Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing. Focus on precise vocabulary (e.g., "playing games online," "reading novels") and limit to 2–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing online games and reading novels; however, my favorite is playing games with friends because it helps me relax and socialize after a busy day.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence about childhood hobbies and then give one or two specific examples with correct grammar. Use linking words (for example, because) to explain why you liked them. Avoid unclear phrases like "as novels."

Example: Yes, as a child I liked playing outdoor games with my friends. For example, I played a lot of basketball because I enjoyed the team spirit and the physical exercise.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give concrete details: when you started, how often you practice, and why you continued. Use simple correct tenses and avoid filler words like "umm" and repeated words.

Example: Yes. I have played basketball since I was eight years old. I started attending regular practices and matches, and because I enjoy the sport and teamwork, I have continued playing ever since.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer, then briefly compare your hobby with one or two family members using linking words (for example, whereas, while). Correct grammar (e.g., "different personalities," "my brother's hobby is"). Keep it concise and specific.

Example: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. For example, I play basketball, whereas my brother prefers online gaming, and my parents enjoy gardening and cooking.

× Actually yes, I have many hobbies in my free time I always do like playing with friends, online games and reading novels.

✓ Actually yes, I have many hobbies. In my free time I always do things like playing with friends, playing online games, and reading novels.

The original is a run-on sentence and missing a verb phrase for 'do like'. Split into two sentences and use 'do things like' to list activities; add parallel gerunds and commas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× These two are my favorite hobbies and in this too, my favorite one is playing game with my friends because playing with them makes me feel so comfortable and relaxing.

✓ These two are my favorite hobbies, and of the two my favorite is playing games with my friends because playing with them makes me feel comfortable and relaxed.

Use 'of the two' for comparison and plural 'games'. 'Comfortable and relaxed' are correct adjectives describing feelings; 'relaxing' describes something that relaxes, not the feeling. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Yeah, whenever child my favorite hobbies was playing outdoor game with friends.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child my favorite hobby was playing outdoor games with friends.

Word order and forms are incorrect: use 'when I was a child' and singular 'hobby' with 'was'. 'Outdoor games' should be plural. Fixed sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Like there were many several of games, but in them one of my favorite game is playing basketball as novels.

✓ There were many different games, and one of my favorites was playing basketball rather than reading novels.

Remove redundant 'many several', use 'different' or 'many'. Match tense with 'was' for past. Clarify comparison with 'rather than' and plural 'favorites'. Grammar problem type ID:14

× I'm a basketball player and at that time too, I really love playing basketball.

✓ I was a basketball player, and at that time I really loved playing basketball.

Tense should be past when talking about childhood ('was', 'loved'). 'Love' is present-tense; change to past for consistency. Grammar problem type ID:2

× Yes, my hobby is to be a basketball player.

✓ Yes, my hobby was to play basketball, or I wanted to be a basketball player.

'Hobby is to be a basketball player' is awkward. Use 'hobby was to play basketball' or 'I wanted to be a basketball player' to express childhood long-term hobby/goal. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Since I was umm 8 years old, I started my basketball journey and at that time also I think that I need to do this and now also I I thought that I will be basketball.

✓ I started my basketball journey when I was eight years old. At that time I thought I needed to do this, and I also thought I would become a basketball player.

Mixing tenses and awkward phrasing: use past tense throughout ('started', 'thought', 'needed', 'would become'). Use 'become a basketball player' not 'be basketball'. Remove filler 'umm' and duplicate words. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Actually no I didn't have any same hobbies as my family members because we all have our different personality and I don't think we will ever have the same hobbies.

✓ Actually no, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members because we all have different personalities, and I don't think we will ever have the same hobbies.

Tense and pronoun consistency: speaker currently states difference so present tense 'don't have' is correct. Use plural 'personalities'. Remove 'any' before 'same hobbies'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Like umm my hobbies to play basketball, my brother hobbies to play online games with his friends and my mom and father also have different different hobbies so no.

✓ For example, my hobby is playing basketball, my brother's hobby is playing online games with his friends, and my mother and father also have different hobbies.

Original lacks verbs and possessive forms. Use 'my hobby is' and 'my brother's hobby is'. Remove duplicate 'different'. 'So no' is unnecessary. Fixed parallel structure. Grammar problem type ID:26