Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and word choice errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm), correct tense and articles, and use one or two specific supporting details with linking words. For example, replace 'haze the park to do some tracks in' with 'ride on park trails', and say 'after a busy day at school.'

Example: I do. One of my main hobbies is cycling with friends, especially after a busy day at school. We often ride on the park trails for about an hour, which helps me relax and stay fit. In addition, cycling gives me time to chat with friends and clear my mind before homework.

Suggestion: Improve grammar, clarity and specificity. Use past tense consistently for childhood activities, avoid confusing phrases like 'keep a face with my families', and reduce fillers. Add a specific example or memory and a linking word to connect ideas.

Example: Yes. When I was a child, I enjoyed playing badminton with my family, especially my grandparents. For example, we used to play every Sunday afternoon and sometimes watch local matches together, which made those weekends fun and memorable.

Suggestion: Be concise and correct tense and article use. Start with a direct topic sentence: say you have played badminton since age three, then give one or two clear supporting details and avoid repetition and fillers. Use linking words like 'since' and 'because' for coherence.

Example: Yes. I have played badminton since I was about three years old. My grandparents often took me to the local courts, and because we trained together regularly, I grew to love the sport and improved my skills over the years.

Suggestion: Answer directly and reduce repetition. Use one clear topic sentence stating you share hobbies with family, then give specific details (when you play, how often) and a linking word to explain purpose (e.g., 'so that'). Avoid fillers and plural/singular errors ('they are also big fans').

Example: Yes. I share several hobbies with my family, especially badminton with my grandparents. For example, we play together three times a week to stay healthy and to spend quality time, so it's both a social and fitness activity.

× I'm a big fan of going cycling with my friends, especially after busy day in school and after school.

✓ I'm a big fan of going cycling with my friends, especially after a busy day at school.

Missing articles and wrong preposition: 'a busy day' needs the indefinite article 'a'; use 'at school' to indicate location/time rather than 'in school' in this context. Also 'after school' is redundant when saying 'after a busy day at school'; choose one or combine clearly.

× We always tend to uh haze the park to do some tracks in.

✓ We always tend to go to the park to ride some routes.

Nonstandard verb 'haze' is incorrect and 'do some tracks in' is awkward. Use 'go to the park' for movement and 'ride some routes' or 'ride some tracks' for cycling. This fixes word choice and sentence structure.

× Uh Cycling is definitely entertaining and relaxing umm after school to do so.

✓ Cycling is definitely entertaining and relaxing after school.

Awkward placement 'to do so' is unnecessary. Capitalization after filler removed. Keep sentence concise: 'after school' modifies 'relaxing' and does not need extra phrase.

× Yes, for an early age, I have developed a hobby of playing badminton to keep a face with my families together, especially with my grandparents.

✓ Since an early age, I developed a hobby of playing badminton to keep in touch with my family, especially my grandparents.

Tense and phrasing: 'for an early age' is incorrect; use 'since an early age' or 'from an early age'. 'I have developed' suggests recent development; 'I developed' or 'I have had' fit better. 'Keep a face with my families together' is wrong—use 'keep in touch with my family' and 'family' should be singular collective noun.

× My grandparents are always, uh, extremely into watching or playing the badminton competition with me together.

✓ My grandparents were always very keen on watching or playing badminton competitions with me.

Pronoun 'together' is redundant with 'with me' and word order awkward. Use 'keen on' or 'interested in' and 'badminton competitions' without 'the'. Past tense 'were' fits if referring to childhood; keep consistent tense.

× It was extremely fun and interesting.

✓ It was extremely fun and interesting.

Sentence is grammatically correct but ensure tense matches previous context (past). No change needed; keep as past description.

× Yes I do, I have a hobby of playing badminton in the badminton court with my grandparents, which is the hobby I have had uh, since I was about 3 years old at the time.

✓ Yes, I do. I have had the hobby of playing badminton on the badminton court with my grandparents since I was about three years old.

Combine sentences and correct tense: use 'I have had' for an ongoing hobby since childhood. Use 'on the badminton court' or 'at the badminton court' and remove redundant 'at the time.' Spell out 'three' in speech transcripts optionally. Remove filler 'uh'.

× My grandparents always uh took me out on a journey to the uh, badminton courts and we play badminton together is really good.

✓ My grandparents always took me to the badminton courts, and we played badminton together; it was really enjoyable.

Tense consistency: use past 'took' and 'played' to match childhood context. Remove filler 'uh' and awkward phrase 'on a journey'. Fix fragment 'we play badminton together is really good' by making a complete clause.

× Yes I do, I have a lot in common to talk about with my grandparents or my parents for instance.

✓ Yes, I do. I have a lot in common with my grandparents and my parents, for instance.

Wrong verb phrase 'a lot in common to talk about with' is awkward; use 'have a lot in common with'. Use 'and' rather than 'or' if referring to both. Punctuation improved.

× Uh, I have the same hobby of playing with my uh grandparents.

✓ I have the same hobby of playing badminton with my grandparents.

Clarify 'playing' by specifying 'playing badminton' to avoid ambiguity. Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate phrasing.

× They are also big fan of playing badminton.

✓ They are also big fans of playing badminton.

Number agreement: 'fan' should be plural 'fans' to match plural subject 'They'. This is a singular/plural issue but also article/number.

× Uh, we always tend to play badminton together to keep healthy everyday.

✓ We always tend to play badminton together to stay healthy every day.

Use 'stay healthy' rather than 'keep healthy' for natural collocation. 'Every day' should be two words. Remove filler 'uh'.