Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and check word choice (e.g., 'parties' → 'Pilates').

Example: I have several hobbies, and one of my favorites is Pilates. I enjoy it because it boosts my energy and improves my posture, which makes me feel healthier and more confident after a session.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words to add a specific example or brief reason. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and correct tense consistency.

Example: Yes. When I was a child I enjoyed coloring and sketching because it let me express my imagination. For example, I used to spend hours drawing animals and decorating them with bright colors, which was both relaxing and fun.

Suggestion: Open with a direct statement that answers the question, then give concise reasons and a brief example. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I did love' → 'I loved'; 'I am control' → 'I am in control'). Avoid overlong phrasing.

Example: Yes, sketching is a hobby I've kept since childhood. I still sketch regularly because it helps me express my ideas and gives me a sense of control and calm when I'm working on a piece.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then compare similarities and differences with specific details. Use linking words like 'however' or 'while' for contrast and avoid vague phrases like 'put it out'.

Example: Yes, some of my hobbies overlap with my family. For instance, my brother and I both enjoy sketching; however, my sister prefers sports while I focus on Pilates, so we share some interests but not all.

× I do have a lot of hobbies, one of them being Pilates.

✓ I do have a lot of hobbies, one of them is Pilates.

The original uses a gerund phrase 'one of them being Pilates' which is informal and awkward in this context. Replacing it with a finite clause 'one of them is Pilates' provides a clear subject-verb structure appropriate for a spoken answer. Suggestion: Use a full clause with a verb for clarity: 'one of them is...'.

× After I do parties and I feel really good about myself.

✓ After I do Pilates I feel really good about myself.

The phrase 'After I do parties' seems to be a word choice or structure error—'parties' does not fit the context. It likely should refer to the hobby previously mentioned, Pilates. Also the conjunction 'and' is redundant when expressing sequence and result. Suggestion: Keep subject and verb consistent and refer to the right activity: 'After I do Pilates, I feel...'.

× When I was a child, I loved doing coloring or sketching, for example, because it felt like I was expressing myself in those lines and I was expressing myself within those colors.

✓ When I was a child, I loved coloring or sketching, for example, because it felt like I was expressing myself in those lines and colors.

The phrase 'doing coloring' is ungrammatical; 'coloring' is the noun/gerund form needed. Repeating 'I was expressing myself' is redundant. Also 'within those colors' is awkward; 'in those colors' or simply 'colors' is concise. Suggestion: Use the gerund 'coloring' and avoid redundant clauses.

× I was coloring and I feel like it was fun.

✓ I colored and I felt like it was fun.

The sentence mixes past continuous 'was coloring' with present 'I feel'. Since the speaker refers to childhood, the past tense should be used consistently: 'I colored' (or 'I used to color') and 'I felt'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent when describing past habits: 'I used to color and it was fun.'

× For that, I can give example of sketching again, because as I did love doing it as a child, I love doing it right now too, because it does make me feel like I'm expressing myself, like I am control of it, and I love being in control of things.

✓ For that, I can give the example of sketching again, because since I loved doing it as a child, I love doing it now too, because it makes me feel like I'm expressing myself, like I am in control of it, and I love being in control of things.

Multiple issues: 'give example of' needs the definite article 'the example'. 'As I did love' is awkward; 'since I loved' better expresses continuity. 'Right now' unnecessary; 'now' suffices. 'Does make me feel' can be simplified to 'makes me feel'. Crucially, 'I am control of it' is missing the preposition 'in' before 'control'. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions ('in control'), articles ('the example'), and simpler tense expressions for clarity.

× I've never thought of it that way, but my brother loves sketching too and I love sketching.

✓ I've never thought of it that way, but my brother loves sketching too and so do I.

Repeating 'I love sketching' is grammatically correct but stylistically repetitive. Using the pronoun inversion 'so do I' is concise and natural in spoken English. Suggestion: Use 'so do I' to avoid repetition.

× So yes, I would put it out that I do have the same or similar hobbies as my family members.

✓ So yes, I would say that I have the same or similar hobbies as my family members.

'Put it out' is an incorrect idiom here; the correct verb is 'say' or 'point out'. Also 'do have' is unnecessary emphasis in this neutral response; 'I have' is sufficient. Suggestion: Use 'say' and avoid unnecessary auxiliary 'do' unless emphasizing.