Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は主題を示しておりポイントはあるが、構造が不完全で文法ミスと不明瞭な末尾があるため伝わりにくいです。改善点：1) 文を整理して主題文（topic sentence）を明確にする。2) Supporting detailsは2〜3文に留め、接続語（for example, moreover, so）を正しく使う。3) 文法（時制・語順）と不要な語の削除を確認する。具体的には “Also I when.” のような未完成文を作らない。

Example: I enjoy yoga and running because regular exercise helps me stay healthy and reduces stress. I practice yoga every day to improve my flexibility and calm my mind. In addition, I go running twice a week to build stamina.

Suggestion: 回答は直接的で理解できるが、語彙の選択と表現の自然さを改善できます。改善点：1) 「families」は誤用なので「family」に直す。2) 理由や具体例を一つ追加して情報を豊かにする。3) 「so I was called by mom」は意味が曖昧なので、意図する表現（例えば“my mom often called me to dinner”など）を明確にする。

Example: When I was a child, my favourite hobby was playing Uno. I often played it with my family and friends because it was quick and fun. Sometimes my mum would call me away from the game when it was time for dinner.

Suggestion: 意図は伝わるものの、文法と論理のつながりが不十分です。改善点：1) 否定の後に続ける理由を明確にする（topic sentence + supporting detail）。2) 「However my job, my hobby is changing to improve my health.」のような混乱した構文を直す。3) 接続詞（however, but, because）を正しく使って一貫した説明をする。

Example: No, I do not still have my childhood hobby. My interests have changed as I grew older, and now I focus more on activities like yoga and running to stay healthy because of my busy job.

Suggestion: 良い点：明確で直接的な答え。改善点：1) 自然な時制と語法に注意（"are doing yoga"→"do yoga"または"practice yoga"）。2) 理由と感情をもう少し具体的に描写することで印象が良くなる。3) 接続語を整理して流れを滑らかにする。

Example: Yes. My mother and sister both practice yoga with me because I recommended it to them, and we often enjoy doing sessions together at the weekend. It’s a nice way for us to relax and stay fit.

× Yes, my hobby is yoga and running because exercise is important to keep my health and relieve my stress.

✓ Yes, my hobbies are yoga and running because exercise is important for maintaining my health and relieving my stress.

The sentence has issues with noun number and word forms. 'Hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' because two activities are listed (Grammar problem type 1). 'Running' as a noun is fine, but the verb phrase 'important to keep my health' is awkward; use the preposition 'for' and the gerund 'maintaining' for natural phrasing. Also use the gerund 'relieving' rather than the noun phrase 'relieve my stress'. Suggestion: match singular/plural, use 'for maintaining' and parallel gerunds for clarity.

× So I do yoga every day. Also I when.

✓ So I do yoga every day. Also, I used to when I was younger. (If meaning: I also did it when I was a child.)

The fragment 'Also I when.' lacks a verb and object, creating a sentence without a verb (Grammar problem type 23) and general sentence structure error (26). I provided a plausible completion depending on intended meaning. Suggestion: always include a verb and clarify the time reference, e.g., 'I also did it when I was a child.'

× My hobby was Uno when I was a child.

✓ My hobby was playing Uno when I was a child.

The noun 'Uno' as a hobby is better expressed with the gerund 'playing Uno' to indicate the activity (Grammar problem type 8). This clarifies the action as a hobby. Suggestion: use 'playing' before game names when describing hobbies.

× I played Uno with my families and friends anywhere and anytime, so I was called by mom.

✓ I played Uno with my family and friends anywhere and anytime, so my mom would call me (to join or to play).

'Families' is incorrect; use the singular collective 'family' (Grammar problem type 1). 'Called by mom' is passive and unnatural here; use active 'my mom would call me' or 'my mom called me' depending on tense (Grammar problem type 21/26). Suggestion: use 'family' and prefer active voice: 'my mom would call me'.

× No, I don't have the same hobby since I was a child.

✓ No, I haven't had the same hobby since I was a child.

When expressing an action that started in the past and continues to the present, use the present perfect ('haven't had') rather than simple present 'don't have' with 'since' (Grammar problem type 6). Suggestion: use present perfect with 'since' to show continuity.

× However my job, my hobby is changing to improve my health.

✓ However, my hobbies have changed because of my job and to improve my health.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear: 'my job, my hobby is changing' mixes subjects and lacks agreement (Grammar problem type 26 and 27). Use plural 'hobbies' if referring to multiple activities and present perfect 'have changed' to indicate change up to now, and clarify reason 'because of my job and to improve my health.' Suggestion: separate ideas into a clear clause explaining cause and effect.

× Yes, my mother and sister are doing yoga with me because I recommended yoga to them, so I enjoy yoga.

✓ Yes, my mother and sister do yoga with me because I recommended it to them, so I enjoy practicing yoga with them.

'Are doing yoga' is grammatically acceptable, but 'recommended yoga to them' is slightly awkward; use 'recommended it to them.' Also 'so I enjoy yoga' is fine but more natural to specify 'practicing yoga with them.' This refines style and pronoun use (Grammar problem type 12 and 10). Suggestion: use pronoun 'it' for the previously mentioned activity and keep parallel gerunds for clarity.