Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, my favourite hobby is cooking.”), avoid fillers and repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words (e.g., “because” / “so”). Use correct grammar for verb forms and prepositions (e.g., ‘when I cook’, ‘upload to YouTube’).

Example: Yes, my favorite hobby is cooking because I enjoy experimenting with new recipes. For example, I often watch and upload my cooking videos to YouTube, which helps me get feedback and improve my techniques.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition: say ‘Yes, I used to play the piano.’ Follow with a specific reason and a linking word (e.g., ‘because’), and use concise phrasing. Correct tense and word choice: ‘when I was a child’ then simple past or used to.

Example: Yes, when I was a child I used to play the piano because it relaxed me and helped me relieve stress. For instance, I would practice for half an hour after school to feel calmer.

Suggestion: Be coherent and structured: begin with a direct answer (‘Yes, I have continued playing the piano since childhood.’), then add one or two clear supporting details with linking phrases (e.g., ‘I still play in public sometimes, for example…’). Fix grammar (‘it grew up with me’ → ‘it has grown with me’ is awkward; better: ‘I have played it throughout my life’). Avoid vague or confusing phrases.

Example: Yes, I have continued playing the piano since childhood. I still perform occasionally in shopping malls, and playing in public has helped me gain confidence and meet other musicians.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct subject-verb agreement: ‘No, we don’t have the same hobbies.’ Provide specific contrasts with linking words (e.g., ‘for example’, ‘whereas’). Keep sentences short and accurate and correct plural/singular forms (‘likes’, ‘paints’).

Example: No, we don’t share the same hobbies. For example, my mother likes cooking, I enjoy playing the piano, and my sister likes painting, so each of us has a different interest.

× Yes, my FA absolutely yes, my favorite hobby is uh, cooking because I uh, have fun when I cooking and uh, I uh, love to join and umm, be some submit with YouTube because it's slurred me and give me more experience about how to cook, uh, delicious dishes.

✓ Yes, my favorite hobby is cooking because I have fun when I cook, and I love to join and submit videos to YouTube because it inspires me and gives me more experience in cooking delicious dishes.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure issues (ID 26) and verb form errors (ID 8 and 9). 'have fun when I cooking' is incorrect: after 'when' use the base verb with appropriate tense, so 'when I cook'. 'be some submit with YouTube' is ungrammatical; correct phrasing is 'submit videos to YouTube'. 'it's slurred me' is wrong word choice and grammar; use 'it inspires me' or 'it motivates me'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement and parallel structure in the list ('I have fun... and I love...'). Suggestion: simplify long fragments, use clear verbs, and keep parallel structure when connecting clauses.

× Actually yes I when I was a child I like I prefer my favorite hobby is playing piano because I find it so relaxing for me and I can avoid my stress and be more restful when I play piano.

✓ Actually, when I was a child I liked and preferred playing the piano because I found it very relaxing and it helped me reduce stress and feel more rested when I played.

This sentence mixes present and past tenses (ID 5). Talking about childhood requires past tense: 'like' and 'prefer' should be 'liked' and 'preferred'. 'My favorite hobby is playing piano' should be aligned to past: 'preferred playing the piano'. 'I find' should be 'I found' and 'I can avoid my stress' should be 'it helped me reduce stress'. Advice: keep tense consistent when describing past experiences and use natural collocations like 'play the piano' and 'feel rested'.

× Also the piano because it's grow grew up with me until now I go to the malls and play piano and everybody, umm, club for me, uh, because I like it because for how many reasons?

✓ Also the piano, because it has grown up with me until now. I go to malls and play the piano, and everybody, umm, claps for me because I like it for many reasons.

The original mixes tenses and incorrect verb forms (IDs 9 and 26). 'it's grow grew up with me' is wrong; the present perfect passive/active idea should be 'it has grown with me' or 'it has grown up with me' (use 'has grown' for present perfect). 'play piano' should be 'play the piano'. 'club for me' is likely 'clap for me'—use correct verb. 'for how many reasons?' is awkward; use 'for many reasons'. Suggestion: use correct past participle ('has grown'), include articles for instruments ('the piano'), and choose correct verbs and clearer phrasing.

× Actually, no. Every member of my family have a different hobby. My mother like cooking and I prefer playing piano and my sister like to paint a lot of painting. Every one of us have a different hobby.

✓ Actually, no. Every member of my family has a different hobby. My mother likes cooking, I prefer playing the piano, and my sister likes to do a lot of painting. Everyone in my family has a different hobby.

There are subject-verb agreement errors (ID 27) and article/word-choice issues (ID 22/13). 'Every member... have' should be 'has' because 'every' makes the subject singular. 'My mother like' and 'my sister like' need 'likes'. 'Playing piano' should be 'playing the piano' for natural English. 'To paint a lot of painting' is redundant; use 'do a lot of painting' or 'paints a lot'. Also 'Every one' should be 'Everyone' (single word) and agree with 'has'. Suggestion: ensure singular verbs with singular subjects introduced by 'every', and use idiomatic expressions for activities (play the piano, do painting).