Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your main hobbies, then give one brief supporting detail for each. Avoid hesitations and irrelevant remarks (e.g. 'I wouldn't mention them because...'). Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: I enjoy drawing and dancing in my free time. For example, I often sketch people and landscapes to relax, and I take contemporary dance classes twice a week to improve my technique.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear statement, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (past tense, subject-verb agreement) and avoid repetition. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

Example: Yes, I had the same hobbies as a child: drawing and dancing. Drawing helped me turn my ideas into pictures, so I spent hours sketching stories. Also, my mother was a dancer and taught me many moves, which made dancing fun and natural for me.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and organize your answer chronologically with linking words (e.g. 'when I was young', 'now'). Reduce fillers and correct tense usage. Provide one concrete detail to illustrate progress from childhood to now.

Example: Yes, dancing is a hobby I have had since childhood. When I was young I used to move around randomly for fun, but my mother taught me formal steps. Now I dance professionally and practice choreography several times a week.

Suggestion: Be clearer and more coherent. Start with a direct answer, then explain similarities or differences with specific examples. Avoid vague phrases and unclear references. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast.

Example: Yes, my family shares some hobbies. My mother used to dance and taught both my sister and me, so we all enjoyed dancing when we were young. However, my elder sister now prefers walking and practical hobbies, while I still focus on dancing.

× Yes, I would love, I would like to draw and dance in my free time.

✓ Yes, I would love to draw and dance in my free time.

After verbs like 'would love' or 'would like' the infinitive form 'to draw' should be used, not the base verb without 'to'. Use 'would love to + verb' to express preference. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 8.

× That will be my hobbies.

✓ Those would be my hobbies.

The demonstrative 'that' is singular while 'hobbies' is plural; use 'those'. Also 'would' or 'would be' fits better than 'will' when speaking hypothetically or politely about preferences. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 1.

× Uh, actually there are a lot of little hobbies that I have other than those two, but I wouldn't mention them because they are really, really a lot.

✓ Actually, I have many other small hobbies besides those two, but I won't list them because there are so many.

Awkward phrasing and incorrect modal 'wouldn't mention' for a simple statement; 'a lot of little hobbies' is better as 'many other small hobbies', and 'because they are really, really a lot' is ungrammatical—use 'because there are so many'. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 26.

× Yes, I had the same hobbies when I was young I drawing and dancing.

✓ Yes, I had the same hobbies when I was young: drawing and dancing.

Missing punctuation and incorrect verb form 'I drawing'. After a colon or list use nouns 'drawing and dancing' rather than 'I drawing'. Keep past tense 'had' is correct. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 5.

× Drawing it helped me create my thoughts into a picture.

✓ Drawing helped me turn my thoughts into a picture.

'Drawing it' is unnecessary; use the gerund 'Drawing' as subject. 'Turn my thoughts into a picture' is idiomatic. No extra pronoun 'it' is needed. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 8.

× So I enjoying that a lot.

✓ So I enjoyed that a lot.

The sentence refers to past enjoyment; use past tense 'enjoyed'. Also need auxiliary 'am' if using present continuous: 'I am enjoying that a lot.' Choose tense consistent with context. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 6.

× my mother used to be a dancer, so she taught she she taught me a lot of dance moves.

✓ My mother used to be a dancer, so she taught me a lot of dance moves.

Duplicate words 'she she taught' and unnecessary pronoun 'she' before 'taught me'. Remove repetition and keep 'taught me' for correct pronoun use. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 12.

× So I started enjoying dancing and I was.

✓ So I started enjoying dancing.

The clause 'and I was' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Remove the fragment to make a complete sentence. If intended continuation, complete the idea (e.g., 'and I was happy'). Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 26.

× I used to dance a lot when I was young and I stayed dance.

✓ I used to dance a lot when I was young and I continued dancing.

'Stayed dance' is incorrect. Use 'continued dancing' or 'kept dancing' to express ongoing past action. Maintain past tense 'used to' context. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 5.

× Uh, when I was young I dance nonsense like making random movements.

✓ When I was young I danced nonsense, making random movements.

Verb tense must be past 'danced'. 'Dance nonsense' is awkward; better to link with participial phrase 'making random movements'. Use past tense for consistency. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 20.

× But now I dance professionally.

✓ But now I dance professionally.

This sentence is correct; present simple 'I dance professionally' appropriately describes current habitual action. No change needed. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 5.

× I have become a dancer and when I was young my mother taught me how to dance.

✓ I became a dancer, and when I was young my mother taught me how to dance.

'I have become' can be used, but 'I became a dancer' fits better with the past narrative; keep past tense for sequence of events. Maintain comma before conjunction. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 5.

× So since then I like dancing.

✓ So since then I have liked dancing.

With 'since then' use present perfect 'have liked' to show continuous state from past to present. 'I like' is simple present and doesn't convey continuity from a past point. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 12.

× Yes I have an elder sister and similarly because of my mom she had the same hobby as me dancing but I she like dancing when she was young but right now she is more into other adaptive realistic things as she say like and in a lot of money or walking as I see.

✓ Yes, I have an elder sister. Similarly, because of my mom, she had the same hobby as me: dancing. She liked dancing when she was young, but now she is more into other activities, like walking and making money, as far as I can tell.

The original contains many problems: run-on sentence, tense inconsistencies, incorrect pronouns, and awkward phrases. Break into sentences, correct past tense 'liked', use 'activities' instead of 'adaptive realistic things', and clarify 'as far as I can tell'. Ensure plural/singular agreement and logical structure. Note: This item corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 1.