Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use complete sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (use subject pronouns and articles) and avoid repetition. For example, say whether you have hobbies now, mention the main ones, and give a short reason or frequency.

Example: I don’t have a regular hobby, but I often play football and video games in my free time. For example, I play football with friends twice a week because it helps me stay fit, and I also enjoy watching football matches on weekends with my family.

Suggestion: Open with a clear topic sentence and then give a concise reason. Avoid fillers like 'you know' and correct grammar (verb tenses and articles). Use linking words such as 'because' to explain why sports were important.

Example: I didn’t have formal hobbies as a child, but I played a lot of sports. Because I was studying a lot, sports helped me relax and reduce stress after school.

Suggestion: Be specific and organize your answer: state whether you have a continuous hobby, then list one or two activities you kept doing since childhood with brief details. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Use linking words like 'however' or 'also' correctly.

Example: I don’t have a single hobby I’ve kept continuously, but I have been interested in video games and football since I was a child. For instance, I collected a few stamps when I was young and I still enjoy playing football with friends occasionally.

Suggestion: Answer directly and compare clearly. Start with a topic sentence saying whether your hobbies match your family, then contrast with specific examples. Remove hesitations and fix grammar (use past/simple forms properly). Use linking words such as 'whereas' or 'while' to contrast.

Example: No, my hobbies are different from my brother’s. While he prefers reading and exploring new technology, I’m more into sports and playing football, so our interests don’t overlap much.

× Actually don't have hobbies but I would like to play football when I have free time and I would like to spend time sometimes with my family and also I would like to watch football games when I have free time And I do have a PlayStation where I I play a lot of video games.

✓ I don't have any hobbies, but I would like to play football when I have free time. I also like to spend time with my family sometimes, and I like to watch football games when I have free time. I do have a PlayStation where I play a lot of video games.

The original sentence omits the singular auxiliary 'I' before don't and uses plural 'hobbies' correctly but lacks the article 'any' for negative statements with plural nouns. It also runs several clauses together without proper punctuation or conjunctions. Suggestion: add the subject 'I' before 'don't', use 'any' in negative context ('don't have any hobbies'), split into shorter sentences, and remove the duplicated 'I'. Grammar point: plural nouns in negative sentences typically require 'any' (e.g., 'don't have any hobbies').

× I didn't have any hobbies when I was a child, but I used to play a lot of sports. That's what makes me like, you know, so stressless and so relaxed and with the all the studies I had to do.

✓ I didn't have any hobbies when I was a child, but I used to play a lot of sports. That made me feel less stressed and more relaxed while I was doing all the studying I had to do.

The clause 'That's what makes me' mixes present tense with past-time reference; when describing past habits and effects, use past tense ('made me feel'). 'So stressless' is unnatural; use 'less stressed'. 'With the all the studies I had to do' is ungrammatical: use 'while I was doing all the studying I had to do.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) and use natural adjective 'stressed' and noun form 'studying'.

× I didn't have any hobbies when I was a kid actually, but I was pretty interested in playing video games and collecting stamps and collecting some, uh, valuable items.

✓ I didn't have any hobbies when I was a kid, but I was quite interested in playing video games, collecting stamps, and gathering other valuable items.

The original mixes informal fillers and repeats 'collecting'. Use parallel list structure with commas and coordinate conjunction. 'Pretty interested' is acceptable but 'quite interested' is more natural. Suggestion: remove fillers and use parallel gerunds for each hobby ('playing', 'collecting', 'gathering').

× And also I had a, you know, uh, pretty interest related to playing football.

✓ I also had a strong interest in playing football.

'Pretty interest' is incorrect word choice and structure. Use 'had a strong interest in' or 'was pretty interested in'. Also remove fillers. Suggestion: use correct collocation 'interest in' and an appropriate modifier ('strong' or 'great').

× I don't think so because my brother used to, used to, you know, have a lot of hobbies. Like his hobbies were like two different he, he was like interested in reading books, uh, finding new equipments, like finding out new technologies, but I was like a pretty sporty guy.

✓ I don't think so, because my brother used to have many hobbies. His interests were different: he was interested in reading books and discovering new equipment and technologies, but I was more of a sporty person.

Original has repeated 'used to' and excessive fillers ('like', 'you know'), and 'equipments' is noncount and should be 'equipment'. 'He was like interested' is informal and ungrammatical. Also 'a pretty sporty guy' is informal; 'more of a sporty person' is clearer. Suggestion: remove repetitions and fillers, correct noun count ('equipment'), and use clearer pronouns and descriptions.