Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Говорите более связно и грамотно: начните с простой темы (I am a big fan of ...), используйте правильные времена и местоимения, избегайте повторов и уточните детали (например, почему вам нравятся эти книги). Постарайтесь уложиться в 2–4 предложения, использовать связки (because, so, for example) и правильную лексику (series, author, themes).

Example: I am a big fan of a dark romance series called Legacy of God by one author. I read these books whenever I have free time because I enjoy the tense relationship between the main characters and the dramatic plot. For example, the author often explores jealousy and power struggles, which makes the stories exciting.

Suggestion: Сформулируйте мысль ясно: начните с прямого ответа (Yes, I did). Используйте правильные формы глаголов и структуры (I enjoyed watching Disney movies and reading romance novels). Дайте конкретный пример и причину, почему вам нравились эти хобби, избегайте грамматических ошибок и ненужных вставок.

Example: Yes, I did. As a child I enjoyed watching Disney movies and reading love stories. I liked them because the characters showed respect and care for each other, and those stories taught me about kindness and relationships.

Suggestion: Упрощайте и структурируйте ответ: скажите прямо, что вы постоянно гуляете и слушаете музыку. Избегайте множества повторов и слов-паразитов, используйте связки (since, when, while) и правильную грамматику. Добавьте конкретный пример, как прогулки помогают вам размышлять.

Example: Yes, I have. I have enjoyed walking since I was a child, and I still walk a lot now. I usually put on headphones and listen to music while I walk because it helps me think about problems and find solutions. For instance, I often plan my day during a 30-minute walk.

Suggestion: Сформулируйте ответ логично и вежливо: начните с прямого утверждения (Yes, we do—cooking). Объясните причину кратко и ясно, избегайте неясных фраз и ошибок в словоупотреблении. Используйте связки (because, so, for example) и конкретный пример о семейных привычках.

Example: Yes, to some extent we share the hobby of cooking. Because I grew up without a father, cooking became a way for our family to support each other, so everyone learned basic recipes. For example, we often cook together on weekends and teach younger children how to prepare simple meals.

× To be honest currently am big fanat of renegade books.

✓ To be honest, I am currently a big fan of Renegade books.

The sentence lacks the subject pronoun 'I' and the verb 'am' is missing the subject. 'Big fanat' is incorrect; use 'a big fan'. Capitalize 'Renegade' if it is a title. Add commas for clarity.

× It's something like dark romance and the series is Legacy of God and every time when I have free time I always read her books.

✓ They are a kind of dark romance, and one series I like is Legacy of God; whenever I have free time, I always read those books.

Use plural or neutral reference ('they' or 'those books') instead of 'her books' unless the author is female, and 'every time when' is wordy; use 'whenever'. Use semicolon or conjunctions to join clauses. 'It's something like' is informal; use 'They are a kind of'.

× It's always about tension between man and woman.

✓ They are always about the tension between men and women.

Use plural nouns 'men and women' when referring generally. Match 'they are' with plural 'books' from prior sentence.

× They're jealous.

✓ The characters are often jealous.

Clarify who 'they' refers to and add 'often' to indicate frequency; 'jealous' describes the characters, so specify 'the characters'.

× Something like this.

✓ Something like that.

'Something like this' is vague; in context 'something like that' is more natural. Complete sentences are preferred.

× When I was a child, my main hobby or the biggest hobby for me it was a watching movies from Disney and I'm driving to love novels where lovers or people love each other, respect each other, responsible for their feeling and can facing their.

✓ When I was a child, my main hobby was watching Disney movies, and I used to love novels where the characters love and respect each other and take responsibility for their feelings.

Remove redundant phrases 'for me it was a' and correct 'a watching' to 'watching'. Use 'used to' for past habitual actions. 'Responsible for their feeling' should be 'take responsibility for their feelings'. 'Can facing their' is ungrammatical; removed and rephrased.

× To be honest, it uh, walking by side, uh, during my childhood, from my childhood, during my recent years, uh, I always put my headphones and while I go sell sites, I can think about my problems to find solution or how can facing my life.

✓ To be honest, walking beside the road as a child and in recent years, I always put on my headphones and, while I walk around places, I think about my problems to find solutions or how to face my life.

Remove filler 'uh' and redundant phrases. Use 'put on my headphones' (phrasal verb), 'while I walk' instead of 'while I go', and 'find solutions' (plural). Use 'how to face my life' instead of 'how can facing my life'.

× Think it may be cooking.

✓ I think it may be cooking.

Sentence is missing the subject pronoun 'I'. Add it to form a complete sentence.

× And the main reason of this is that I'm grown without father and brother and uh, they're disappearing.

✓ The main reason is that I grew up without my father and brother, and they are absent from my life.

Use 'grew up' for past experience. 'Grown without father and brother' is incorrect. 'They're disappearing' is unclear; replace with 'they are absent from my life'.

× Leads to uh, feminine, increasing feminine in my family.

✓ This led to an increase in feminine responsibilities in my family.

Clarify meaning: 'feminine' alone is incorrect; use 'feminine responsibilities' or 'women taking on more responsibility'. Use past tense 'led' to match context.

× So we're always take care of each other.

✓ So we always take care of each other.

Remove 're' contraction error: 'we're always take' is incorrect; use 'we always take' to match subject-verb agreement and correct verb form.

× And for instance, if umm, some person don't have any motivation for children like this, we just cook.

✓ For instance, if someone doesn't have any motivation to care for children like this, we just cook for them.

Use 'someone' instead of 'some person' and correct verb agreement 'doesn't have'. Clarify 'motivation for children' to 'motivation to care for children' and add 'for them' for clarity.