Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use clearer linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting details and a reason. Avoid small errors and redundancy (e.g., “meanwhile” is unnecessary here).

Example: I have three main hobbies: crocheting, reading and listening to music. However, because of my studies I haven’t had much time to crochet recently, so I’ve been borrowing books from the library to read in my free time.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use linking words to contrast general play with a consistent interest. Be specific about what you read or studied to make the answer more informative.

Example: When I was a child I didn’t have one fixed hobby because I often joined whatever my friends and cousins were doing. However, I consistently enjoyed studying and reading, especially children’s history books and storybooks.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid fillers like “as I have said a while ago.” Use past-time expressions correctly and shorten the response to one clear topic sentence plus a supporting detail about when and why you started crocheting.

Example: I don’t have hobbies that go back to my very early childhood, but I started crocheting in third grade and have kept it up ever since because I find it relaxing and creative.

Suggestion: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct statement about whether your hobbies match your parents’. Use a brief reason and avoid repetition or unclear phrases like “because there are to be.”

Example: Not really. I’m an only child and my parents are focused on work, so they don’t share my hobbies of crocheting, reading and listening to music.

× Currently I enjoy crochet, reading and listening to music.

✓ Currently I enjoy crocheting, reading, and listening to music.

Use of activities after 'enjoy' requires the gerund (-ing) form. 'Crochet' should be 'crocheting' to match 'reading' and 'listening' and to be grammatically parallel. Also add a serial comma for clarity. Suggestion: Use gerunds for activities after verbs like 'enjoy' and keep parallel structure.

× But lately because of my studies, I can't really find time to crochet.

✓ But lately, because of my studies, I can't really find time to crochet.

Main issue is punctuation: add a comma after 'lately' for readability. Grammar is otherwise acceptable; 'to crochet' is okay but 'crochet' as a noun could be used: 'find time for crocheting' or 'find time to crochet'. Suggestion: Use 'find time to crochet' or 'find time for crocheting' and include commas for clarity.

× Meanwhile, I borrowed a book from the library to read.

✓ Recently, I borrowed a book from the library to read.

'Meanwhile' is used to indicate simultaneous actions; 'recently' is more appropriate to indicate a recent action. The tense 'borrowed' (past) is fine. Suggestion: Choose 'recently' instead of 'meanwhile' when referring to a recent past action.

× When I was a kid I would always go out and play with my cousins or friends, so I wouldn't say that I had a specific hobby because it changes because of the influence of the people around me.

✓ When I was a kid, I would always go out and play with my cousins or friends, so I wouldn't say that I had a specific hobby because it changed due to the influence of the people around me.

Mixed tenses and time reference: 'When I was a kid' sets past time, so 'changes' should be 'changed' to match the past. 'Because of' repeated is awkward; 'due to' is clearer. Add comma after introductory clause. Suggestion: Keep verbs in the same past timeframe and avoid repeating conjunctions.

× But I would say that I love to study when I was a kid, so reading will count I guess.

✓ But I would say that I loved to study when I was a kid, so reading would count, I guess.

Time mismatch: 'love' is present; since the speaker refers to childhood, use past 'loved'. Also 'will count' should be 'would count' to match hypothetical/conditional tone. Add commas for natural speech pacing. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time frame and maintain conditional consistency with 'would'.

× As I have said a while ago, I didn't have a single regular hobby when I was a kid, so I wouldn't say that there are hobbies that I kept from my childhood.

✓ As I said a while ago, I didn't have a single regular hobby when I was a kid, so I wouldn't say that there are any hobbies I kept from my childhood.

Tense and phrasing: 'As I have said a while ago' mixes present perfect with a specific past time; 'As I said a while ago' is better. 'There are hobbies that I kept' is awkward; use 'there are any hobbies I kept' or 'I kept any hobbies'. Suggestion: Use 'As I said' for a past reference and simplify the relative clause for clarity.

× But when I was in 3rd grade, I discovered about crocheting, which I do until now.

✓ But when I was in 3rd grade, I discovered crochet, which I still do now.

Incorrect verb use: 'discovered about crocheting' is ungrammatical; use 'discovered crochet' or 'learned to crochet'. Also 'which I do until now' is awkward: use 'which I still do' or 'which I still do now'. Suggestion: Say 'I discovered crochet' or 'I learned to crochet' and use 'still' to indicate continuation.

× Since I am an only child, the only members in my family are my parents and I wouldn't say that I have the same hobbies as them because they have work to do while I'm still doing my studies.

✓ Since I am an only child, the only members in my family are my parents, and I wouldn't say that I have the same hobbies as they do because they have work to do while I'm still studying.

Pronoun and clause errors: 'the only members in my family are my parents and I' should have a comma before 'and'; 'as them' is informal and should be 'as they do' for clarity. 'I'm still doing my studies' is wordy; 'I'm still studying' is more natural. Suggestion: Use 'as they do' for comparison and prefer concise phrasing like 'I'm still studying'.

× My my hobby is crochet, reading, and listening to music and I would say that my mom and dad doesn't have those hobbies because there are to be.

✓ My hobbies are crochet, reading, and listening to music, and I would say that my mom and dad don't have those hobbies.

Multiple issues: duplicate 'My my' is typographical. Subject-verb agreement: 'my mom and dad doesn't' should be 'don't'. The clause 'because there are to be' is meaningless and should be omitted. Also use plural 'hobbies are' rather than singular 'hobby is' when listing multiple items. Suggestion: Remove duplicates, ensure subject-verb agreement with compound subjects ('mom and dad don't'), and remove unclear phrases.