Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and grammatical: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation sounds, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Focus on correct verb forms and word order.

Example: I enjoy singing. For example, when I sing my favorite songs I feel happy and relaxed, and it refreshes my mind after a long day.

Suggestion: Use simple past tense for childhood activities and provide a reason with coherent linking. Avoid repeating and correct verb forms and word choice.

Example: Yes. When I was a child I wanted to be an actress and a singer because I loved performing in front of people, and I enjoyed putting on shows for my family.

Suggestion: Clarify the hobby (doctor is a profession) and use correct grammar to express long-term interest. State a clear topic sentence, give reasons with specific details, and avoid filler words.

Example: Yes. I have been interested in medicine since childhood because I admire doctors who help people; this inspired me to study science and volunteer at clinics to learn more.

Suggestion: Answer directly and provide a concrete example of a shared hobby. Use linking words to explain why you share it and avoid vague statements and hesitations.

Example: Yes. My family and I enjoy singing together; for instance, we often have karaoke nights where everyone chooses songs and we practice harmonies, which brings us closer.

× Yes, singing in my hobbies, uh, I, uh, when I saw sing a song, I was very happy and enjoy, enjoy this song and it uh, it uh, refresh my mind and uh, wonderful time.

✓ Yes, singing is one of my hobbies. When I sing a song, I feel very happy and enjoy it; it refreshes my mind and gives me a wonderful time.

Multiple issues: the student used 'singing in my hobbies' which requires the gerund as a noun phrase with a linking verb ('singing is one of my hobbies') (Verb + -ing form). 'When I saw sing a song' is ungrammatical; correct is 'When I sing a song' (present tense habit) (Present tense issue ID 6 but primary is gerund usage). 'enjoy, enjoy this song' needs object 'it' and correct verb form 'enjoy' with subject 'I' and present simple for habits. 'refresh my mind' requires third person singular 'refreshes' to agree with 'it' (Subject-verb agreement/Third person singular). Suggestions: use clear subject-verb structures, use gerund phrases like 'singing is one of my hobbies', use present simple for habitual actions ('I sing', 'it refreshes').

× Yes, when I am I was a child, my hobbies was an actress and singer and this time I am crazy about this because I am attract. I was attracted.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, my hobbies were acting and singing, and at that time I was crazy about them because I was attracted to it.

Errors: 'when I am I was a child' mixes tenses; use past 'when I was a child' (Past tense issue). 'my hobbies was' should be 'my hobbies were' for plural subject (Singular and plural issue / Subject-verb agreement). 'an actress and singer' is wrong for 'hobbies'; use gerunds 'acting and singing' (Verb + -ing form). 'this time I am crazy about this' should be past 'at that time I was crazy about them' (Past tense). 'I am attract' is incorrect; correct is 'I was attracted' or 'I was attracted to it' (Past participle form). Suggestions: keep consistent past tense for childhood; match plural subjects with plural verbs; use gerunds for activities; use 'attracted to' + noun.

× Yes uh, I have a hobby which is a doctor because, uh, it's very, uh, passionate and, uh, wonderful degree and I attract this dress code and, umm, I.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby of being a doctor because it is very rewarding and I am passionate about it; I also like the professional dress code.

Errors: 'a hobby which is a doctor' should be 'a hobby of being a doctor' using gerund/noun phrase (Verb + -ing form). 'it's very, uh, passionate' misuses 'passionate' (an adjective describing people); use 'I am passionate' or 'it is rewarding' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'wonderful degree' is unclear; 'rewarding' or 'fulfilling' fits better. 'I attract this dress code' should be 'I am attracted to this dress code' (Incorrect use of verbs and prepositions). Suggestions: use 'being' + profession for hobbies, use appropriate adjectives describing feelings or qualities, and use 'attracted to' when describing attraction to something.

× Yes, uh, I have the same hobbies as my family members because when I was a child, uh, my family member, uh, uh, yeah, in my head, this topic.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobbies as my family members because when I was a child my family influenced me and this idea stayed in my mind.

Errors: 'my family member' (singular) vs 'my family members' (plural) is inconsistent; use 'my family' or 'my family members' (Singular and plural issue). The phrase 'in my head, this topic' is unidiomatic; correct is 'this idea stayed in my mind' or 'it stayed with me' (Incorrect use of pronouns/phrase). Suggestions: use clear subjects ('my family influenced me'), maintain plural/singular consistency, and use idiomatic expressions like 'stayed in my mind'.