Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence naming 2–3 main hobbies, then give one brief supporting detail using a linking phrase. Avoid repetition and filler words.

Example: I have several hobbies. Mainly, I enjoy reading books and watching films in my free time. Also, I often go to cafés with friends to chat and relax, which helps me unwind after a busy day.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and specific examples; avoid vague phrases and repeated hesitations. Use a linking word to add detail about favorite genres or reasons you liked them.

Example: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. For example, I often read storybooks, and I liked watching movies, especially action and emotional dramas. Because I enjoyed exciting plots and strong characters, those genres were my favorites.

Suggestion: Answer directly which single hobby you've had since childhood and then contrast how it has changed now. Keep sentences short and use linking words like 'still' or 'now' to show continuity.

Example: Yes, I have kept reading since childhood. I still enjoy reading stories, but now I also watch technology videos online to learn about new gadgets. In short, reading remains my long-term hobby while my interests have broadened.

Suggestion: Start with a direct statement about similarity, then give a specific example and a brief explanation. Remove repetitions and hesitations.

Example: Not all of my family share my hobbies, but my brother and I do. For instance, we both enjoy watching films and reading books, and we often recommend titles to each other.

× Well I have lot of hobbies mostly I like reading books, watching movies when there is a free time or or other than the hobbies which I like is I usually go with my friends outside and outside and we sit on any cafe and we talk with each other.

✓ Well, I have a lot of hobbies. Mostly I like reading books and watching movies when there is free time. Other than those hobbies, I usually go out with my friends and we sit in a cafe and talk to each other.

The original sentence omits the article 'a' before 'lot' (singular/plural issue) and uses awkward plural/reference forms ('there is a free time', 'any cafe'). Corrections: add 'a' for 'a lot of hobbies'; use 'when there is free time' or better 'when I have free time'; replace 'other than the hobbies which I like is' with 'other than those hobbies' for clarity and correct plural reference; use 'go out' not 'go with my friends outside and outside'; use 'sit in a cafe' and 'talk to each other'. Suggestions: break long run-on sentences into shorter ones, ensure articles with countable nouns, and match singular/plural references consistently.

× Yeah, there were a lot of hobbies which I do in my childhood. I usually read books and my free time I watch my different type of movies, like action movies or some sort of sad movies. And yeah, I love to. Yeah, I love such type of.

✓ Yeah, there were a lot of hobbies that I did in my childhood. I usually read books, and in my free time I watched different types of movies, like action movies or sad movies. And yeah, I loved them.

The speaker discusses childhood (past), so present tense 'do' and 'watch' are incorrect. Change to past tense 'did' and 'watched' (past tense issue). Also correct pluralization: 'different type of movies' -> 'different types of movies'. The fragment 'I love to. Yeah, I love such type of.' is incomplete; replace with 'I loved them' to express past preference. Suggestions: keep tense consistent when describing past habits, pluralize 'type' when generalizing, and avoid sentence fragments.

× Yeah, there are lot of hobbies which I carry since my childhood. Like when I was childhood I loved to watching movies or. I love to watch different type of technology videos in my current age. I also love to read.

✓ Yeah, there are a lot of hobbies that I have carried since my childhood. When I was a child, I loved watching movies. I love to watch different types of technology videos now. I also love to read.

Mix of present and past requires correct forms. 'There are lot' needs article 'a' (singular/plural) and better verb 'have carried' to indicate continuing action since childhood (present perfect: present relevance) or 'have had'. 'When I was childhood' is incorrect; use 'when I was a child'. 'Loved to watching' is wrong because 'loved' + gerund uses 'loved watching' (verb + -ing form issue) or 'loved to watch'. 'Different type' should be 'different types' (plural). Suggestions: use 'have carried' or 'have had' for actions continuing from past to present, use 'a child', use correct gerund forms, and pluralize count nouns.

× Not all members but my my brother and I have the same hobbies since our childhood. We love to watch movies or or to read books. Yeah, my brother and I have the same same hobbies.

✓ Not all family members, but my brother and I have had the same hobbies since our childhood. We love watching movies and reading books. Yeah, my brother and I have the same hobbies.

Phrase 'Not all members' is vague; 'family members' is clearer. 'Have the same hobbies since our childhood' should use present perfect 'have had' to show continuation from past to present (present perfect/past continuity—fits both IDs but primarily singular/plural and tense). 'We love to watch movies or or to read books' is repetitive and uses 'or' incorrectly; use 'watching movies and reading books' (verb + -ing form). Remove duplicated words 'my my' and 'same same'. Suggestions: use present perfect for ongoing situations, use gerunds after 'love' for activities, and avoid word duplication.