Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct plural and article mistakes, and link supporting details with conjunctions. Also give one specific example to make it more concrete.

Example: I have a few hobbies in my free time. I enjoy browsing social media, especially following style and technology blogs, because they keep me updated on trends. I also often watch short videos for relaxation, such as tech reviews or fashion hauls, which I usually view during my commute.

Suggestion: Improve grammar (plural forms and tense accuracy) and streamline the response. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific details and a linking word to explain why you liked the hobby.

Example: Yes, when I was a child I used to collect stamps and postcards. I didn't collect them every day, but I gathered them regularly because I enjoyed studying their different designs and the stories behind them.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and fix word order and prepositions. Use a concise topic sentence and then add a specific frequency and example to make it sound natural.

Example: I used to collect stamps as a child, and although I don't do it regularly now, I still add new stamps to my collection occasionally. For example, I buy a few stamps from online auctions a couple of times a year.

Suggestion: Clarify meaning and correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'tends' or 'growing plants' instead of 'carrying his blends'). Use a clear contrast sentence and give a brief explanation with a linking word.

Example: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. For example, my dad enjoys gardening and growing flowers, so we rarely have time to do the same activities together.

× Yes, I have few hobby in my free time.

✓ Yes, I have a few hobbies in my free time.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural when referring to more than one; the quantifier 'a few' requires a countable plural noun. Also use 'a few' (positive) rather than 'few' which implies almost none. Suggestion: use 'a few hobbies' to show having some hobbies.

× I enjoy browsing social media and follow style and technology blogs.

✓ I enjoy browsing social media and following style and technology blogs.

When using 'enjoy', the verb that follows should be in the -ing (gerund) form. 'Follow' should be 'following' to match 'enjoy'. Suggestion: use parallel gerunds after 'enjoy' (e.g., 'enjoy reading and watching').

× I often watch short video because it's having relaxed and not something new.

✓ I often watch short videos because they're relaxing and not something new.

Use plural 'videos' for general reference to short videos. 'It's having relaxed' is incorrect: use the adjective 'relaxing' to describe videos and match plural subject with 'they're' or 'they are'. Also 'not something new' is fine but 'nothing new' or 'not new' are alternatives. Suggestion: say 'short videos are relaxing' or 'they're relaxing and nothing new.'

× Just when I was a child, I used to collect stamp and postcard.

✓ When I was a child, I used to collect stamps and postcards.

Use plural 'stamps and postcards' when speaking generally. The phrase 'Just when I was a child' is unnatural; 'When I was a child' is correct. 'Used to' indicates past habitual action; keep it and plural nouns.

× I didn't do it anytime, but I collected them often because I like learning about their different designs.

✓ I didn't do it all the time, but I collected them often because I liked learning about their different designs.

'Anytime' is not correct here; use 'all the time' to mean constantly. Tense consistency: speaking about past habit, use past 'liked' instead of 'like'. Also 'collected them often' is fine. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout when describing past habits.

× When I was a child I used to collect stamps, but I don't do it regularly anymore.

✓ When I was a child I used to collect stamps, but I don't do it regularly anymore.

This sentence is correct for tense: 'used to' for past habit and 'don't do it regularly anymore' for present. No correction necessary; keep as is. Explanation: 'used to' indicates past habit and present negative 'don't' shows current lack of regularity.

× But I still spend some of my free time to add things new stamps to my collection occasionally.

✓ But I still spend some of my free time adding new stamps to my collection occasionally.

Use the -ing form 'adding' after 'spend time' (spend time doing something). 'Add things new stamps' is incorrect word order; place adjective 'new' before 'stamps'. Suggestion: use 'spend time adding new stamps' or 'spend some free time on adding new stamps.'

× No, my hobby is different from my family.

✓ No, my hobbies are different from my family's.

If referring to multiple activities, use plural 'hobbies' and possessive 'my family's' (family as a unit). Alternatively, 'No, my hobby is different from my family's hobby.' Suggestion: use plural forms and possessive to show comparison.

× For example, my dad enjoys spending time to carrying his blends and flowers, so we it's hard to take the time for same activity together.

✓ For example, my dad enjoys spending time caring for his plants and flowers, so it's hard for us to find time for the same activity together.

'Spending time to carrying' is incorrect; use 'spending time caring for' or 'spending time on caring for'. 'Blends' is likely a wrong word; 'plants' fits context. Fix word order: 'so it's hard for us to find time' and include article 'the same activity' or 'the same activities'. Suggestion: use 'caring for his plants' and 'it's hard for us to find time to do the same activity together.'