Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid odd phrases (“make friend dear”), use correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms), and add one brief specific detail using a linking word. Keep to maximum 3–4 short sentences.

Example: Yes, I do. I go to the fitness centre twice a week to keep fit. For example, I usually do weight training and cardio for an hour each session, which helps me stay healthy and meet new people.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and avoid filler words. Begin with a direct topic sentence in past tense, then give a specific detail and use a linking word to explain why you enjoyed it. Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

Example: Yes, I did. I used to play basketball with my friends after school, and we practised for about an hour every day. Because it was energetic and social, it helped me relax and stay fit.

Suggestion: Remove unnecessary expressions (‘to be honest’, ‘I sincerely remember’), use past/present perfect correctly, and be specific about frequency and what you read. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I have. Since childhood I have often visited the library, about twice a week, to borrow books. I enjoyed reading stories and nature books because they helped me learn new words and relax.

Suggestion: Make your answer clearer and grammatically correct. Start with a direct statement about whether your hobbies are shared, then give a specific example and use linking words for coherence. Avoid repeated words and fillers.

Example: Partly. My family and I share an interest in sports, especially during the summer. For example, I often play basketball with my father in the nearby park, which is a regular activity for us during holidays.

× Yes, of course, I always go to the fitness center twice a week to build my body and make friend dear.

✓ Yes, of course, I always go to the fitness center twice a week to build my body and make friends, dear.

The phrase 'make friend dear' is ungrammatical. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' because 'make friends' is the correct collocation meaning to form friendships. The word 'dear' as a term of address should be set off with a comma. Suggestion: use 'make friends' and write '...make friends, dear.' or omit 'dear' if not appropriate in this context.

× Yes, of course, when I was a child, I always play basketball with my friends after school, which can make me feel relaxed and, uh, build my body.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was a child, I always played basketball with my friends after school, which made me feel relaxed and helped build my body.

The sentence refers to habitual actions in the past, so the verbs should be in the past tense. 'play' should be 'played'. The relative clause 'which can make me feel relaxed and, uh, build my body' should match past time: use 'made' and 'helped build' for clarity and correct verb forms. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and parallel verb forms.

× In my childhood, I to be honest, I sincerely remember that I went to the library to rent a book maybe twice a week and, uh, enjoy the reading time there.

✓ To be honest, in my childhood I remember that I went to the library to borrow a book maybe twice a week and enjoyed the reading time there.

The original sentence has awkward word order and mixed tenses. Move the discourse marker 'To be honest' to the front and use past tense consistently: 'went' and 'enjoyed'. Also 'rent a book' is nonstandard in this context; use 'borrow a book' for library usage. Suggestion: place introductory phrases before the subject and keep verb tenses consistent.

× As I always play basketball, always my family members, uh, we in summer holidays, I always uh play with my father in my near park.

✓ I always play basketball, and during summer holidays my family and I play together; I often play with my father in the nearby park.

The original sentence has fragmented and redundant structure ('As I always play basketball, always my family members, uh, we in summer holidays,...'). It lacks correct conjunctions and clear subject order. Reorganize to 'I always play basketball, and during summer holidays my family and I play together' to show relationship, and use 'nearby park' rather than 'my near park'. Use consistent frequency adverbs ('always' or 'often') and place them appropriately before main verbs. Suggestion: combine ideas with conjunctions and correct adjective order.