had'). Place 'in the past' appropriately and add 'more' to indicate quantity of free time.

× But.

✓ (Remove fragment)

Single-word fragment 'But.' is an incomplete sentence lacking a subject and verb. Remove it or complete the thought (for example, 'But I didn't have time.').

× Yes, I had a hobby so when I was a child I liked drawing and painting because it helped me relax and assess to assess my gravities and I still enjoying the drinks.

✓ When I was a child I liked drawing and painting because they helped me relax and helped me express my feelings, and I still enjoy drawing.

'something like 'I had a hobby so' is redundant and unclear. 'Drawing and painting' are plural activities, so use 'they helped'. 'Assess to assess my gravities' is meaningless; likely intended 'express my feelings'. 'I still enjoying the drinks' mixes forms ('enjoying' should be 'enjoy') and 'drinks' is irrelevant; replace with 'drawing' to match context.

× Yes, I have uh, hobbies. When? Since I've enjoyed childhood.

✓ Yes, I have hobbies that I have enjoyed since childhood.

The original has broken phrasing and incorrect tense/order. Use 'have enjoyed since childhood' or 'have had since childhood' to show a continuous hobby from childhood to present.

× And I like it, the drawing and painting it helps me relax and access to my access my feeling and and I even give my artwork as gift for to my friends.

✓ I like drawing and painting; they help me relax and express my feelings, and I even give my artwork as gifts to my friends.

Avoid unnecessary pronoun 'it' before 'the drawing'; use plural pronoun 'they' for 'drawing and painting'. Remove extra words 'access to my access'. Use 'express my feelings'. 'Give my artwork as gift for to my friends' has preposition and article errors: use 'as gifts to my friends'.

× No, Hmm. My, I'm not having the same hobbies as my family members, my PA, my parents, uh, prepared quiet activities.

✓ No. I don't have the same hobbies as my family members; my parents prefer quiet activities.

Don't use continuous form 'I'm not having' for stative possession—use 'I don't have'. 'My PA' is unclear; likely 'my parents'. Use 'prefer' rather than 'prepared'. 'Quiet' not 'quiet' spelling is fine; ensure sentence clarity and punctuation.

× Why I enjoy outdoor adventure.

✓ I enjoy outdoor adventures.

'Why I enjoy' is ungrammatical here; simply state 'I enjoy outdoor adventures.' Use plural 'adventures' or singular 'adventure' with article: 'an outdoor adventure'.

× But although ever don't it is really fine the difficult to be or enjoy.

✓ But even though it can be difficult, I still enjoy it.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Use a concessive clause 'even though it can be difficult' followed by main clause 'I still enjoy it' to express contrast. Keep pronouns consistent and use appropriate verb forms.