Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and reduce filler words (umm, uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Mention frequency and who you play with in a concise way.

Example: I enjoy several hobbies, mainly table tennis, badminton and chess. I usually play table tennis and badminton with my parents on weekends, and I play chess in the evenings to relax and improve my thinking.

Suggestion: Avoid repetitions and fillers; correct minor mistakes (chest → chess). Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific detail about when you started and explain the benefit, linking them logically.

Example: Yes, I did. I enjoyed table tennis, badminton and chess as a child, and I began playing chess at about four years old, which really helped me develop critical thinking and analytical skills.

Suggestion: This answer is good but contains repetition, fillers and slightly informal phrasing. Keep it within 3–4 sentences, remove hesitations, and smooth the narrative with linking words (for example, 'however' or 'eventually') and correct grammar (avoid double 'and').

Example: Yes, I have had chess since childhood. My grandfather taught me when I was about four, and although I lost most games at first, after about fourteen years of practice I finally beat him, which felt very rewarding.

Suggestion: Make the answer more fluent and precise: remove pauses, correct small errors ('W we'), and provide one clear supporting detail explaining why you enjoy doing these hobbies together, using a linking word like 'because' or 'so'.

Example: Yes, we share several hobbies, especially table tennis and badminton, and we usually play on weekends or after work. We enjoy it because it helps us relax and gives us a chance to talk and bond as a family.

× Yes, I have lots of hobbies like table tennis, badminton and chess and all of them I love doing umm, since I was a kid and uh, I still after many years, I do them uh, on weekends with my parents, with my family members and it's really fun.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies like table tennis, badminton, and chess, and I have loved them since I was a kid. Even after many years, I still play them on weekends with my parents and other family members, and it's really fun.

'Lots of hobbies' is informal but acceptable; changed to 'many hobbies' for clarity. 'All of them I love doing' is awkward word order; corrected to 'I have loved them'. 'Since I was a kid' requires present perfect 'have loved' to show an action that began in the past and continues. 'I still after many years, I do them' is ungrammatical and redundant; corrected to 'Even after many years, I still play them'. Also adjusted punctuation and word order for natural English.

× Yes, I had several hobbies such as table tennis, badminton and chess when I was a child. Uh, and uh, chest I started uh, when I was about four, uh, it helped me to improve the critical thinking and analytical skills.

✓ Yes, I had several hobbies such as table tennis, badminton, and chess when I was a child. I started chess when I was about four, and it helped me improve my critical thinking and analytical skills.

The original had word order problems and informal fillers. 'Chest I started' is incorrect order; it should be 'I started chess'. 'Helped me to improve' is acceptable but 'helped me improve' is more natural. Use past tense consistently because the speaker refers to childhood events.

× Yes, I had several hobbies as a child, including table tennis, badminton and chess. I started playing chess when I was about four, which helped me develop critical thinking and and analytical skills. And umm, my grandfather taught me how to play it. But mostly I used to fail every game with him. But after 14 years I totally won him.

✓ Yes, I had several hobbies as a child, including table tennis, badminton, and chess. I started playing chess when I was about four, which helped me develop critical thinking and analytical skills. My grandfather taught me how to play. At first I used to lose every game to him, but after 14 years I finally beat him.

Fixed duplicated 'and', improved sentence flow and verb choices. 'Used to fail every game with him' is awkward; use 'used to lose every game to him'. 'Totally won him' is incorrect; use 'finally beat him'. 'Finally' fits better than 'totally'. Tenses remain past because these are past events.

× Yes, my family members and I have lots of hobbies such as table tennis and badminton and W we like playing them on weekends or after work. It's really fun. And during this kind of hobbies we try to discuss something and have fun.

✓ Yes, my family members and I have many hobbies such as table tennis and badminton, and we like playing them on weekends or after work. It's really fun. While doing these hobbies, we try to talk about things and enjoy ourselves.

Removed stray 'W'. Changed 'lots of hobbies' to 'many hobbies' for formality and clarity. 'During this kind of hobbies' is ungrammatical; use 'while doing these hobbies' or 'during these activities'. 'Discuss something' is vague; 'talk about things' is more natural. Added reflexive 'enjoy ourselves' to show who benefits.