Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms, and give one supporting detail (when/how often). Keep it under 5 sentences and avoid filler like "like."

Example: Yes, I enjoy playing basketball. I usually play twice a week with friends at a local court, which helps me stay fit and relax after work.

Suggestion: Use past tense and natural phrasing. Give a clear topic sentence about your childhood hobby, then one specific detail (what games or how often). Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: When I was a child, I enjoyed playing online computer games. For example, I often played strategy games after school because I liked solving puzzles and competing with friends.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use simple, correct grammar. State whether you still have the hobby, then give a specific detail about who you played with and why it was meaningful. Use linking words such as "and" or "so" to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I have had the hobby of playing computer games since childhood. I used to play with my friends after school, and those sessions helped us bond and improve our teamwork.

Suggestion: Be concise and natural. Start with a direct answer (Yes/No) and then give a specific example (who, what you play together, when). Use correct possessive forms and plural agreement.

Example: Yes, my brother and I share the same hobby of playing computer games. We often play the same games together in the evenings, which is a great way for us to relax and communicate.

× I have a hobby like playing basketball.

✓ I have a hobby: playing basketball.

The original sentence uses 'like' incorrectly. Use a colon or 'such as' to introduce an example. Suggestion: 'I have a hobby: playing basketball.' or 'I have a hobby such as playing basketball.' This clarifies the relationship between 'hobby' and the activity.

× In my childhood history, I play my hobbies in the computer, like some online games.

✓ In my childhood, I played hobbies on the computer, such as online games.

The time phrase 'In my childhood' requires past tense, so 'play' should be 'played'. Use 'on the computer' not 'in the computer'. Use 'such as' to introduce examples. Suggestion: use past tense verbs and correct preposition 'on'.

× In my childhood's memories, yes, I have a hobby with my friends. We play computer games because we enjoy it when after school.

✓ In my childhood memories, yes, I had a hobby with my friends. We played computer games because we enjoyed them after school.

Use 'childhood memories' (no possessive 's'). The time refers to the past, so 'have' and 'play' should be 'had' and 'played'. 'Computer games' is plural, so refer to them with 'them' not 'it'. Remove 'when' before 'after school'. Suggestions: use correct noun form, past tense verbs, and match pronoun number.

× In my family member I have a brother with the same vibes because we play same game in a computer. We enjoy it while playing after school.

✓ In my family, I have a brother who likes the same things because we play the same game on the computer. We enjoy it when we play after school.

'In my family member' is incorrect; use 'In my family' or 'My family'. Use a relative pronoun 'who' to describe the brother. 'Same game' needs the definite article 'the'. Use 'on the computer' not 'in a computer'. The first sentence describes a general fact, present tense is OK. In the second sentence, 'we enjoy it while playing after school' is acceptable but clearer as 'we enjoy it when we play after school.' Ensure pronoun reference 'it' clearly refers to the game.