Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Focus on producing a clear, grammatical topic sentence and then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. Correct grammar (e.g., "I have a hobby" not "I'm have my hobby") and use precise reasons: say how volleyball helps your health and why you enjoy its difficulty level. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

Example: I enjoy playing volleyball. It keeps me fit because it improves my stamina and coordination, and I like it because it’s challenging but not too intense, so I can play regularly without getting exhausted.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer in past tense and explain reasons clearly with linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect tense/grammar. Be specific about what made football difficult (e.g., physical demands or teamwork). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, when I was young I liked playing football. However, I stopped because it was more physically demanding and my team wasn’t very supportive, so I switched to volleyball which suits me better.

Suggestion: Answer directly and expand slightly to explain why, using one or two sentences. Use full sentences and provide a brief reason or example to enrich the response (link with past hobby changes).

Example: Not really. I tried football as a child, but I changed to volleyball during my teenage years, so I don’t have a hobby I’ve kept since childhood.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific details using linking words such as 'however' or 'but'. Correct grammar and avoid repetition. Explain family members’ involvement clearly (how often they play, occasions) and end positively if possible.

Example: Yes, my father and grandfather also enjoy volleyball, but they are often busy with work. However, when they have free time—usually on weekends—they play with me, so we sometimes practice together as a family.

× Yes, of course, definitely. I'm have my hobby.

✓ Yes, of course. I have a hobby.

The original 'I'm have' mixes present continuous with simple present incorrectly. Use 'I have' to state possession of a hobby. Remove redundant adverbs 'definitely' or place them appropriately; here 'of course' suffices.

× My hobby is volleyball.

✓ My hobby is volleyball.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no change; it correctly uses pronouns and verb 'is' to define the hobby.

× I really like volleyball because it it make me more healthy than averse childhood and I I really upset with that because it like easy, not really hard, not too difficult, but.

✓ I really like volleyball because it makes me healthier than when I was a child, and I am really upset about that because it seems easy, not very hard or difficult.

Multiple issues: duplicate words 'it it' and 'I I' are errors. 'it make' needs third person singular 'it makes' (subject-verb agreement / third person singular). 'More healthy' should be comparative 'healthier'. 'Averse childhood' is incorrect phrase; use 'when I was a child' to express comparison to childhood. 'Upset with that' should be 'upset about that'. 'It like easy' needs 'it seems easy' or 'it is easy'. Overall sentence structure was run-on; split and reorder for clarity.

× Yes, of course I have and my when I was young I really like football but now I like volleyball because football when I play it really difficult then other sports and it have a really bad team.

✓ Yes, of course I did. When I was young I really liked football, but now I like volleyball because playing football was much more difficult than other sports and my team was really bad.

Tense inconsistencies: 'I have' should be 'I did' when referring to past hobbies. 'I really like' should be past 'I really liked' because it's about childhood. 'When I play it really difficult' needs past 'was' and comparative structure 'more difficult than other sports'. 'It have a really bad team' should be 'my team was really bad' (subject and past tense agreement).

× So I'm stop playing football whenever childhood.

✓ So I stopped playing football during my childhood.

'I'm stop' mixes present progressive with base verb; use past simple 'stopped' for a completed action in the past. 'Whenever childhood' is ungrammatical; use 'during my childhood' to indicate the time period.

× Not really. But yeah, not really.

✓ Not really.

Repetition 'But yeah, not really' is redundant. A single concise response 'Not really.' is clear and appropriate to the question.

× Yes, of course, My dad, my dad and my grandpa are like volleyball.

✓ Yes, of course. My dad and my grandpa like volleyball.

Redundant phrase 'my dad, my dad' should be 'my dad'. 'Are like volleyball' is incorrect verb/object order; use 'like volleyball' to express preference.

× But then they don't have too much free time, so they just let me play alone when they free.

✓ But they don't have much free time, so they just let me play alone when they are free.

'Don't have too much free time' is acceptable but 'too' is better as 'much' here. 'When they free' lacks verb; use 'when they are free'.

× They when they have when, when they're not busy, they gonna play with me.

✓ When they are not busy, they play with me.

Remove repetition 'they when they have when'. 'They're not busy' is correct but 'they gonna play' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'they play with me' or 'they will play with me' depending on meaning. Present simple 'they play with me' fits habitual action.

× So yeah, I'm pretty lonely.

✓ So yeah, I'm pretty lonely.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It appropriately uses the present tense 'I'm' to describe current feeling; no correction needed.