Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence naming your main hobbies, avoid repetition and uncertain words (e.g., “might”, “potentially”), and keep to 2–3 supporting details. Use linking words if you add reasons. Pronunciation and grammar should be corrected (e.g., “I like baking” not “might like count baking”).

Example: I have several hobbies. I enjoy baking, singing and dancing. For example, I bake at weekends to try new recipes, and I take a weekly dance class to improve my technique.

Suggestion: This answer is clear and relevant but a bit repetitive. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words (e.g., “so”, “because”, “for example”). Reduce repeated phrases like “I used to”.

Example: Yes, I did. As a child I loved colouring in a sketchbook after school because it helped me relax and be creative. For example, I often spent an hour drawing landscapes and experimenting with colours.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and then add specific details about how you developed the hobby, using linking words (e.g., “however”, “since then”, “because”). Avoid filler words like “uh” and uncertain terms such as “potentially”.

Example: Yes, I have sung since childhood. Although I wasn’t very skilled at first, I practised regularly and took singing lessons, so over the years my technique and confidence improved.

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise: begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I don’t share many hobbies with my family”), then give one specific example and a reason with linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like “demonstrate myself” and “a lot more opposite”.

Example: No, I don’t share many hobbies with my family. For example, they prefer outdoor activities like hiking, while I enjoy baking and singing, so our interests don’t overlap.

× Some of them might like count baking, singing and dancing.

✓ Some of them might include baking, singing and dancing.

The original uses an incorrect verb phrase 'might like count'. This is a sentence structure and verb choice error. Replace with 'might include' to correctly list hobbies. Use 'include' when giving examples rather than 'count'.

× And I am potentially good at baking, dancing and dancing, yes.

✓ And I am potentially good at baking and dancing.

The sentence repeats 'dancing' and uses 'potentially' awkwardly. Remove the duplicate and use 'potentially' only if uncertain; 'am good at' is sufficient. Also avoid starting sentences with 'And' in formal speech, but it is acceptable in spoken language. Suggestion: say 'I'm good at baking and dancing.' for clearer expression.

× Actually. I had a coloring book.

✓ Actually, I had a coloring book.

The original splits into a fragment 'Actually.' followed by the sentence. This is a punctuation/structure issue. Combine into a single sentence with a comma after 'Actually' to show continuation. The noun phrase 'a coloring book' is correct.

× I used to color all over it as soon as I used to get back home from school and it was really, really fun.

✓ I used to color in it as soon as I got back home from school, and it was really, really fun.

'Used to' should indicate past habitual action and is not needed twice in one clause. Also 'color all over it' is awkward; 'color in it' or 'color in it all' is clearer. Replace the second 'used to get' with simple past 'got' to avoid redundancy.

× I actually, uh, used to sing, but when I was a child I didn't know how to sing that well.

✓ I actually used to sing, but when I was a child I didn't know how to sing very well.

Grammatically correct but 'that well' is colloquial; 'very well' is clearer. Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary comma for clarity.

× But when I grew up I think I potentially became better at it.

✓ But when I grew up, I think I became better at it.

'Potentially became' is awkward because 'potentially' suggests uncertainty while 'became' is definite. Remove 'potentially'. Also add a comma after the introductory clause 'But when I grew up'. If the speaker is uncertain, use 'I think I got better at it.'

× Not really, I am quite different from my family members when I have to demonstrate myself to them.

✓ Not really. I am quite different from my family members when I have to present myself to them.

'Demonstrate myself to them' is incorrect phrasing; use 'present myself' or 'show myself' depending on meaning. Also split into two sentences for clarity. 'Present myself' is the correct collocation.

× I am lot more opposite than them.

✓ I am quite different from them.

'Lot more opposite' is incorrect English. 'Opposite' is rarely used this way; use 'different' and include an adverb 'quite' or 'a lot' as needed. Also use 'from them' rather than 'than them' for comparison with 'different'.

× So I think for me I do not have any common hobbies with my family or parents because I do not share the same interests as them.

✓ So I think that I do not have any hobbies in common with my family or parents because I do not share the same interests as they do.

'Common hobbies' should be 'hobbies in common'. The clause 'as them' is incorrect; use 'as they do' or 'with them'. Also remove redundant 'for me' after 'I think'. This corrects sentence structure and pronoun use.