Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundant phrases, fix verb forms and countable noun agreement, and use linking words for clarity. Add a specific example of what you read and why. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I have several hobbies, but my favorite is reading. I usually read contemporary fiction or psychology books, and when I have free time I often finish short novels in one sitting. Reading helps me relax and improves my concentration, which is useful when I study or work.

Suggestion: Use past tense consistently and correct collocations. Begin with a clear past-topic sentence, supply specific details, and use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Avoid awkward phrasing like 'get me with compliments' and 'thought on my paper'. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved drawing animals and scenes, which I often showed to my family. They would compliment me and encourage me to keep practising, so I drew every weekend. Later I began experimenting with an iPad because it was easier to edit and share my drawings.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and subject-verb agreement; avoid mixing present perfect with past incorrectly. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific detail about how you practised and what improved. Use linking words like 'at first' and 'eventually'. Limit to 3–4 clear sentences.

Example: Yes — I've practised digital art since I was a child. At first it took me a long time to learn the tools on my iPad, but with regular practice I improved my line work and colouring. Eventually I became faster and more confident using different brushes and techniques.

Suggestion: Improve grammar (possessive forms, verb forms) and clarity. Start with a direct statement, then give specific examples of how your brother helps you and what you learn. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'. Keep to 3–4 sentences and avoid vague phrases like 'goes to a school' without context.

Example: Yes, I share at least one hobby with my brother — painting. For example, he often shows me his work and teaches me techniques such as blending and composition, which I practise at home. Because he studies art at school, his feedback inspires me to develop my own skills.

× However, one of my favorite hobby is reading.

✓ However, one of my favorite hobbies is reading.

'One of' requires a plural noun after it, so 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' to agree with the expression. Use: 'one of my favorite hobbies'.

× Whenever I have a free time, I will pick up a book from my bookshelf and read it in one sitting.

✓ Whenever I have free time, I pick up a book from my bookshelf and read it in one sitting.

Do not use the article 'a' with the uncountable noun 'free time'. Also, for habitual actions use the simple present ('I pick up') rather than 'will'. Replace 'a free time' with 'free time' and 'will pick' with 'pick'.

× Having able to read helped me a lot to develop my good mental health and it helped me maintain my attention span.

✓ Being able to read has helped me a lot to develop good mental health and has helped me maintain my attention span.

Use 'being able' instead of the incorrect 'having able'. Also use present perfect ('has helped') to show continuing effect. Remove unnecessary article 'my' before 'good mental health' for natural phrasing.

× I drew my favorite animals and my favorite scenarios so that I can share that with my family member.

✓ I drew my favorite animals and my favorite scenes so that I could share them with my family members.

When describing past events, use past modal 'could' instead of present 'can'. 'Scenarios' is better as 'scenes' here. 'That' should be plural 'them' to match plural objects. 'Family member' should be plural 'family members' unless referring to one specific person.

× After that, they will get me with some compliments and encourage me to draw even more.

✓ After that, they would give me compliments and encourage me to draw even more.

Use past tense 'would give' to match past narrative. 'Get me with some compliments' is incorrect; use 'give me compliments'.

× I always thought on my paper, but sometimes I prefer drawing on my iPad instead.

✓ I always drew on paper, but sometimes I preferred drawing on my iPad instead.

'Think on' is incorrect here; in context of past habit 'drew on paper' or 'drew on my paper' is appropriate. Maintain past tense consistency: 'preferred'.

× To be honest, in my childhood I've been working on my digital art skills.

✓ To be honest, in my childhood I worked on my digital art skills.

'In my childhood' describes a past period, so use simple past 'worked' rather than present perfect continuous 'I've been working'. Present perfect continuous implies relevance to now; if you mean ongoing since childhood you could say 'I have been developing my digital art skills since childhood.'

× It's take me some time to getting better at doing on my iPad, but when I'm getting used to those tools in the application, I feels like I'm getting better at doing it.

✓ It took me some time to get better at using my iPad, but when I got used to the tools in the app, I felt like I was getting better at it.

Use past tense 'took' for a past period. Use 'to get' not 'to getting'. Use 'using my iPad' instead of 'doing on my iPad'. 'I'm getting used' should be 'I got used' for past context. 'I feels' wrong subject-verb agreement; use 'I felt'.

× Absolutely, my brother's hobby is the same as mine.

✓ Absolutely, my brother's hobby is the same as mine.

Sentence is correct; no change needed. (Included for completeness: no article issues present.)

× He always show me his painting and teach me a lot of unique technique to improve my painting.

✓ He always shows me his paintings and teaches me a lot of unique techniques to improve my painting.

For third person singular use 'shows' and 'teaches'. Use plural 'paintings' if he shows multiple works, and plural 'techniques' to match 'a lot of'.

× This is why he goes to a school and it inspires me a lot to do the same.

✓ This is why he goes to school and it inspires me a lot to do the same.

Use 'goes to school' without the indefinite article when referring to attending school in general. The rest of the sentence is fine.

× I hope that I'm getting better at painting just like him.

✓ I hope that I get better at painting, just like him.

Use 'I hope that I get better' or 'I hope I'm getting better' depending on nuance. For a general hope about the future, simple present 'I get' or 'I will get' is appropriate. If you want continuous improvement now, 'I hope I'm getting better' is acceptable; avoid mixing present continuous with 'hope' awkwardly.